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Rarity discovers that another friend of hers has never been to a mall before. But this friend is a little less enthusiastic about the trip. And since she's never seen such a big mall, or many of the modern things inside it, such a trip can be a little daunting for a simple earth pony.
A sequel to At the Mall. You can read that first, but it isn't required.
Also, read the sequel! That is, um... if you really want to.
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Better then it's prequel.
I'd think just being around Twilight for an extended length of time would be enough to give one a reflexive distrust of anything apparently coming to life.
2981935 Yeah, I kind of figured that Twilight's mishaps would be in the back of AJ's mind at the time, although she didn't mention it.
Also, those crazy cackling balls are based off of this crazy thing (I think it was called a Giggle-ball or something) we had when I was really little. And that thing did seem possessed.
Great story, very entertaining, and hope you do a sequel. May I make a suggestion? Twilight, first she'll never want to leave the bookstore.
She'll try to figure out the chemically analyze the candles and if you do a radio shack parody, I'm sure she'll want to take the electronics apart to see how they tick. 
As to your comment about Apple Jack, yes and no.
I'm sure AppleBloom 
plays with simple toys like blocks, boardgames, kites and maybe a simple rag doll or two. Sweetie is more a barbie pony girl,
however there is a third CMC. I could imagine a filly like Scootaloo 
playing with those type of toys and playing with them over at Sweet Apple Acres. I'm sure at some point Apple Jack watched the CMC play with them so although she would be overwhelmed, probably not that much.
Needless to say it is a parody, and I laughed so it's all right. Oh by the way, instead of Hoofcuffs I would have put down hobbled, or put hobbles which is what they do with real horses. But it's your story so
!
2982115 Hobbles, huh? Cool. Sound like a good idea. I'll try to use that in future.
And yeah, I kind of stretched applejack's reaction a bit, but I needed to have something funny for her to do, and Applejack isn't the comedic gold that Pinkie Pie is. My excuse is that she's always working in the fields whenever Apple Bloom's friends bring those type of toys over.(Lame excuse, I know.
) That and she's still freaked out over the Smarty Pants incident... and her big brother's role in it.
I do have some ideas to incorporate the others of the Mane six in future stories. My main problem will be finding an excuse to ever get Twilight out of the bookstore, especially if it's one of those ones with a café in it.
2985236 As for Rainbow Dash I have a feeling she's going to want to leave until she sees the sports wear department. And Fluttershy is likely going to cause the least amount of trouble, though she may not be able to resist donating to charity.
Pffffffft. Ok, that was a fun read. Nicely done, dude.
Yeah. I'ma need to read the story before this.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I laughed throught the toy section of this story, just as badly as I did with Pinkie's part in the candle store! This was amazing, please don't stop! (first one to say that's what she said gets bucked
)
2991613 I already have some ideas for more trips to the mall. And trust me, things aren't going to get any less chaotic.
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I musn't wait for these amazing stories! You do that, I'll waste my time making music!
So... Much... Girl-Wood...
Well lookie here! Anotha' mall story! Too bad I ain't da foist to comment on it dis time but 'ey, I can still comment an' you's can't stop me!
Lost my head dere fer a second. Anyway, this was jsut as funny as de' foist one. Granted, I did tink dat Applejack was a bit mer..... redneck den usual but allowance den' be made and since when is it healthy tah nitpick? Ennywho, the toy store sequence was great an' I had a quite a few laughs ovah AJ's nutsyness n' all. I wondah if I should go intah da toymaking biz?
Den again, I'm jus' Foolin'
In all seriousness,
I like this fic just as much as I liked the last one. Applejack was kinda stretched but it gave us this and the stretch was believable, Anyone else think Toy Story during that whole "fight scene"? I know I did! Anywho, great work and write on!
Foolin'?! What are you doing back here?!
An' one last thing
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DAT'S WHAT SHE SAID!
*KA-WHAM!*
I kin see ma' house form heeeeerrrreeeee! *ding*
Uh..... I'm gonna see where he lands.
Loved both stories, especially this one's ending, can't wait to see if you do any more
I find it hard to believe that AJ would find electronic toys COMPLETELY alien, but other than that, very nicely done.
Once again, loved it.
I probably preferred this to the previous shopping centre story simply because I prefer Applejack.
Gonna head to the last chapter but thanks for writing these, they're thoroughly entertaining and have really brought a smile to my face
The reaction to the toys is really fitting for AJ. She's met a god of chaos, and has never seen things like that. I'd freak out to. But I don't. Nuh uh. Those demonic furbies don't scare me. Nope!
Oh Applejack, you are such a silly pony:
. But hey, at least she didn't try to eat candles.
This is totally hilarious! Oh, AJ.
All those who thought that the escalator was the coolest thing as a kid, like this comment.
Oh my gosh. I love Luna!
Oh, this was gold!. Applejack liking men’s clothing is relatable. The Luna bit at the end had be howling in laughter.