Hopping down from the carriage, Gray favoured the two ponies stood menacingly at the door to a rather lavish looking building with a smile. They tensed up as he walked over, stopping around a meter away and bowing his head. “Good evening gentleman, I believe there is a reservation for two under royal business?”
The burly earth pony snorted in amusement as the unicorn let his gaze drift over the carriage. “I don't care what kind of... royalty you are, we don't want... whatever you are here. Move along.” He moved closer and prodded Gray in the chest, catching a whiff of alcohol on his breath. “Much less one that's drunk.”
“Ah... I see. Well then, my dinner companion will be most disappointed. She was really excited to show me this place. If you don't want our business, I guess we'll go somewhere else.”
“Yeah... you do that.” The snarky doorpony was suddenly punched in the arm by his colleague, and he turned to glare at him. “What the hay did you hit me for?”
“Dude, shut up! Look at the bucking carriage!” He did so, letting his eyes take in the features. The front was standard of the Canterlot Elite, as small magic core powering a small motor on each wheel. There was a unicorn driver sat up front, decked out like most servants, but a bit more full of himself than usual. The passenger compartment was covered over by a thick sheet of fabric, one of the more expensive convertible models now coming out. Other than that, there was no difference.
And then he saw them. Armour that was both lighter and bulkier than the standard Royal Guard issue, not one letting their gaze be distracted, and upon their breast plates... a sigil of a fiery sun. Princess Celestia's personal Honour Guard. The stallion shot forward in the hopes of stopping Gray, but didn't stop him from speaking to the other occupant. “...so, they don't want us to visit. Is there anywhere else you'd like to go?”
“I think I shall have to talk to Fancy Pants about this... he own this restaurant after all.” The doorpony stopped cold, instantly recognising the Solar Monarch’s soft voice. “Well, we will not be dining 'fancy' tonight it seems. I know somewhere where we will both be welcome.” Gray climbed back into the carriage, the door closing behind him. “Driver... to Donut Joe's please.
As it began to move away, the stallion just watched wide eyed. Gray made sure to smirk in his direction as he looked out the window, even the two guards standing at the back chuckling quietly to themselves. The earth pony's jaw worked itself up and down, until his fellow doorpony's hand fell on his shoulder. He finally found his voice, and could only say what was on his mind. “...I am so fired...”
Inside the carriage Gray was smiling. Not because of the fact the being with Celestia had made that pony panic... but since then she had acquired a most dangerous fit of giggles, having to look away if she so much as glanced at him. They had only been out for an hour, perhaps more, and the dealings of the past day had already vacated their minds. Of course, the fact the her carriage was stocked with chilled bottles of cider wasn't helping.
Gray had taken to sitting on the opposite seat to Celestia, as she had developed a tendency to wave her arms around whilst talking, most of which was simple mumbles about the nobles being jerks. A sudden lurch in the journey made him slip from his bench to the one at the back... landing right on top of the giggling mare, and he opened his eyes to find himself face to face with her... assets. The door to the carriage suddenly swung open, a white gloved hand being offered. “We have arrived at our destina... Ahem, perhaps her majesty can eat something, or at least return to the palace, before carrying on with this activity?”
With some degree of trouble, Gray and the driver managed to get the tangle of limbs that was a laughing princess out of the carriage, where the cool breeze clashed with the heat in her cheeks. She began to walk up to an unassuming building, little in the way of decorations except for a sign with a doughnut upon it. What made Gray curious was the fact that it seemed shut. It didn't stop the mare from banging on the door quite hard.
He saw a light switch on above the shop, and a shadow in the window, and could hear a male voice coming through. “We're closed, go away!” Instead Celestia just banged harder. “For Faust's sake, don't you listen?” More banging. “Fine, but you'd best be gone by the time I get down there!” The shadow was now gone, but Gray could see a dim light through the window, smirking as it approached the doorway, where the sound of a lock being undone came from. “Right then, this better be good or Princess Celestia herself won't be... able... to... come to my store after closing time?”
