Griffin the Griffin

by BlackWing

Captain Gilda (86)

Captain Gilda

=Gilda=

Entry One,

Since I was able to buy a blank book, I decided to keep a log of things. Thoughts, discoveries, plans and stuff. Since I'm starting a little late, I guess I'll make this first entry about what's happened up till now.

Well, I 'appeared' out in some desert, but not the sandy kind, the 'land is so dry it's cracked' kind. Wild west type. I was found by Gilda, and the first thing I thought when I saw her was 'Crap. Now I have to deal with this bitch.....' She's harsh, sarcastic, angsty, and just like me. She's also mopey, probably about the whole Rainbow Dash thing. I don't like people in general, and let's face it, I'm a jerk. I don't want to put up with another me. Better just get my bearings and head to Ponyville.

Entry Two

Turns out I was wrong about about Gilda, she CAN be civil if she tries. I don't know why she stuck around, or helped me in the first place, especially after me, being the idiot I am, jumped off a freaking cliff. She pretty much had to baby me for a week, something I wasn't too happy about. At least I've eaten something. I need to go back to where she 'found' me and look for clues. Maybe something useful came with when that guy booted me here, whoever he was anyways.

Entry Three

I. Am. Insane. I dove down the throat of a dragon and killed it. I ripped off a scale, cut off it's arm, and made a sword out of it. I ate the meat off the arm..... what the hell is wrong with me? What I just did..... is NOT normal. I had to go find some Aloe for Gilda's minor burns, and she started questioning my 'Amnesia' story. I should have known, that NEVER works. I'm eventually going to have to tell her, before I get to involved. If she leaves because i'm 'crazy' before I get too attached, that'll save a lot of heartache......

Entry Four

Well, I told her what I am, and she didn't freak out. Probably thinks I'm crazy, just like I said. Saved some ponies from diamond dog slavers. Turns out the problem is a lot more widespread than just the Rarity problem. That, and this world has just as many problems as back home. Difference is, it's actually possible for one person to change this world. The only way to get something done on earth is make a petition, get a million signatures, harass a politician, wait a year for them to get back to you, then another while they debate it in a committee, before finally deciding it's too expensive and shutting you down. Here, I can just kill whoever the problem is.

Entry Five

All caught up to the present now. Manehatten. Sold some gems we looted to a crooked jewelry salesman....sales pony? Whatever. Made quite a bit of bits, and got a bit of a handle on how this world works. You can find scum and villainy wherever you look, you just need to LOOK. I'm pretty good at flying now. It's unbelievable, and the view is fantastic. Also, for some reason, I noticed my eyes keep getting drawn to Gilda's backside. Problems with this: First, I'm a loser. Gilda isn't into 'uncool' people. Two, she's a bitch. Yeah, she's got a bad history, but she's still a bitch..... then again, so am I. I don't think that much anger would work out too well together. Three, when we reach Ponyville, I may very well decide to stay there, and that would be it. There's no way a dorky virgin like me is EVER getting laid, especially not by her. Might as well put it out of my mind.

Entry Six

Damn Ponyville.... I wish I never came here...... I guess I was pretty cruel, but, they deserved it, didn't they? After what they did........ When Pinkie Pie laughed at me, all I could think of was everyone who laughed at my misfortune. When Dash mocked me, is was just like before. When she hit me, it was just like before. When she jumped me and made me feel ashamed of being who I was, it was just like before. Everyone in town, the way they looked at me, telling me to get out and never come back, all with their eyes. They have no idea who I am, and they already hate me. It was supposed to be different. Equestria was supposed to be DIFFERENT! I saw everything that was wrong with my world, everything I hated and tried to escape from, in two ponies, bearers of the Elements of Harmony no less! These were my idols, and they completely ruined it. I can't believe I looked up to them. Pinkie Pie was just an accident, she had no idea ho it'd make me feel. She was oblivious to other people's feelings, as usual. Gilda, Cranky Doodle Donkey, and now I'm just one more on the list of people she's inadvertently made miserable. Rainbow Dash HAS no excuse. She deliberately made me feel like shit. Hell, GILDA is nicer than she is, and she's a bitch...... Long story short, I think I died a little inside today.

Entry Seven

Busted Trixie out of prison. I'm not sure why Gilda decided to do it, but I gave her the decision, and I'm not going to go over her head on it. Well, if things don't work out, we can always eat her, so that's a plus.

