When a poorly worded summoning spell brings a terrible, terrible beast(otherwise known as a human) into Equestria, ponies and humankind must come to terms with their intra-dimensional neighbors. Long debates are had about the proper nature of things, mistakes are made, and villains are put in the box.
This is primarily a way to orchestrate thoughts about the rules of magic, and how they'd work in bringing about a setting like Equestria versus Earth.
The main story is done, but now will just be more events after the usual affairs, and lectures on magical theory. Dialog in the previous chapters has been colored in to match characters, for easier reading.
Chapters (13)
interesting story!
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The premise of the story is something I could get behind, but something about the writing style just does not draw me in. Not to say that you are a bad writer, just that it feels like you are making too many assumptions with what the reader knows and what you have written down. It took a bit to long for me to make the connection that Twilight was arguing with Discord in the opening. Hopefully this critique helps, and I am sorry if it is seen as offensive, I have been told I am rather blunt at times. I mean only to help.
Ummmm....question, did the protagonist gender swap when he became a sphinxes? You very clearly refer to him as a female around that point. You might want to make that a more important fact.
would we really act like that so irrationally and stupid in fear that kind of behavior get politic mad at the military for being rash idiots i know they could of handle that better personally. meh ponies colorful ponies who goes monster at cute really? way to many monster movies if you ask me.
Just want to say I really enjoy the story so far and the style your writing in. Nice flow, without being distracting and with some nice humor.
You've got my favorite + up-vote.
...That ending!
Dry, strange, and your use of colored text is abominable formatting.
Um...Angel is his own pet rabbit?
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Derp! Thank you for catching that.
A very fun, and very enjoyable read. Thank you for writing it.