“Good evening Joe, nice to see you again. I know this will sound like an unusual request, but could you possibly allow my companion and I to purchase some fine items from your establishment?” The unicorn stallion nodded dumbly as he moved from the doorway, allowing them to enter. “Now then, we won't keep you too long from your rest. What do you have that we can take away?”
“Give me a minute your majesty, and I'll throw something together for you.”
“Alec, you have hardly touched your glass all meal. What's wrong?” The stallion took a sip of wine and glanced around them room, then looked into Luna's eyes.
“Nothing... yet.”
“Are you worried more humans made it through?”
“Possibly.” His ears perked as Luna stood, walking around the table. The restaurant was one of their favourite places in the capital, very popular but never crowded. Of course, being a princess meant she could get a table whenever she wanted, but she would never press that advantage.
With a nod of her head to the pony leading the small symphony, Luna grabbed his hand and began to pull. Alec then knew what her intention was, and skipped his glass for a massive swig from the wine bottle, causing the mare to smile. She knew he hated dancing, but would do it for her. In the middle of the massive building was a rather impressive dance floor, currently unoccupied.
There was a little resistance from him as he saw this, but with a nuzzle to his chin they carried on to the centre, and the music began anew. It was a piece they both loved, and they lost themselves to the music as they seemed to drift across the floor. Slowly more ponies joined in, those that had finished their meal. After a rather passionate dip, Luna found Alec to have a scowl on his face as they continued. “What's wrong?”
“King dickwad, three o'clock.”
“You mean...” Her question was interrupted as the band was forcibly brought to a halt, a white unicorn stallion with a blonde mane looking at them all disdainfully and full of arrogance.
“We can not believe our eyes! Royalty cavorting with a mere guard, no matter how high he is! We demand to speak with you at once!” The crowd parted as Alec approached the stage, head cocked towards the smug pony. “You are to leave, and never be around Our family again!”
“Prince Blueblood...”
“How dare you speak to us? Very well, we shall give you a chance, what?” Alec let a small smile play across his face as he glanced at Luna, who was cupping her hands in worry as he leant closer to the prince.
“I am... fucking your auntie.” There was a chorus of gasps at the coarse comment, but it soon changed to laughter as a beige pegasi fist met with a white unicorn muzzle, the prince pirouetting in place before falling from the stage, being caught by some of the security staff. Alec calmly made his way back to Luna, smiling down at her and nodding to the band. “Now... where were we?”
All she could do was shake her head as the dance began anew, pressing herself against his chest, and resting her head on his shoulder. “That won’t get you back into Celestia’s good books.”
“Still think I should do the country… no, the world a favour and just shoot him.”
“Which is why you have been temporarily relieved of duty. Until you can control your rage, you are just… my…” Luna leaned up and blew hot breath into his ear, smirking as he stopped moving for a few seconds and followed it up with a whisper. “...buck toy.”
Meanwhile, in a barn on an apple orchard...
"Whoa, these things are amazing, they turn everything green!"
"Really? Let's see!"
"Okay, sure." Scootaloo took of the strange goggles and threw them to Sweetie Belle, but the unicorn filly failed to catch them, the trio staring unblinkingly as they dropped from the upper level to the gravel floor below, a shattering sound following soon after. "Sweetie Belle! They looked expensive!"
She gave a little chuckle, holding her hands behind her back with a sheepish smile on her face. "Hehe... oops? What else is in there?”
“A knife... a pretty big one! Ah think this can go in the 'don't touch' pile.” Applebloom carefully set the sharp shiny blade down on the second level floor, amongst other stuff. “Huh, why does it feel like 'e’s got rocks in 'ere?” She pulled out a round green object, with a bit sticking out of the top and a ring hanging off the side. She grasped at the ring with her fingers and pulled it loose, waiting for something to happen.
“Well, that's boring if it doesn't do anything! Throw it out the window and look for something cool!” Applebloom gave a shrug and followed Scootaloo's suggestion. She had just put her hand back into the bag when there was an explosion outside, and they climbed onto the hay bale next to the window and looked out.