Entry Eight

Saved Prince Blueblood from diamond dog slavers, turns out we were right above one of their outposts for a larger den. Killed all the fighters, demanded the slaves and every other useful thing from them. Two of the slaves were dogs themselves. I decided to keep them around. Having your enemy's eyes is always a good thing. I don't think Gilda or Trixie was too happy about it though, but even they can see past their hate to how useful they'll be. Funny, we're less prejudice than ponies are, and they're supposed to be with the whole 'friendship and harmony' deal. I guess that only extends to other ponies. Anyone else can go rot.

Entry Nine

It's been a while since I wrote. Found out there's another human in this universe. Echo the Diamond Dog, Etch and Growl say he's an 'Alpha Breed'. He's strong, fast, and smart, but not too skilled in terms of weaponry, although he can light his claws on fire for elemental damage. I burn pretty easy, so it's not very much fun. He fights at medium speed and isn't very acrobatic, meaning I could easily keep up with protecting myself. I just have to remember not to let down my guard. Also, if I didn't have a bounty before, I definitely have one now. Beating the tar out of a city official will do that. My opinions on Gilda are....... indifferent. At this point, I'm pretty sure she likes me, by the way she looks at me, and the things she says, but is between that and finding me infuriatingly annoying. I'm not sure how I feel about her, but I certainly don't dislike her. She's still a bitch, but she's stayed by me all this time, and I think she's started growing on me.

Entry Ten

Met the Vren tribe today, (Bipedal cats, like Khajiit, but more adorable) by means of one of them sneaking into our tree house and putting a dagger to my throat. Turns out we've got some posers pretending to be use. Well, we can't have anyone making use of our bad reputation, so we're going to have to straighten things out. Might make the local tribe an ally, or at least get Nadene as a healer, which we seriously need. Since they're cat like, they're VERY acrobatic, fast, stealthy, and skilled. Rogue types, perfect assassins and thieves, just like their fictional counterparts. Also kinda cute, and pretty attractive. (Side note, too busy itching lately to write, molting sucks. I ripped out all my feathers and spent the time unable to fly. Don't do it again. I need to fly to be able to fight.)

'Hmph..... so he thought I was a bitch, and turned out he was right, and even if he stuck with me only because he had nowhere else to go..... he stayed. Funny how things worked out....... And to think, when I found him, I almost left him there. I already know all of this.... what else is there?'

Entry Eleven

After dealing with the imposters and getting Nadene to come with us, we began raiding temples. A bunch were empty, but one that was guarded by what else but spiders, had a large number of valuables inside, including a magic amulet that can turn me human. I don't see much use for this on myself, but I think it will be quite useful against trickster enemies as it dispels all falsehoods. It uses Latin, so, I have a whole bunch of different options here based on what I know. Ignis is fire and lightning, Aqua is water, Umbra is shadow, Lumen is light, Ventus is wind, Tempesta is, as far as I can tell, turbulence, Terra for earth, and Tremor for vibration as elemental spells. Lacero for cut, Accelero for speed, and Obscuro for invisibility as buffs, Medico for heal and Protego for protect as defense, Umbra for muffle and Furia for berserk as debuffs, and Volare or Vola for fly, which I haven't tested yet as I can already do that. Maybe making other objects levitate? I know that each spell is going to have multiple uses, just figuring out all their applications is going to be a lot of work, and will take a lot of time in a test area, more time than I have.....

'I haven't really focused on learning magic myself...... it's what made him nearly unstoppable. If I want to be on the same level, I'm going to have to work on this myself. I'll use his research notes, but if he's going to make me the leader, I should act like it and start taking charge, figuring things out for myself. Hmm..... Should I focus on elemental spells, boosts, debilitating enemies, or a defensive role?.......... I need time to think, and I can do that while we're underway. Let's get a course first.'

I walked onto the bridge where Steelhorn was sitting in the captain's chair, Cable was at the PA switchboard, and the two dogs were looking at an integrated table map of everywhere we'd been so far.

"So.... what'd he say?"

"...... Well, he made me captain while he's on the mend. What targets to we have?"

"Clay Pallor to the north, Marble Pillars to the west, and...... the Stony Fields to the east. They're all smaller dens, except the fields which is actually the site of a battle. It's contested, with no less than three different dens fighting over it at all times. It would be easy to do some raids, as their attention will be focused elsewhere." Growl explained, laying out a map.

"Hmm.... either of those smaller targets could be good places to start while I figure out what I'm doing, and the battlefield will be a high risk, high reward kind of deal. Might be able to make some allies by influencing the battle to go a certain way. We're definitely going to want to go there at some point...."

"We could always hit the one in the west, then sweep to the north, and finally east." Steelhorn added.

"Sounds good to me. Um..... set sail?"

"Aye!"

