Hello! I'm a fellow brony wandering through the strange path of life writing bad stories and watching My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic.
Scootaloo has been having dreams (nightmares to be exact) about what happened to her parents and her brother. Do the crusaders know about them? Have they asked? Why is she keeping this a secret...is there something she doesn't want to tell them?
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a little short but i like where this is going
Longer chapters please. Great story anyway.
2985151 thanks :)
2985155 thank you I'll try to make them longer
cliff hangers!!!!!!!
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
2985171 sorry :\ I love a good mystery but don't worry! I'm working on the next chapter
2985175 ok make it ASAP though
Even though this idea has been done to the point of death, I still love it. It's heartbreaking to know that Scootaloo's parents died because of her (Or what she thought was her own doing.).
That's one of the worst feelings out there. Knowing that you did something that is (or what you believe is) all your fault, and you played it out just right.
Loved it!
~Literary Luna
2985562 Thanks I appreciate it
If this was continued, that would just be great...
I do not like the premise of 'a car crash' for the deaths of Scootaloo's family. This is mainly due to the fact that in the show cars are not shown or mentioned at all. I suggest a runaway wagon or an unlucky lightening bolt with the mother pulling a cart (depending on her breed).
Do you feel the story is finished? if so then the most we should be able to get out of you is an epilogue.
I also feel that the breaks between chapters are wrong, you could put most of the story so far, if not all of it into one chapter. But this is just my opinion.
I want to know what happen to scootaloo now
2986077 I have been told about the chapter breaks and the car but I like your ideas on the lighting thing :)
2986078 well, many want to now what happens to Scoots so I'll make an epilogue for ya'll :)
So you deleted my comment? That's awfully nice of you. I worked hard on that comment, pointing out everything that needed improvement and showing you how you could. I spent my whole morning writing that for you, and then you went off and hid it because you couldn't take the criticism? I doubt you even read everything I wrote. Well, there goes whatever respect I had for you.
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*takes a deep breath* I read every single word but I didnt like what I read I'm sorry 
I'm sorry that I deleted it 
I feel so stupid right now
2986269 Oh yeah? There were exactly three things about this story of which I said I liked. What were they?
2986281 rainbow dash hugging scootaloo, something about you chuckling, and I dont remember
2986289 Eeeeh...
Whatever. Y'know, at least you apologized. Sorry I pissed you off or got you sad or something. Guess I'll just get out of here...
RAINBOWS A WONDERBOLT??????????????????????
thats probley not what i should get out of this...........................................................
I dont know what to think about this... so i do this;
Yeah....
I have no idea what i think about this..
Long enough.
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Long.... enough......
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What are you looking at?
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Im. ot gonna say anything more....
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>> Darren Cross Hey don't worry about it Darren Cross, I get flak from my friends all the time when I correct them about their liturature skills. The difference between a writer and an artist is their ability to receive criticism. This individual clearly thinks they are an artist and as such cannot take criticism from mere common readers like us who would dare critically inspect thier masterpiece. Don't worry my good brony, I have your back. As long as the artist apologies earnestly then the case is closed.
I really liked it, but it was also really sad.
Feels are intense in this story...
not too shabby
still a little short
VERY VERY VERY CHEESEY ENDING
the feels
poor scootsy :'(
short chapter, but tis a good start