There was a new crater on the farm, and part of the barn wall was burnt to a crisp. And then they quickly ducked as they saw the farm filly's older brother sprinting over. “Applebloom, what the bucking hay are y'all doin' in there?”
She had gotten hold of another of those objects, all three of them looking at each other warily, before Scootaloo showed something she never usually did. Level headedness. “I don't think we should... let's just tell Big Mac what we found and let him take it.”
Private Hollis scrunched his eyes up as the first thing to register was a pounding headache. Next came the pain in his stomach and on his nose. He opened them a little when whoever it was finished cleaning him up. With the blurry field of view he could make out the standard white walls and ceiling of a sterilized hospital room. He winced and shut his eyes once more as they roamed across the lights. “Ugh... that's the last time I drink on exercise. What I wouldn't give for an aspirin right now!”
“We don't have anything called... 'aspirin', was it? Perhaps if you tell me it's effects, I can see if we have something similar.” What the... what kind of hospital doesn't have aspirin?” Slowly opening his eyes once more, he let his gaze focus on the figure stood next to the bed, which revealed itself to be another one of the creatures, dressed like a nurse.
Hollis tried to get out of the bed, but found his shackles had been chained to the railing on either side of the bed, resulting in the metal links clanging together. This made the door burst open, four of the guards entering and aiming their weapons at the bed. Hollis stopped his struggling when he saw them, the nurse turning around with a scowl on her face. “Did I give you permission to enter? Get back outside, now!”
“But... he could hurt you, he's dangerous!”
“And so would I be, if I woke up chained to a bed after being savagely beaten! Now get out, or I shall tell Celestia that you are aggravating my patient!” Thoroughly cowed, the stallions backed away and closed the door behind them, leaving the mare to massage her temples with a sigh, before turning back to the bed. “You have my apologies about that, they are... overzealous. There is a temporary position that they are all vying for. So then, what about you?”
“Hollis, D, Private…”
“... First Class, 3040696. Yes I know, I read your very small file. I also don't care, you are my patient, not my prisoner. If it were up to me, those shackles would not be there, but I was not allowed to treat you without them. I understand that this must be very strange for you, as much as it is for us.”
He said nothing, just lying back and looking once more at the white tiles overhead. His eyes shifted as he heard the nurse come closer, stopping next the bed and looking at him with a soft smile. “I'm going to give you a mild sedative for the pain. You need to rest. If you wake and need anything, just pull this cord.”
He felt said cord draped over his hand, and then felt a needle pierce the skin on his upper arm. But the only thing he could focus on was the mare's hand, which was softly stroking his own, her caring gaze having never left his face.
After their impromptu evening picnic in a small garden overlooking the fields below the mountain, Gray and Celestia walked arm in arm through the mostly deserted Canterlot streets. Of course, with two of the guards following. They had come across a few ponies, whose reactions were to panic and then relax as they saw the whole contingent. And now here they were, stood outside a simple building, where music was coming from.
Upon entering the establishment, Celestia stopped walking when she spotted the centre of the room, where her sister was engaged in dancing. The biggest surprise was the genuine smile on Alec's muzzle as he stared at the mare held in his arms. The other couples surrounding them on the dance floor began applauding as they finished in time with the music with a passionate kiss, before walking back towards their table, tails entwined in one another.
With a tug on his arm, Celestia led him over to the table, smirking as Alec instantly set his face to stone, not one hint of emotion upon his face. “Good evening sister, and how are you?” Luna had been trying to work out what was wrong with her stallion, so the way she seemed to jump in the air a little was not really surprising. “Come now, it was just a simple question.”
“W-what are you doing here, Tia?”
“We simply decided to take a stroll through the city, and I guess the music drew us in.” Luna finally looked around, seeing Gray standing there and favouring him with a smile. “It seems your... sabbatical is working wonders for you, Alec.”
“It's fine.”
“So that kiss...”
“I was in a good mood, then I got interrupted, Princess.” Much to his and Luna's consternation, Celestia sat on the seat next to her sister, motioning Gray to take the one opposite her. A waiter came over and they ordered some drinks, a bottle of red, white, and rose wine each being supplied. “So... what have you been doing?”
