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stoopidity


I'm here to chew bubblegum and showcase my writing skills, and I'm all out of writing skills.

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We all know Rainbow Dash had a terrible time watching the Great Butterfly Migration with her oldest friend.

It's the day of the next butterfly migration and the last thing Rainbow wants to do is watch a bunch of butterflies for a second time.

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Comments ( 26 )

Well written + Flutter Dash = like and fave from a fanboy of that shipping. Good job :rainbowlaugh::heart::yay:

Alright! Review time!
Awesome.
10/10 Mustaches.
:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Oh my gosh. I feel the exact same way! I like butterflies...when they're not close up. I was actually traumatized as a child when I saw a close-up photo of insect eyes (it was from a book about bees). Then a few years ago, I was shown a photo of a butterfly, close-up. Scared the crap out of me. I was traumatized all over again. That bit right in the story where Rainbow reacted like she did, wow. I related to her so much. I also would've screamed in terror if that happened. ...I'm getting chills just thinking about it...

Anyway, despite that, this was adorable! I loved it! :pinkiehappy: FlutterDash more than makes up for the little bit of trauma! :yay:

Butterflies are like daemons!

Butterfly's scare the shit outta me too!

Good story. A few problems, though.

1. You switch from past to present tense a few times in the story.
2. There are minor grammatical errors, especially when expressing speech.

This was a good story, though. My advice would be to read the Writing Guide. It's extremely useful, and covers everything you need to know about writing.

Best wishes!

-IF

3382281 We're on the same boat. :ajsmug:

3382488 :moustache:

3383082 3383109 3383468 I guess we can all agree that butterflies are the spawn of Satan.

3384182 Thanks for the feedback. I'll be sure to keep those errors in mind.

3386404 I'm just glad that I'm not alone

That was a really nice and cute story Flutter Dash all the way!!! Also was that a SpongeBob reference with Wormy? Anyway great story you have my favorite and like 5/5 yays :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

First one? seriously? damn if this is what you do in your firt try i want to see whats next, you just earned a followe :pinkiehappy:

3386404 Nah, just their eyes. XD

3386858 Have a moustache for being the first to point out that very obvious reference. :moustache:

3387006 Thanks for the watch. :twilightsmile:

Dammit wormy... also, are you feeling it now....Mr. Krabs?

what you did with the same voice thing, i saw it :ajsmug: i saw what you did there you

Great story - I especially liked that it wasn't rushed when it comes to FlutterDash. What's more, it all happened in an interesting setting (butterflies and stuff) which actually was very vivid and not just excuse for setting up this pairing. And it had some fun parts as well, good job!

First story?:rainbowderp: this is amazing! This is GOLD!:raritystarry:

of course flutershy can identify a single buterfly

D'awwwwwww!!!! Such a lovely story! :heart::heart:

Ok, im as some people would call it, a "noob" to this website, i have no bucking clue where the fav button is, but wherever it is im gonna click it AT LEAST a dozen times.

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It's the pretty star to the left of the upvotes and downvotes. It'll turn yellow when you click it.

IT HAS BEEN CLICKED!:pinkiehappy:

I'm just gonna say that butterflies are the most evil creatures ever. EEVERR
I MEAN YEAH.
YOU WANNA GO WALKING IN PEACE? NOPE! BUTTERFLY SMACK TO THE FACE!
YOU NEED TO GO TO YOUR PIANO LESSON IN PEACE? NOPE! ALSO BUTTERFLY SMACK TO THE FACE!
YOU NEED TO TALK TO A FRIEND SO YOU DECIDE TO WALK YOUR SCHOOL'S TRACK BECAUSE NOT A LOT OF PEOPLE WILL HEAR YOU WHEN WALKING THE TRACK? NOPE! ANOTHER BUTTERFLY SMACK TO THE FACE!


SITTING OUTSIDE ENJOYING YOUR AFTERNOON/EVENING? HAVE A BUTTERFLY TRY AND ATTACK YOU!


I COULD GO ON, ON HOW EVIL THEY ARE BUT nah.


nice story.

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Thing is I've actually had a butterfly smack to the face.
Those hellspawns don't just softly land on your nose like in the movies. :fluttershbad:

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FINALLY! SOMEONE WHO KNOWS MY PAIN BESIDE MY BROTHER AND MY COUSIN

Awww...this story was so sweet.:rainbowkiss: Always loved the Flutterdash pairing, especially when its this fluffy. Angel was pretty funny in this too.

The only thing I didn't like about this story was that you described Rainbow and Fluttershy as their 'oldest friend' a little more than was necessary and it can be a bit repetitive after awhile. However, that is an extreme nitpick. The story was great overall.

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