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I am a budding electronic music producer who's trying his hand-erm-hoof at writing. I use ClubCreate, FLStudio 11, and play the piano and ukulele. check my channel for Let's Plays and Music and stuff.


Something happens and Fluttershy's wings are gone. She can't do anything about it as she falls from a great height. Rainbow Dash tries to catch her falling friend... I will let you read it instead of telling the whole thing.

I was on /r/mylittleonions and I saw this pic. I couldn't help but try my hand again at sad stories.

The artist's name is ZirBronium and has a deviantArt. Go ahead and go look at his stuff by clicking his name.

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Not bad. But not good either. I don't think that I could write a better story but I think that there's definitely room for improvement.:applejackunsure:
(Oh and you should be sad for killing the best pony:flutterrage:)

Good job! But Fluttershy... :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttershyouch::fluttershbad:

One thing though, you should have a "Random" tag for Fluttershy's wings.

My favorite part?

"Reach for me..." :fluttercry:

She stayed at the grave, sad. Sad that she won't get to see Fluttershy again. Sad that she won't see the beautiful, pink flowing mane and the intricate teal eyes that she so loved. Sad that she would never hear Fluttershy's soft voice again. But, most of all, sad that she wasn't able to catch her.

She remained at the grave for a while more.

She wiped her tears again, and flew slowly to catch up to her friends. After all, there was no point in waiting for someone who would never catch up.

Didn't I just read something like this in one of RainbowBob's vastly superior fics?


Believe me, friend. I am.


I should? Alright. I'll do it.

I just read the edit and I have to say that it was better than last time. You deserved that like. Keep up the good work.


Glad to hear you liked the edit. If you want to look at my other works, just tell me what your tastes are and I'll see if I can find anything that suits your tastes in the stuff that I write.

3024351 I just read that comment and realized I only read the part which was an answer to my comment :twilightsheepish: :facehoof:

I vaguely sorta kinda liked this :twilightoops: it wasn't bad but I think I didn't get as invested in it as I was hoping for because it was all happening so quick, it definitely wasn't bad though! :twilightsmile:


I was actually trying to go for the slow and descriptive sort of pace.


Hmm, maybe try going uber nuts with drawing it out? like adding heaps and heaps of description and stuff? Or just ignore me cause it might just be me :twilightsmile: as long as you're happy with your work


One problem.

That was uber nuts and descriptive for me.

I just lack experience and finesse that a "true" author has.

Hahaha, don't worry, just keep putting your work out there and I'm sure it'll meet my ridiculously high standards :derpytongue2: it definitely wasn't the worst thing I've read and it was still worth reading :twilightsmile:


Yaaay I somewhat impressed someone today

Sort of

Kind of

Not really I guess...

Hahaha, nah I'm impressed :raritywink

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