crazy effin' artist; who dabbles in procrastination from time to time
This story was a conception brought about after I did a story for a friend. It came to my attention that there are very few scootadash fics and there are no flutterscratch stories. So if anyone wonders where that shipping idea came from, I called first. The actual premise of the story can't really be explained with just this description alone, so your going to have to read the story in order to find out
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pretty good.
Interesting
I am going to attempt a 20 chap fic with this story. And have at least one chapter out a week
I just started chapter 3 and just now had an epiphany. Why don't I have Octavia in this fic? I mean she kinda completes the whole musical package, and would in most fanifics be the logical choice to pick for fluttershy. It took me a few moments to realize that I had actually done that on purpose, with the idea that a more obtuse foil to fluttershy would inevitably lead to a more interesting story, and perhaps a longer one as well. Also, beforee I forget, I am going to set a goal of at least 2000 words a chapter. That sounds like a decent number...
CRITIQUE TIME!
#1: Never refer to the readers. This is a story, not some spoken folk tale. The point of a story is to bring you somewhere where you're not, and create an experience. However, as soon as you refer to the readers, they are pulled back to reality shockingly fast.
#2: This is a must. Make a new paragraph every time there's a new speaker. It halts confusion and even makes your story look longer. I was confused who was talking when Fluttershy came into the picture.
#3: It seems incredulously rushed. You take no real time to explain the environment which left me confused where everything was and how they got there. Spend a lot more time on details. Again, makes your story longer as well.
There's a few more things, but I'll let ya work on that for now! Seems like it might be interesting...
I completly agree with the critiques Tuner, especially the last one. The chapter as a whole was only written in an hour and a half, so yeah it was kinda rushed. I do have it in mind to halt the narrator, and I will have to either write that in or re-edit the story, probably both.
True you did start it but I finished mine.
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and I will also say that I don't just want this story to be a oneshot' so ha there. PS I mean nothing bad by that at all
W-weellll,bleh to you sir
What can I say: Everyday I'm Trolling.
Dont you mean Trollesting
whatisthisidonteven? oh well
The next chapter will be out tommorow, sop yeah. Tsubaki out.
Sorry Everypony I had to move out of my old place, so some of my stuff went missing. BUT THATS NOT IMPORTANT!!!1! What is is that I have a new chapter and I am planning on having them out on a regular basis from now on.
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*Retract earlier stament and revise with new one.*
Sweet buttery Celestia! This whole story need edits
Just the fact that it's a FlutterScratch story makes me want to read it just for the novelty.
The fact that it hasn't been updated in 5 years is a big turn-off for me, though.
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5 years... Man that is a mountain of time away from whatever I had planned for this. Sorry to disappoint
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I just went back through the whole thing. Don't read it. For you sake and mine.