“We had a picnic in one of the gardens overlooking the lowlands, and a relaxing walk. And so much for no public display of affections, huh?”
“Fuck you... ow!” Celestia started to giggle as Alec whipped his head round to glare at Gray, who had struck the stallion on the back of his head. “What the hell do you think you're playing at?”
“Dude, they're royalty, have some damn respect.” Both Luna and Celestia burst out with laughter at the statement, coming from one that was not even of their world. The sound of music drifted through the air once more, and Alec leaned across to have a whispered conversation with Luna, the pair nodding before pulling away. “I don't like the look of your smiles...”
“Good, because we've got a good idea. Get your ass up and onto the dance floor.”
“No way, I don't dance!”
“Neither do I, but it's up to you to prove to me, Luna, and the whole establishment that Celestia's a better dancer than her sister. Are you up to it?” Gray looked around at the other ponies staring over with interest, the orchestra looking really excited. With a shake of his head, he stood and offered the Solar Princess his hand, which she took with rosen hued cheeks.
“What a night, huh?” Gray turned his head away from the roaring fire and over to the pegasus stallion rummaging around behind a bar. “Gotta say, Celestia seemed really happy. Good job you've got some muscles there!”
“Please don't remind me!” Gray replied, covering his face with a hand. It turns out that Celestia wasn't a very good drinker when it came to wine, and it made her very sleepy. After a good two hours of dancing, Alec and Luna had cinched the deal when they added their wings into the mix, taking their routine into the air above the dance floor.
Gray had been left at the end of the night to carry the dozing Celestia back outside where her carriage was waiting for them. The only problem? The only way he could pick her up made it look like something out of a old romance film, one arm supporting her back and the other under her knees. To make matters worse, she had decided in her hazy state to wrap her arms around his neck and snuggle against his chest.
He certainly couldn't complain, it was just... different. He also had to sit with her on his lap the whole way back due to the fact she refused to let go. If not for the giggling Fair Heart assisting with the hardest part of the night, he was sure he would've been used as a breathing teddy bear that night. “Oh come on, I saw you trying to catch a peek.”
Gray could feel the heat starting to form in his cheeks, so downed the last of the whiskey in his glass, which Alec was currently looking for another bottle of. “I have no idea what you are talking about.”
“Celestia, after Fair Heart had pried you from her grip. There's no way that mare would allow her to go to sleep in that dress, and you saw it being undone.”
“I... I..”
“Hey, I'm just messing with you, nothing serious. Well, looks like we're out of whiskey. Now we've got two choices: move onto something else, or go look for some...”
"Nah, something else is fine. Hey, can I ask you something?"
"You just did. But seriously, what's up?"
"Well, after tonight... I thought you'd be with Luna. So why are you staying here?"
"Oh... that. Yeah, I'm pretty sure you've noticed some similarities between us and the equines of Earth, right?"
"It's kinda obvious. Strange you've got wings and horns though." Alec stood up with a laugh, another bottle of alcohol in his hand.
"Yeah, did a number on me when I flew for the first time. But there's more going on then just physical appearance. Right now... Luna is in heat."
"Heat, as in..."
"Yeah, and after the first heat with... Sonata, I couldn't walk straight for a week."
"Sonata, who's tha... oh."
"Yeah. That's how we got Dawn. Sonata conceived in this room." The pegasus smirked at Gray's raised eyebrows, shrugging with his wings. "She's... was a maid here at the castle during my guard training. The mares can get... a magical jewel, which removes the effect of their heat, but Sonata's broke. She grabbed me on one of my patrols and dragged me in here."
"I'm sorry, I didn't mean to..." Alec sat down on the couch with a heavy sigh, pouring the brown liquid into Gray's glass, but kept the bottle in his grip and took a swig out of it.
"It's fine, the shrinks and Luna think I need to... 'talk' it out with somepony, even if I don't want to."
"What was she like?"
"Sonata? Amazing, her smile was infectious and her laughter always cheered others up. Besides Pinkie Pie, I don't think you couldn't ever meet a happier mare. And then that bitch Chrysalis..."
