"Come Little Children, I'll Take Thee Away
Into A Land
Of Enchantment
Come Little Children
The Time's Come To Play
Here In My Garden
Of Shadows."
The reason for Luna's banishment all those years ago wasn't just because of the rise of Nightmare Moon. It also involved foals. And foalnapping. In that order.
If you want to see the video this story was inspired (or rather, parodied) by, it's called Children of the Night.
Thanks to Selbi for the help editing. Also, if you want to know the genius mind behind the creation of the idea for this story, blame Professor Plum.
Chapters (1)
Hey, it made it through at last!
~Skeeter The Lurker
I thought this was going to be a preditor Hypno story.
Thank god I was wrong.
Dat horrible rime, lemme try 'n help'ya out here, 'kay?
"Come Little Children, I'll Take Thee Away
To a Land
Where nothing is Grey.
Come Little Children
The Time's Come To Play
Here In My Garden
Where horrors go Away.
May not be the best, but I was limited and i'm a bit sleepy :&
Awww... And I just finished getting permission to write the adaptation for the video...
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It's not his rhyme, it's the lyrics of the original song used in the animation.
Also, I accept full responsibility for this story. I'm so sorry.
2957571 Don't be, it's just descriptions like that are best made in rhymes, it adds a ton of feeling to the story.
For example: A tomb stone, the first thing I see.
The carvings are corroded away, unlike me.
I can't remember who I am.
I don't even know what I am.
All I know is that apart from me,
There are little coloured ponies in a group of three.
One of which, if I had one catches my eye.
Two of them leave and she's left to cry.
What can a guy do, but to go up and say:
Hello, young one, would you like to play?
- Only bone deep.
I find it somewhat strange that they can arrest Luna. I always thought she and Celestia ruled absolute, benevolent but absolute.
10/10 would bang
Lol, very nice, funny and a hoot. Mad wizard approves.
2957562 it's not supposed to be a direct rhyme. it's a song... have you never seen the video, or watched the original hocus pocus?
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I was expecting the guard to be disintegrated into ash and Luna becoming a killer pedophile.
lol
This kept playing in my mind.
2958069 Damn i forgot how loud that song was
ummm ok holy shit awesome, this needs to go on damnit. waaaay to great a premise.
Come little children, come with me
Safe and happy, you will be
Away from your homes, now let us run
With Hypno, You'll have so much fun
Oh, littlie children, please don't cry
Hypno wouldn't hurt a fly
Be free, be free be free to play
Come down in my cave with me to stay
Oh, littlie children, please don't squirm
those ropes, I know, will hold you firm
Hypno tells you this is true
but sadly Hypno lied to you
Oh, little children, you mustn't leave
Your families for you will grieve
Their minds will unravel at the seams
Allowing me to haunt their dreams
But surely, all of you must know
That it is time for you to go
Oh, little children, you weren't so clever
Now you shall stay with me forever
I don't know which one is the creepiest.
Damn Bob. you really impressed me, I never really liked that video, but this was just too good man. Nice work m8.
Ah the precious light.
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I remember that video! So beautiful!
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I watched the video and I loved it and thought it was beautiful, but when I read this, I felt conflicted. I mean, on one hand I'm thinking, "Luna is just trying to obtain what she believes is fair," but while reading this, which was hilarious to the contrary of how the video would've went if it were a comedy, I'm thinking, "...So Luna is somewhat of a delusional and self-entitled foalnapper/pedophile who doesn't see anything wrong with her actions."
Other than that, this is hilarious and gives another take at what helped lead to NMM's rise; you never cease to amaze.
From a comedic standpoint this story...is pretty darn funny!
2957747 Nope.
2960617 then you can't bash on a cover
Too many feels, cannot read.
2960653 Oh well.
You know, if Luna wore a green outfit she would basically be Peter Pan.
Funny story by the way
Hey! We have sane author here. Not some delusional freak-luna-fan.
Creepy... but funny! Awesome job!
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You just made me realize that Peter Pan is a kidnapper.
Excellent take on the video, Bob. It feels like this would almost happen on the show.
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Hypno's isn't as creepy as
Luna'sEdgar Allen Poe'sthe poem made for Hocus Pocus that was attributed to Edgar Allen Poe.---
On a completely unrelated note, when I went to upvote this story after reading it, there were 66 upvotes and 6 downvotes. Remove the thumbs-down and...
All 666 votes should be up, yes 666 Likes you must give.
Cookie to whoever catches the reference.
2963693 I just read the Edgar Allen Poe poem, and to me, the hypno poem is still more creepy. Hypno is a canon pedophile in firered.
This was a funny read.
The video is better though.
Rainbow Bob. I love you.
You captured exactly what I was thinking when that video finished.
Well, I'm sure the homeless foals taken from the street were absolutely delighted to be removed from the garden and care of Luna and returned to the dirty nooks on the streets.
2958069 Thanks dude, now I'm never going to sleep again! I'm so scared he's gonna jump out of my closet now....
I read the first line of the description and instantly thought of hypno's lullaby...
Y'know I thought something similar, honestly. Taking urchins off the streets is one thing she really was giving them a home and love that they were lacking. The foals from the orphanage starts to cross the line, but I guess you could justify it. When she starts floating them out of actual homes that's just unarguably kidnapping. Beautiful animation and a decent song, but it's lacking more than a bit in the logic department.
Your satire was nicely done.
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What really creeps me out is the fact I remember that song from Pan's Labyrinth, probably one of the creepiest movies I've ever seen.
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Is that where the song comes from? I had no idea. Yeesh, that does turn up the creepiness several notches.
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I think it was a separate song, but I first remembered it from that movie. Out of all the songs they could have picked, they had to choose one that's related to a movie with this guy in it.
cinemablend.com/images/news_img/34465/Pan_s_Labyrinth_34465.jpg
Okay, this one made me laugh.
this story i like it another
3033896 I believe that one of the earlier uses of the song is from the 1993 film Hocus Pocus, sung by Sarah Sanderson to lure the children to come to their cottage so the witches could harvest their life force.
One of my favorite movies from back then.
That was pretty funny.
Though I would have enjoyed more dialogue between Luna and the parents with the foal.
Something like this:
L: No, don't worry, nopony will get hurt. I just bring them to a better place.
P: But this is his home! This is a fine place.
L: You call that fine? The bed was passed down from his older brother, he doesn't get a dessert after every meal and your neighborhood is a joke! He is better off in my caves! We have X-Box!
This is a very good and well written story I only think that a few things are wrong such as Luna foalnapping foals with parents when it could have been Luna taking foals that are in orphanges (I think that is how it's spelled) and some that are living on the street (*cough*Scootaloo*cough*) and it is agued by InkRose or IloveKimPossiblealot (brony analisists who you should check out) that Luna is like one PeterPan and let's the childrendecide if they want to tay or go back to their families except for a less selfish reason she wishes to give them a better life one where they do not have to worry about crimes such as murder and in the video it appears they have been doing quite well. But if I havet one major complaint it has to be that the guards are complete bucking jackasses I don't know to much about the law but I am pretty sure the officers are not allowed to flat out insult the suspect and also say "yeah good luck trying to win the case we all know that you aren't through." I sort of really hate the gaurds if you have not guessed. I sort of thought Celestia was out of character when she is usually calm and collected she is acting like a child or in the season 2 opener when discord was introduced (A.K.A pissed off) but other than a few complaints I really enjoyed this story. It was intresting enough to where I wanted to know what was going to happen, funny enough to make me laugh and not let a joke get old and all out good for a place on my favorites list. thumbs-uh-hoofs up.