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Luna has been plagued by nightmares since she was very young, her parents and sister are concerned when no known spell shows any sign of helping the poor filly. Suddenly however, her nightmares seem to vanish and she seems a lot more cheerful. She tells them that her new friend is keeping the nightmares at bay and teaching her new things, but they simply believe that it’s a simple imaginary friend.

But he is very much real in her dreams.

Whenever Luna falls asleep, she wakes up in her dream world where her friend, Crescent, teaches her the ancient ability of protecting the dreams of children as well as a race that has nearly been forgotten.

For his time in this world is coming to an end and Luna, his ‘Little Moon’, is to become the new guardian of dreams.


A story from Luna's childhood into adulthood, inspired by the cover art.


Thank you to Berry Punch, Bocaj518, Rainbowbob and DVAN56 for their help.
Cover art found here by dawkinsia.

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Vexy #1 · Aug 1st, 2013 · · ·

NOM NOM NOM!

I can't believe it's finally here!

Fangasm! :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

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The feels from Blackberry's tombstone still make me tear up:pinkiesad2:

“FOUL DEMON!” She bellowed in a booming voice of her own, much like the first time she heard Crescent speak, “YOU SHALL NEVER TAINT A CHILD'S DREAM EVER AGAIN!”

Birth of the Royal Canterlot voice right there.

All in all a Fantastic Fic that I'm happy to have help out with.

I already love it. I CALL FEATURED!

Glad I could help :heart::rainbowkiss:

awesome fic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

gonna throw this in my 'read later' tab, but i will definately read and comment on this when i get a chance:twilightsmile: but this looks like a really good fic

I knew it! Featured in less than 12 hours!

Beautiful story, and VERY original (I don't think I've seen anything quite like this in the 2 years I've stalked this site.) However, before I can truly love it, I must first bring forward several errors:

Luna frowned as her heart sank slightly, Quill Scribe saw the disappointment on the young fillies face and smiled reassuringly at her.

Should be Young filly's face. You're showing possession of a single filly, not multiple.

“You have a close connection the the moon and the night themselves, you don’t just control the night, you are literally the night, in heart, soul and mind.” Crescent replied.

It seems like you put in one too many "the," and meant to say "to" instead. Correction: close connection TO the moon

she entered the gardens to where she had planned to meet up with Celestia that day, it was a special anniversary that the girls never missed. Celestia saw Luna approaching and she stood up, slowly nuzzling her little sister on the cheek.

Minor error. Capitalize "She" since it's the start of a new sentence.

The soon passed through a pair of metal gates and came to their destination, standing in silence before speaking up.

Should be They soon passed. You left off the "y."

Those were the main grammatical errors I saw, but I always noticed a weird paragraph layout at one point (two sentences should have been combined, but were separate sentences, thus ruining flow in the paragraph.) and a long-winded sentence here or there.

NOW, LET'S GET TO THE GOOD PART (A.K.A. WHY I LOVED THIS STORY)

Of course, this is a very original story. It was beautifully written, and possessed a unique charm to it that made it a very heart-warming read. The beginning is a decent suspense builder-- Luna's in a nightmare, and the main problem of the story is introduced. However, it really ties in well with her second nightmare, because the reader knows that the same thing will happen, but now you introduce Crescent, the remnant of a long-lost race. This in itself could make a very good story universe. Heck, your story lore didn't feel far-fetched or forced at all-- it was natural, something that deserves a mention in this comment. Although the story was rather lengthy, I was kinda saddened by the pace at which she learned-- the story had so much potential to be reaped if you had made it into a large chapter-based story (once again, the whole idea of a great one-shot vs. a lengthy story comes in to play here.) but the speed also made it all that more enjoyable. Ultimately, we reach the inevitable conclusion (it was sad to see Crescent go... he was a great mentor, and an interesting character.) in which a very melancholic scene plays out with Luna honoring Crescent's "now-gone" spirit at a shrine in the garden. Although the part where the lantern briefly glowed differently felt very... Disney(?) it still managed to make me smile. Overall, this was an amazing read. If you don't mind, I'll be speculating on what really caused Luna's descent now...