“SIR, come quick!” There was a unicorn guard in the doorway, breathing heavily. “You are not going to believe this!”
The first thing to register was the fact that the headache was almost completely gone, and the swelling on his nose had gone down. With a small movement of his left wrist, Hollis found that he was still restrained. And then came the sound of a mechanical lock being undone, followed by another. He opened his eyes to see the nurse next to the bed with a set of keys in her hand.
Pushing himself up, Hollis leant back against the pillows and let his gaze roam around the room. It was standard hospital décor, white walls, ceiling, cupboards and countertops. His vision fell upon a tray of silver instruments, one in particular standing out. Before he knew it, his hand was almost ready to pick up the scalpel, but the soft, furry pink hand resting upon his made him stop, turning back to the nurse. “Please... don't. I... don't want to see you hurt again.”
Reluctantly, he pulled his hand away, but the mare kept hers resting on his. It was the first kindness he had really been shown, and something about this mare was just... trustworthy. “What... do you people want from me?”
“Ah, so he can say other things? Easy now, I jest.” Hollis stopped his fidgeting, returning his gaze to the one that still had his hand in hers. “Why don't you tell me what happened, and we can try to get you home?”
“I... don't know. I was on a training exercise when a storm hit. The last thing I remember is lightning striking the ground near me, and I end up near a farm in the evening. It made sense to get some rest and work out where I was the next day.”
“A lightning storm? Interesting, that's how the other one got here.” Neither one of them noticed the flash outside, and they were still until the door burst open. Then there was a blur of motion as his hands worked in unison, one grabbing the mare and spinning her round, holding her close. The other went for the scalpel, which was placed under the mare's throat as Hollis stared at the one who had now attacked him twice.
“How the buck did he get free?”
Letting the CMC play with explosives... That couldn't have possibly had a better outcome. At least they threw the grenade out the window.
And Alec go to him, while in the infirmary when he is suspended, eeyup, something tells me that this time is Collins the one that will kick Alec ass…I'm kind of hope that is what is going to happen
3188790 A Pinkie Pie question.
3188834 It wasn't intentional, the guards just didn't think to check the barn. Oh, and they're going to find other things in the area he was staying in.
3188954 Well, if it does go that way... Alec's kinda drunk, but we'll see. And it's Hollis, not Collins.
3188996
Sorry
hes in trouble
again
Interesting, shame I have to wait for the next chapter, just like I have to wait to get enough funds together to purchase all the games and DLC I want.
despite all thats going on
im more worried that the CMC are handling LIVE explosives!
3189221 If you weren't, I think you'd have to question your sanity!
Don't worry, they find more... toys to play with.
3189238 please no more weaponry near the CMC
dangerous shenanigans that include slapstick is fine
BUT WEAPONS FUCK
3189252 Well... it's not a weapon, per se...
You'll find out soon.
oow, I never though I would be enjoying this fic so much.
...You know... I wouldn't mind a bit of clopping.
3189319 Clopping, you say?
Hmm, what is this over here, I wonder?
3189654 He's in an unknown place in an unknown situation, and they're his only means of ensuring his survival right now. He only want's to go home, hence why he 'feels like' one.
And unlike a terrorist, he won't actually harm them, even if he doesn't get his way.
3189782 Hmm, yes and no. Whilst it does indeed show the type of figure I described, it would need to be Luna-less, which saying something coming from me, and they have hooves instead of feet, which I gave them. And then you've got to question what Celestia means by 'jackpot'.
Thanks for trying though, much appreciated.
3189785 That's why I said I'm thinking of getting a commission done for it. Gonna see what my finances are at the end of the month, but my car insurance is due then so I might not be able to afford it.
This guy... on the hospital bed... has a hostage taking fetish! The moment he feels danger, he grabs the first pony in proximity!
3189861 He's just trying to get the upper hand in any given situation. It doesn't last long, trust me.
Wanna sneak peek?
You're gonna give them a tank arnt you? CMC tank commanders GO!!
3189976 Now what the hay could three fillies do with a USMC M1A1 Abrams? And how the hay would one of those monsters not be noticed around the farm?
