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Serina


Short-story writer, future author, poet, history buff, broadway/musical lover, reader, college student, geek, and I think that about covers it! Thanks for checking my stuff out, it means a lot.

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Chrysalis has been stripped of her crown and banished from the hive due to her failure to capture Canterlot as a stronghold for the changeling army. Now, she wanders the frozen wasteland of the Crystal Mountains, looking for some sort of hope. Perhaps she’s a dreamer, or perhaps she just wishes to find her place in this cold, unforgiving world.

This is an entry for the EQD Flash Fiction #5 Contest

Feautred on EQD

Editors: FluttershyisMetal & Death The Kid
Pre-Readers: Shadowflash & ToixStory

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 46 )

Before reading:I like Chrysaluna (even though I think Chrysalis is a non-shippable character), but don't understand it. What's the logic behind this shipping? :rainbowhuh:

Anyway, upvote for Chrysalis! :scootangel:

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There is no logic, only love~ :heart:

hmmmm.......... seems interesting

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It gets that way~ :raritywink:

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Thanks! I hope people keep their mind open about the pairing. I know it's kind of unheard of. :twilightblush:

2965108 It's a good paring even if it's not to my taste, I prefer Twilight, chrysalis and nightmare Moon myself but not going to show for Quite a bit..:twilightsmile:

Luna x Chrysalis? Finally, I've been looking everywhere for this ship! This fic is so cute, had me smiling the whole way. Sequel must happen. :yay: Happy writing.

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Hahaha Nice. I like Nightmare and Chrissy too. :pinkiehappy:

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D'aw thank you! I have about 5 pictures of Chrissy and Luna/Nightmare on my user page if you want some pictures! :twilightsmile:

That was a damn good read.

Well done.

~Skeeter The Lurker

2965152 One story I'd like to see is an alternate rendition of the Canterlot wedding where the wedding goes off without a hitch then later Twilight is taken as Chrysalises Lover, only to find that Luna is one Chrysalises lovers as well. Just interests for the ship maybe have luna take her Nightmare form. all parties of course are willing at the end if not in the beginning.

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Ohhhh that would be interesting. :rainbowkiss:

2965206 I'd write it if I weren't currently working on my Alternate universe Fic. Though you might like it, though the good love interests start a bit later after the point I'm currently at.:twilightsmile:.

I prefer Chrysalis and Celestia but I guess I like this pairing as well. :pinkiesmile:

not a bad story, I knew it would be different from the other stories I read...

giving a thumbs up

ummm lets see, best pony and best villain shipped.
BY THE SEVEN HELLS SEQUEL THIS OH MY GOD AWESOME!!!!!!!!
uhh ahem. sorry bout that.

so yeah upvote and faved and your awesome.

How will celestia react when she finds out! Something like this: DAFUQ!!!!?!?!?

Well the pacing would probably put the roadrunner to shame but who cares, so many cute snugly feels!:heart: (Joking slightly, it was a bit quick but I can definitely see a relationship between these two and especially in the way you did it.)

Really cute, hope there's some kind of sequel.

This fic... I like it. ANOTHER!:flutterrage:
that is, if you want to...:fluttercry:

eml

Great and a sequel would beater you get mustache :moustache:

The feels!!! :fluttercry::heart::fluttercry: So much feels!!

good story, I look forward to seeing if you make a sequel.

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Dawws. Great fic. Also feel free to add this ribbon to the long description of the story (there is a smaller one for the purpose located in a thread at the Library)

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Very happy to see that it got in. Also making use of that seal of approval, I see.
:moustache:

HOLY FUCKING SHIT THIS WAS GREAT! This made me have a feel storm, and I also love the fact that you did a LunaxChrysalis story, I never really see those. Do a sequel, I want to see what everypony else thinks ;)

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Thanks!!! :pinkiehappy:

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I'm not to fond of Celestia :trixieshiftleft:
Idk maybe it's the way they make her act in the episodes that gives me a grr vibe about her.

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Sweet thanks! :pinkiesmile:

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Thanks and hey you asked you got look a the bottom of this comment thing. :rainbowwild:

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Ooooh I can't say! Spoilers~ :raritywink:

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There is! Look below! And the sequel will be a multiple chapter story so it should pace better. :twilightblush:

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Look below~ :rainbowkiss:

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Thanks and just look down! :derpytongue2:

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:pinkiegasp: Thank you! I put the ribbon up! :raritystarry:

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You know it. :rainbowdetermined2:

Attention Everypony
You wanted a sequel, you got it! It will be a multiple chapter story, but I will be busy with school while writing this so y'all will have to be patient too. I don't know when I'll publish it yet and I still have to write the first chapter... But just letting you know there is going to be one! Just remember that nothing you see in the sequel right now is final. That includes the title, description, and cover art (though I'm pretty sure, like 99% sure, I'm using that art). I hope y'all enjoy it when it comes out! And if you're not following me I'll make sure to make an extra chapter in this story to make sure you know about it. :pinkiehappy:
Sequel: Dreaming of Reality

2980034 Yeah, I guess I can see your point on that. Still a nice couple in my opinion. And I can't wait for that sequel. :scootangel:

That was a pretty good read. It was a very cuddly cutesy story. It also just so happens that I have a thing for Chrysalis and Luna as characters. Only one problem.

This felt rushed. Very very rushed. I'm sorry, but this story is undoubtedly one of the most spontaneous tales of romance I've come across in a long time. