Originally I was going to run this through an editor, but he is having some IRL scheduling problems. Since while he did offer to let me change editors I'm not the kind of person to say (directly or indirectly) that their lives are less important than my story. That plus he seems like an alright person so if he needs to take time, then it takes time, but I'd not be able to make the deadline so here's the plan.
I'm putting down the story that I have saved here for almost a month now. And I have the Gdocs being edited in a Gdocs folder so when all the files are done I'll post Two Moons: Rewrite. So those who want to read the original thank you for your time and giving my story a go. Those who wish to wait I thank you for looking this over.
Y'alls comments, criticisms, and thoughts are welcome.
AU tag:
Alicorn's after my head canon Great War that I mention in Journeys. But rather than all but two Alicorns being gone for good. Things went slightly differently.
Just like my head canon thoughts on Cadance [was born [just like the Cake Twins were from recessive genetics]], there was an original rush of Half Blooded Alicorns, from an Alicorn parent and an Non-Alicorn. With a different world history from Canon, and a custom canon for this universe.
Atlantis: Different from the Atlantis me and FrostMane made in the Comment section of this blog. In that it was made from the Alicorn descendants and other races. It is mentioned in some detail later on although it doesn't show up in this fic.
Martial Arts: While I love 3 Pillar Martial Arts and in my head canon 5% of the populace masters it. In this story Guards have access to some of it, giving them access to Super Powered, Pony Martial Magical Arts.
I'm going to ask flat out. I want to read this for the Trixie romance. However, I need to know. Do I have to read other stories, in order to understand this one, or is this a stand alone?
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Stand alone. Really as long as you've watched Magic Duel and Boast Busters you'll be fine. The rest you is stand alone, or explained word for word of what you'd see in Journeys when the "Great War" is mentioned (Aka not alot (my reason on why there are no Alicorns (they left and never came back) Some of them before that had children and their descendants carry recessive Alicorn (head canon for Cadance), and there was an Island they came from (never really talked about in other fics of mine so you won't miss anything. Basically it is somewhere, but is somewhere no pony knows where) ). So you won't be missing anything.
I did draw inspiration for the name 3 Pillars from Foal in the Forest, but only the name and it uses Pony Magic to do magical martial arts. But basically as long as you know. 3 Pillar is Ponies doing magical martial arts. Then that's all you need to know the rest is pure artistic licence for the story.
I hope that answers your question.
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I'm sure I will and thank-you
I cropped it from SmittyG's adorable as fck Rainbow Dash maid artwork
That was a damn good brainstorming session, by the way
Any word on the rewrite? I tried to not pay attention the grammar & punctuation issues, but every time I have to re-parse a sentence, it takes me right out of the story.
Premise is awesome, though!