Also, if you read all of this comment, sorry for the lack of paragraphs and order in this. I completely bombed that.


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I second that.

this this is beautiful it really hits the feels it's very well written the elements are just perfect

I love these kinds of stories more than anything else. Not much better praise I can give it :twilightsmile:

My good friend, you did a phenomenal job with this story. You left me shedding liquid pride,:fluttercry: and when a story does that to me, that means it is truly good. The bond that Luna formed with Crescent, is a bond that shall live on through eternity.:twilightsmile:

:flutterrage:WHY DOES YOU WRITE SUCH GOOD STORIES! :flutterrage:I wanna write awesomely, too. I is adding it to my favs.

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Thanks for spotting those few errors, should be fixed now. And thank you for your essential review of the story, really made my day! :twilightsmile:

The sadest bit was when Nanny Blackberry died, I had tears flowing down my face!:fluttershyouch::fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair::fluttershbad::applecry:



Great story though:pinkiehappy::rainbowwild:

So cute and a well written story.

Be proud :twilightsmile:

It's not often a story adjusts my headcanon. This one did. (And really, Luna deserved better definition than she was getting from me.)

Thank you.

:raritycry:So sad but so happy I AM SO CONFUSED! :applejackconfused:

That was great! Very good story with lots of well-conveyed emotions. The only thing I can think of, is that you should continue this! I really want to see you branch out this little story and go into where Luna has her Nightmare Moon problems. I think this is a very good basis to go on that! Lots of feels will be had!

This pleases me greatly.
I'll have to give it another proper read in the morning when I'm not super sleepy sleeps.

"co-inside" should be "coincide", and when the nightmare first talks to her, the word "you" is used twice.

now that i followed your directions in the Author's Notes section....

:pinkiehappy: AWESOME STORY IS AWESOME!!!

:yay: yaaaaay!

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Thank you.:twilightsmile:
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Whoopsie, thanks for pointing the errors out, fixed now and thanks for reading.:twilightsmile:

And then I went fishing

Yay a headcannon story :pinkiehappy: i love these types of stories :D great story mate keep at it only if you made more stories like this....

“I know I come here almost every night but... you meant so much more to me then you will never know, you were like a second father to me...”
Thats where I started crying. :fluttershbad::raritydespair::fluttershyouch::fluttershysad:

I liked this, an interesting alternate universe take on the origins of the alicorns, although there were too many of them for my taste.

If any of you need me, I'll be over the corner weeping now. :fluttercry:

:fluttercry::fluttershbad::fluttershyouch::fluttershysad::raritydespair::raritycry:

very nice snif snif

Official song for this FF(are you ok with this 101?)

Two things: Nutcracker and Zelda songs go great with this. The only thing I didn't like about tjis story is that it's complete. Also I was interrupted while reading it three times.... Great story!

BAM! Right in the feels! At the end I just...:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

OMG.
:fluttercry: i feel happy this is a good story almost cryed this is now one of my favs. :pinkiehappy: :heart: :pinkiesmile: :scootangel: :raritystarry: :twilightsmile: :twistnerd: :yay:

If you need me i will be asleep or shoud i read storys.. its 4:44 am.
More storys......but unlikey ones this good. :raritywink:

great story really loved it made me tear up but other than that amazing story and so many feels



-Sly Moon-

I love this story!! But there was one part where it said "would of" instead of "would have" or "would've" ( I forgot where though) still great story!

The first time I read this, I really liked it. Then I remembered it again and I just had to find it again, so I looked for few days and finally! :pinkiehappy:

This story was awesome, I even teared up a bit at a few parts.

RC

Aaaaaaaaa2wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! So cute! So sweet! And soo puwerfelt! I love this story.! Make more pleas!

JT

Lovely

And I guess she failed at some point of time for she had been taken over by nightmare.

This was a lovely story, one of the best I've read. This deserve a fav easily and i hope there's a sequel some how :)

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