I was originally going to make Gilda's development into an interactive bit where you get to decide what she learns and where she goes...... then I decided..... Nah.

Comments

[Leviathan Splash]

Y'know, I'm no longer surprised at this story's update speed.

[Firetitus]

holy shit another!

[Jane]

1221955
Tell me about it.

[Forevermore]

And now we get to see Griffin's innermost thoughts

[DirtyBlue929]

Welp, I'm officially sticking with my "Griffon has a slight god complex and issues with accepting other people's point of view" theory. As usual, I'm attempting to be brutally honest about how Griffin comes off to me (as an average ever-so-slightly traumatized middle-class teen), and as usual, he's coming off as kind of elitist, spiteful, and introverted.

FAKEDIT: I think a good comparison would be Scott Pilgrim. Griffin seems to think like this-
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and possibly this-
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and definitely this-
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[Roran Dreamon]

1222021 BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA awesome.

[Sturrn]

The night before classes start up and right as I'm going to bed...
-Sturrn

[Jack D. Knights]

[Dusk Apollo]

Why do fics always update directly before I go to bed?

*reads a/n* I'm not sure if that was trolling, laziness, or common sense...

[vampire48]

Gilda:"you still think I'm a bitch"
Griffin:"yes"
Gilda:

[DirtyBlue929]

1222080

but seriously, that was a genuine comparison. Slightly delusional about the past and their own personality. Not exactly a good thing.

[lolz anonymous]

i thought gilda had already learned to fight with magic. i mean not in depth, but... you know something.

[Darth_Biomech]

I wonder... If there was no Ember, will be story turning in same way but only with another character crippling Griffin?

[Bottlecap]

I am so glad that you didn't make it interactive, that would've killed part of my love for this story.
Anyway, great chapter!

[Mondays Dawn]

1222171
its because the world is a horrible place.

[JMACOB]

MOAR MOAR MOAR!!!

Great chapter again and uploaded so quickly.

[Th4t Dark c0rner]

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As above indicated, i have nothing more to say.

[Mavis]

Overall story is nice, diffrent in a good way.

Still even though Griffin is on board of airship i am surprised there were no major assassination attempt yet. Dragons are bound to have powerful contacts as well as slaves right? :o

[Yuki Harima]

Great chapter I notice some error like about about in there. I could be wrong since it is way too early for me

[chavis54]

That author note? I KNOW YOU LIED YOU SLIBBA SLABBA AMERICAN!!!!!!

[BlackWing]

Yeah, he DOES have a bit of a god complex. That's kind of what I was going for.

[BlackWing]

1223474 I'm Canadian

[Derpamon]

Reading Complete:
Results:
PRETTY DAMN GOOD

[Doctor D]

This is gonna rock... Can't wait!

[VagueDrake]

Here's a short review, provided to you by a person who makes his living by insulting people's hard work on a daily basis.

Overall rating: Entertaining [ 7 / 10 ]

When I first picked up this story, I was rather amazed. Three hundred thousand words is a rather impressive length for fan fiction, and the "Unfinished" tag suggest that there will be more of it in the future. For the sake of comparison, "War and Peace", a classic novel, contains about 550,000 words, while "Fallout: Equestria" spans approximately 625,000 words. However, length itself is definitely a lousy way to determine the quality of the novel, as proven by the "Twilight" series. Therefore, I gave "Griffin the Griffin" a short read.

At first, I was not too impressed. The story starts off just like dozens of other Human in Equestria fanfics: a powerful creature transports a human to the magical land of Equestria, providing little, if any, reasoning for doing so. The transformation into a griffin is a very nice touch, though, and the introduction of one of my favorite characters, Gilda, inspired me to read on, and I was not at all disappointed. A colorful and lively, yet ruthless world, ignorant and racist ponies, nice bits of comedy in form of letters to Celestia and Luna: I was in love with the story. Griffin the griffin travels around the world, gathers companions, builds up strength, all with a clear goal in mind. He is set to save the ones whom ponies do not give a single fuck about, and does everything in his power to make the world a better place. And then... shit happens.

The problems begin with the appearance of Echo. Suddenly, our hero is not unique. On a moment's notice, he is not a lonely hero, fighting against the entire world. The same exact problem that haunts MMORPGs strikes this novel: how can someone be "The Chosen One", if there are many other heroes, who sound and just like him, running around the world? There is no more quest to save the world, there is a competition on who does it faster. Instead of uniting their efforts, the heroes desperately try to figure out whose balls are bigger and whose sword is longer.

