StormSurfer has just lost everything, her home, her family, everything she had have ever loved thanks to some storm that wiped out her entire block. Now living in a beaten up old orphanage in Manehatten this pegasus has to start over and move past losing everything, the question is will she? Find out by reading! :D
Weell this is my first work of fanfiction, I know its obvious right? Don't withhold any criticism, give me a big 'ol plate of "YOU SUCK, BOOOO" and tell me why! :D
P.S I know there are so many grammar mistakes, forgive me. DX
Chapters (1)
I'd suggest working on your story's description more. At this point, we know that it will be about a new beginning after some troubled past for your OC. You see, people don't know you OC, people don't care about your OC unless you present him as a unique and interesting character.
For example, we don't even know if it is a pegasus, unicorn or an earth pony (we can guess from your avatar, but that information should be in story's description). Of course not as plainly as in: "This is a story about a purple pegasus Storm Surfer", cause it's an almost instant turn-off. Ask yourself why your OC is important to the world, what can he bring to it, or what ruckus cause.
Also, the new beginning - but where? In your description you should at least put a name of a place so a reader could know if it's going to be set in the good ol' Ponyville, some rumbling, futuristic griffon city or faraway domains of the Changelings.
You may find this little blog post useful for such occasions.
2994060 Thank you for the helpful advice, I will make sure to implement all of those features soon.
Edit: Booyeah, changes to the description are DONE. Now.. I have to make the next chapter. :D