But no, it's still something hand held.
3189882 nice good stuff keep it up
3190234 Are you ready for some drunken male bonding?
No... not, that kind of bonding, that only happens between Alec and Luna.
3190053 think of the adorable destruction! It wouldn't happen to be purple, on baseball bat, and incredibly fun to kill people with while naked.
Holy shit Alec take a fucking chillpill and don't jump on things like a male rabbit does on females when it's "go time". You'll just fuck up everything!
Is this like a god damn shipfest? lol doesn't matter as long as you know what you're doing. So far seems good.... wait, no, amazing rather.
Those three blank skanks broke his NIGHT-VISION GOGGLES?! See, this is why they don't have nice things.
Almost $ 8000 dollars out the window has summoned my inner-Jew and I apolagize for the language.
3190420 Think he needed that last chapter, not this one!
That's why he was annoyed, because Celestia doesn't usually go to that restaurant, and they know the regulars and staff there, so nothing gets said.
Unless you meant when Sonata jumped him... would you say no to a female pulling you into a secluded area and ready for you to rut her senseless, especially on a boring patrol through the castle halls? I certainly wouldn't say no.
She's a nurse, and he's injured, it's in her nature. But no, there won't be any shipping between Hollis and the unnamed mare... for now.
And your last point... amazing? I wouldn't go that far,
3190466 They also tried to destroy the barn. They're going to have fun with what they find next...
3190415 Considering I spend my life outside work on the internet... I have no idea what you're talking about.
But no... the results will be... blinding, shall we say.
(PM me if you think you know)
Your explanation does nothing but expose incompetence and encouraged nepotism, both of which I had already suspected of the princesses.
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3190604 Oh no, he did get that position through merit, wasn't until this event he jumped from bodyguard to lover.
Wait... did I forget to put that bit in? Bollocks, knew I was forgetting something!! Hmm, where to put it... any suggestions? Or did you mean I am incompetent when it comes to writing?
And I'm not afraid to say that I had to Google 'nepotism'.
3190508*gasp* Oh my. Never played saints row the third have 'e?
3190651 Wasn't there some bit explaining Alec's deal with Chrysalis, the torture/vengeance? Stick it there. I know it's a few chapters back, but it fits there.
Also, if you use Google Chrome, I suggest you get the Google Dictionary Extension. Double-click to define, alt+drag to translate.
3190671 Or just highlight, then right click and go to 'Search Google for...'.
Yeah, that seems like a good place. I'll make a note of it on my desktop and add it tomorrow. Working on one of my other stories at the mo. Thanks.
3190669 I thought that might be what you're on about, but I've never played any of them!
3190689 if you ever have the desire to beat people with a giant purple dido stuck on a baseball bat, whilst being naked that's a good choice of game.
Ok, I'll admit that I haven't read much of this chapter in particular, but I had to stop at this part because.. well, just read it out loud yourself..
This is obviously a sign of rushed writing and I have to say, just, wow.. It's really great for you old stallion that you have your goals in life set so well. "I am so fired".
This is in fact so stupid and not even funny that it made me cringe.. What exactly is this even and who is this humour supposed to entertain? it's not even that humorous, in fact, I can associate a lot of traits to our dear character Gray just from this line.
He is dependant of others, he takes advantage of the resources and status of others and even seems to get a kick out of others' misery. Our main character everyone...
I was going to say in the last chapter that the way that chapter was made, Alec should really have been the main character, but this chapter pretty much just sets the deal... I do not understand what this Gray's character deal is in this story and I feel as though 7 chapters in, I should have already had an idea of why he exists in this story.
This kind of problem has deterred me from so many stories it's not even funny. It's been the exact same problem with the others. But the big reason why I'm turned off by this is simply that, call me shallow on this if you want to but I'll say it anyway, the character development that will follow on Gray will be the most unrealistic buff that makes him a shallow character who implausibly becomes dependable to others (usually by a boost in strength), simply because said others put their faith and trust in him.