And, of course, there is the Gala. There are just too many original characters that, I assume, come from sidefics to the main storyline. However, I did not read these stories yet, I do not know who these people are and, to be honest, I do not give a crap. For example, I did read the story of Ember, but if I did not, the part where she shows up would be just plain confusing to me. There was no introduction to her whatsoever, just like with with all other characters that the author suddenly throw together.

At the time of writing this review, I did not finish the story yet. In fact, I gave up trying to follow what is going on somewhere around chapter 75. I am now skipping several chapters ahead, in hopes that Griffin will get to himself back together and realize that he somehow forgot about hundreds of slaves that the Diamond Dogs still hold, along with the Diamond Dogs, who are forced to utilize slave labor out of fear of dragons. I also wish that the author stops being such a suck-up to sidefic authors and reach some kind of a conclusion to this adventure, but the chances are slim.

Overall, I do consider "Griffin the Griffin" a good story. All in all, it has solid storyline, strong characters, interesting narration. I have noticed some grammatical errors and typos, yet they do not interfere with the general flow of narration. While some parts of the novel plain disappointed me, I still give it seven out of ten bitWolfies.

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[chavis54]

1223798YOU SLIBBA SLABBA CANADIAN!

[BlackWing]

1224561 Thank you for a well thought out, honest opinion with solid reasoning behind it. I agree, there was a lot that got screwed up when I suddenly started doing crossovers. I suggest skipping to chapter 82, when Aoi get's off the ship. The entire Grand Galloping Gala arc was just a load of insanity anyways, and the story is getting back to it's roots after that point, only occasionally running into the others.

[Reaper1oo]

Ref: 1223798

That would make you the eighth I've seen state such,
I wish there was a poll asking all fimfiction users where they are from...
(with the ability to choose bi-national answers)

[GuyFace]

Guys, shut the fuck up for a minute. He's posted three updates in like 3 or 4 days. Two of them back to back. We don't need any "MOAR " comments. Seriously.

[VagueDrake]

1224583 I did. Thanks for picking up the pace, Gala was a madhouse. Also, I should have expected a lost wing... It is like with the thirteen severed hands in Star Wars series.

Side note: you are adding new chapters faster then I am reading the old ones.

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1224717 Needs a gender selection. Male / Female / Canadian.

[BlackWing]

1225058 Griffin: OH! Thanks! I'll be sure to cut your throat with it! I think she was honestly expecting him to just drop it.......

"Oh woe is me! I can never win! I should just wallow in despair that I can never beat Ember....."

[Tamara Bloodhoof]

1222489
Probably not. Ember's the only one he felt sorry about (well kinda sorry about.)

1225341
She was serious dude, use it as you will, probably becomes Hades mark II

[BlackWing]

1225400 Yeah. "I feel kinda bad I killed her dad." *Realizes she's human* "Son of a bitch!"

[Reaper1oo]

1224835

Completely forgot about genders, but yeah, it needs that - and to be done so much!
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[Enmar]

Moar.

[kragor]

1222021 i love the shit out of scott pilgrim.

[VagueDrake]

1225703 Curiosity did no such thing!

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[Reaper1oo]

1227705 That is the original way to spell it aye, just as tyre is the origin of tire (vehicular)
At least that is what I was taught

1227541 Egad! Doth this mean that Shadow yet liveth? Verily I believed that she brought forth 'ers own destruct by following the deductive prowess o' the nose!

[Mazamis]

1222188 since when could gilda become applejack?

[Mazamis]

1224561

the heroes desperately try to figure out whose balls are bigger and whose sword is longer.

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[vampire48]

1227881 it was a show of the type emotion, not applejack but the annoyed face part

[VagueDrake]

1227705 It can be spelled as griffin, or griphon, or gryphon. By canon, it is spelled as griffin in the MLP:FiM universe.

1227790 What is this I don't even

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She stares right into your soul, does she?

[VagueDrake]

1227910

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[Reaper1oo]

1228099 + These do not do the look on my face justice. Random "old-timey" speech, simply felt like it dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png
And it was related to cats, curiosity and death(implied)
Not especially, however the artist that did the picture captured perfectly the look of confusion, beautiful really...

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[Cyrus233]

959062 I'd wear it.

[Paw Print]

hey, hey blackwing, make griffin use a shitty duke nukem reference :D

like...

"I'm gonna rip off you head and shit down your neck"

[BlackWing]

1231098 "I've got wings of steel baby."
"Hail to the king."
"They're taking our women."

[Paw Print]

1231107

ex-fucking-zactly. Good Idea, was it not?

[Paw Print]

I mean, not to brag or anything. hurr hurr hurr

[Nikent63]

1223798
East coast or West.

I am also frim Canadia and I am curious.