Why does everyone have to be so fragile?
Of course sometimes broken things can be put back together.
Other times... Well... The world sweeps them up and tosses them in the trashcan.
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interesting start.
So Scoots is alive. But who did she try to resurrect? Was it AB? Anyway poor Sweetie Belle. She needs some loves.
Interesting world you got here. Please continue.
i shal fav this
Strangely, I haven't come across a sad CMC story until this point.
I like where this is going, though, so please continue.
You've got another fave from me.
Sweet mother of Luna oAo I am officially hooked, no denying. I shall (im)patiently await the next release.
3002448 T_T i have and its is not a good thing to read.
What a splendid story. I think that I shall favorite it.
Sweet mercy you have created pony-crack. I need more of it.
Faved and thumbed.
Hmm.
Fantastic imagery here. I'm loving how well things are described, especially when you described Sweetie's and Scootaloo's voices. This is an amazing start to a story, and I'm going to finish it.
That was cool
Loving it so far. I think I know what happened already, but it's still early. Good start!
Two things:
"moment the purple haired pegasus thought she same some emotion behind the dead eyes of the unicorn."
I think you meant saw.
“It’s been five years.” Scootaloo said,
It's been pointed out by other users that, unless ending on punctuation which is supposed to show emotion or question, when the next descriptor is "so-and-so said" it's best to replace periods with commas.
On to the next chapter!
I think I know which pony the eyes might belong to. Also, I wonder if Sweetie's become anti-social from her time/the trama of the events, or she's just in a state of shock and withdrawal.
"and he saw her wet footprints" hoofprints might be better, since you mentioned the sound of horesshoes in the first chapter.
Interesting and most unexpected. On to the next chapter! Also:
It was about to close i’s mouth around its
: : edit : : there is no next chapter yet. You've got me and a lot of others intrigued. A few small errors here and there, but nothing immersion breaking. Looking forward to the next chapter when you get around to it
Liked/fav'd
This is an interesting twist on the CMC. I like it.
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Fixed, thank you for bringing them to my attention.
Oh my god that hurt. That hurt me as a reader. Hnnng.
Back story! Can we get it!?
This continues to be more and more intriguing.
I could've sworn I faved this ages ago. Thankfully I was pointed out to this fic once again by Anonymoose's blog. So I get to re-read the first chapter before continuing on to enjoy the rest of the fic.
Eqestrian currency is bits.
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Wow, so Sweets is the boogeymare To boogeymares. That's pretty awesome. And now it's time for me to fav this like I thought I did. I can't wait to see this update.
I'm waiting for the chapter called "empty emptiness".
Also dear lord, I'd forgotten how 3EDGY5ME this story was, and how it just wandered around plot-wise, faffing about with no objective in mind.
Wow, l hope this update wasnt spurred too myuch by some asshole's blog post
Great to see another chapter. Was the demon who called sweetie out the same one from last chapter?
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Yea
5561003
I'm gonna have to agree here. "4dark9me" coupled with extremely blatant writing and the characters' behavior not having a natural feel to it, even with the circumstances in mind. Not my thing, to be honest...
5561003 the faffing about is what makes the top point most fulfilling.