Twilight Wakes up in Pinkie Pie's bed and begins to slowly understand her "Life Changing Event". Twilight will understand Pinkie more when her logic gets the best of her.
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That picture...
will be canon...
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Well, that was random alright...
I think you could have done more with the concept; like show how Twilight does all the things Pinkie Pie does (pop out from places, for example) and always realizes it a moment to late to study just how she does it.
Still, not bad for a first fic. Not bad at all.
Already finished
3016752
Thanks for the Excellent criticism. i wrote this story word by word from the top of my head. I have a real Fic I am working on, but this was just messing around at 3am. Better Work is soon to come.
3016971
Sounds good. I'll look out for that. If you need help, advice or a prereader, I'd be happy to oblige.
3017002
Wow Really? Thanks!! I am Very Appreciative! Honest!
3017014
Nothing better than watching new writers grow, if they show the potential.
Um....
3017022
In that case i will check out your Stories as well.
3017036
Why, thank you. I recommend starting with "The Magic Of Colour". It's a comedy one-shot, too, and fresh from the press, as they say. Or something...
BOOM! Just revised it.
That's it? Then why the cliff hanger man?
3020190i could continue.. I mean, you want more of this story? Twilight had more to discover, but I got sleepy. Fine... I will see what I can do to complete this thing.
3068726 Just don't end on a cliffhanger. Make sure everything is resolved for better or worse.
That being said this could actually very well be an episode of the actual show. It would funny to see Pinkie Pie acting like the wise mare and Twilight acting all hyper and crazy.
3068891
Tch... Aiight.
Still confusing
3069930
Holy Smokes. You are correct. Just got done proof reading this junk.
Sorry man. Any ideas on how to make it less confusing?
So... Many...
s!!!
3070037
Lmfao nice use of Emoticon. and here i sit thinking i wouldn't ever use Twist.
An improvement but confusing. Perhaps this is actually a time to use Lavender Unicorn Syndrome to help us tell who's whom.
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What do you mean? I will take any advice at this point.
3072428 Lavender Unicorn Syndrome basically refers to overdescribing characters that we already know about (meaning characters that we see all the time.), in this case however using it to describe who's who or changing up the speech pattern could help sort out this confusion.
Pterripus? Wut?
Umm. What's a pterripus?
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I can see how this got so confusing. A body switch fic is kind of hard to pull off.
This is a really good story and I can see how Pinkie and Twilight would switch bodies if they don't understand each other. The work you have now could really use some development.
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No! Lmfao. No more mixed pony fiction! I can't take this shit no more. If you want to make it better be my guest. This was an awesome story to imagine but a pain in the ass to write.
3150730 I looked at some images, and it shoed (double u key not orking) a giant bat. I'm pretty sure Celestia and the like are Alicorns. But thanks anyway! (yay auto correct!)
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Try Wikipedia. "Alicorn" up until the late 20th century was used to describe the material of the horn that unicorns have and sometimes used to address what the "horn" was. The use of alicorn to describe a winged unicorn is new to the world relatively to its age and the word's origins. I used pterippus stubbornly to oppose the use of "alicorn" however the English language changes the definitions of its words every year. Neither of us are wrong considering the origin of both words however you are more correct than me based on the show's usage of the word.
This was a tricky concept that would have been hard to read even if pulled off really well. Kudos for trying!
Actually, I thought your execution of this storyline wasn't bad. It could have used some cleaning up on spelling and grammar, but that's probably the easiest type of editing out there. The biggest problem was the pacing. Everything happened way too fast. In the third chapter, there were some very explorable ideas that could have really strengthened it.
Really, that final chapter is the biggest problem. There were so many problems that popped up and solved themselves within three paragraphs. Between that and the author's note, it's just a big middle finger to the reader telling everyone, "Screw this. I don't care anymore." That's not the way to win readers or grow as an author. That was my biggest disappointment, because I can overlook an honest effort that's just okay. (Heck, that's what I think my stories are.)
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Thanks Man.