Seen that before in, pretty much most of all other stories and the title of the story seems to make that even more obvious. It's far too predictable and the sad part is, the content itself isn't that enjoyable, really..
It really is a shame though, because the previous chapter had some pretty good moments, mostly for Alec anyway. I really think that was the best part in all this story though, everything else was just, meh. Not the worst by any stretch of the imagination, but nothing too memorable either, it's just how this chapter begins and how mean vengeful the characters are that really bothers me, not to mention how this Gray character, who is an adult, is ok with being baby sat.. seriously? doesn't he have principles at all, any kind of moral ethics, any kind of dilemmas with Anything that happened?
You just seemed to have completely missed the point of belittling others based on differences really, this was a chance to actually make Gray somewhat likeable, but all you did was make him look like a clingy, spoiled little brat, who happened to get his way and was extremely overjoyed by others suffering for it! Even if the douche bag deserved it, that's not at all how you attribute Humility, which is something you should have considered in contrast to making him look like an absolute asshole.
once again, another great chapter
can't wait to see more!
3191068 I an understand your point, but remember, Gray had been drinking a little.
As for him being fired... do you think you'd keep your job if you turned royalty away when all she wanted was a meal? The doorpony didn't even give Gray a chance to explain.
As for being okay with being babysat, he's on another world! But you can't please everyone, and I thank you for reading this far.
3192465
3190479
I meant Alec's habit to jump on everything, Hollis at this point. Was silly of me to talk about shipping after using a sex as a symbol xD
And I was mostly joking as always, get used to seeing some more or less weird shit from me :3
3193116 Heh, it's fun to jump straight in without looking sometimes.
Oh and if you want a ship fest... Five Year of Ice.
3193003 First off, I hardly noticed that. Basically, that change came completely out of left field as it was not explored how, when or why he was drunk at that moment.
Take it from where the last chapter ended, they were in a carriage one moment and the next moment he's drunk. I don't even understand how getting drunk on the first date, before even going in to the booked in restaurant, is supposed to work..
As for the burly stallion being fired, yeah, I never said he didn't deserve it. I even said "even if the douche bag deserved it" purposefully to indicate that.
And lastly for being babysat, I'm of the opinion that a character should not always be taken care of in any little quarrel, especially this being even more so prevalent when you think about it and realize this character is a full grown adult. He should be able to handle some matters on his own two hands and offer some kind of reprise to a thing going on around him, regarding his persona.
Meaning, I expected him to somehow ask Princess Celestia for some leniency, but then again, the burly stallion was simply being a douche bag. Still, even with that, the excuse that could have worked was the other human not one day ago, because with that set in mind, Gray should expect other ponies to be cold and distanced from him, since he is the other only human in this world and the only one these ponies know of has officially almost committed homicide and terrorism.
The way I would have suggested this was to re word it and give these elitist Canterlot ponies more of a character than more of an attitude. Meaning, you could have used the previous events from the previous chapter to make an actually understandable fear in this pony's heart, fear of what this human might be capable off, especially since he was also drunk on top of that.
In conjunction to that, you could have also explained how or why he's drunk before this big incident, that way you could have made some kind of identification for the main character and the fact that the other ponies in the story acknowledge his existence in this story.
3189882 Mmmmmaybe...
...I have no idea what the fuck is going on.
3196577 Double date that went their separate ways and met up at the end of the night, casual racisim by the ponies, a nurse trying to show Hollis some kindness, CMC playing with a grenade, and to top it off... Blueblood got punched.
Anything else?
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Nope seems good. I usually read this in the middle of middle of the night or on the bus on the way to school. Both in which I'm tired. And add them that with tracking over 120 fics and you get pure chaos.
this kind of violent Holley
So wait... what did happen that night?
I wish I could follow the dialogue better, but you don't tell me half the time who's talking, and it's confusing, especially when there're more than two people talking. Would ya care to color code or tell me who's talking? This is impossible to follow.
Call of Cutie: Modern Warfare 2 = COC: MW2
Temporarily relieved of duty, that's it? After beating a prisoner half to death, he should have at least gotten fifteen lashes. But he gets away with it because of nepotism.