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Night--Mist


Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.

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After Nightmare Moon's defeat, but before Discord's release, a little alicorn colt is searching for meaning in his life. Ever since he was a foal and two months after his parents were taken from him, no pony seemed to want him around. Even though he had both wings and a horn, he felt he didn't belong, that he was too different, especially because of other ponies giving him a cold shoulder. (I know you guys think "shouldn't he be treated like royalty since he's an alicorn?", but the story will explain why that is later on.)

He knows not of what will happen to him and is lost on what to do. Rated teen to be safe, and I've only picked slice of life and alternate universe tabs at this time until I decide where this goes later on in the story.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 59 )

liking this story so far looking forward to how the princess react when they see he is a alicorn :pinkiehappy:

Not bad, Looking forward to the following chapters, One mistake I spotted

a mgical presence,

I think you're missing an 'A' in magical :rainbowwild:

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Opps, :facehoof: that's my bad. :derpytongue2: I'll fix that, thanks. :twilightsmile:

Nice chapter, Looking forward to more :twilightsmile:

Crimson feeling it might be better not to use the 'Royal We' and the 'Old Canterlot Language' around this little alicorn.

I think you meant Luna here...unless Crimson think Luna is 'Small;

"Where did come from that you ended up in that dreadful Everfree Forest little Crimson?"

This sentence was a little confusing for me. It sounded wrong, may want to look into it.

Great story but please use Luna's old canterlot language responsibly. Thy means you and there are some places where the word the should be instead of thy

uhh this blueblood is different.... it makes me feel..... idk.
i-i kinda like him. wow i cant believe i said that.

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I more beleave that is not the real blueblood more like a changeling spy i could not see blueblood ever being nice

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Nope, no changeling spy. Just thought I'd put a new twist on Blueblood. That is an interesting theory none the less.

Looks like i'm not the only one who likes this blueblood. good chapter btw keep up the good work

Can I say that I would strip the flesh off the corpse of the Griffin that killed Crimson's parents without any of you feeling intimidated?:trixieshiftright:

i love it and will you be making more chapters for all of your another stories after you are done with this story

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Yes, but right now, this one has my full attention, so be patient. There is another story I have in mind, but I am holding off till I have this one completed.

You got my like and fave! I wonder if Rainbow Dash :rainbowkiss:is gonna find him so cute????

3196900 Crimson......... Why would she find Blueblood cute???????

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Phew, you scared me there for a moment. I think she has a soft spot for foals, but that's just me.:twilightblush:

is there gonna be a update soon i really like this story and would like 2 see more except for blueblood he should get a one way party cannon trip 2 the sun

I have a feeling that Gaea is going to be some sort of "Heavenly Guardian" to Crimson. Also, he is a prince? Wow...Not expected that. I would've thought he was just lucky (Or unlucky if you think about it) to be born an Alicorn. Can't wait for the reunion with his ponies :)

p.s I also think that the ponies of Trotsburg wont want to be part of Equestria with Celestia and Luna ruling them. Or am I thinking to much into it?

4626203 To answer your last question, you are thinking a little too much into it. I don't intend to make them so stubborn. I will tell you that a major plot twist will be revealed in chapters to come.

4626203 Also, what did you think of me adding the song into this chapter. Do you think it was a good move or that it could have done without?

4626236 Good idea, helped set the mood for the funeral and what Crimson (forgot his last name) was feeling. My eyes indeed were watering up. Good Job. If you need anymore help. You know where I am.

4626241 Thanks. I may ask you through private message.

4626241 Oh his last name was "Shield"

Make it faster that is all the positive comments you need.:pinkiesmile:

:pinkiegasp: a reasonable an un assy Blueblood!?!?!:pinkiegasp:WHAT SOURCERY IS THIS?!

4988979 A very special kind. Mwahahahahaha!.:trollestia:

5630294 Patience please. I am trying to update, but this training that the Navy is putting me through isn't helping matters at all.

*Checks Night--Mist's blogs* ... Waaiiiiiiiiit a minute... Crimson Shield is a more mature version of the foal Night--Mist! Sorry... Just had to say that. :rainbowlaugh:

Oh my jeez! Such a good story!!!!!

Listen to this song while you read this chapter. It adds to the atmosphere of the story.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Q2aM5btBLVU

Do my eyes deceive me? No, it cannot be....an update!

6896312 Sorry it took so long. I had to find some inspiration to spark the flame again and I finally found it.

hansom

Handsome means good looking, hansom is a type of small carriage.

She knew that the gave Crimson some relaxation and a way to clear his head. He never argued with Luna recently, because one, he had no need to, and for another, with each passing day, she was feeling like a mother to him
______________________________________________________"Ah. I can guess already you met some, how did my parents say it? Oh yeah, unsavory characters of our kind," the griffon said

This sentence doesn't look right to me do you mean: I can guess you already met some:
It may just be me I'm not sure :twilightsheepish:

6896838 Okay. I'll be sure to fix those. How did you like the chapter over all?

oh. my. GOD! rivaliq.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2015/03/its-alive-content.jpg
very good chapter by the way it was worth the wait! coulda been longer though... oh well i'll be waiting for the next chapter.

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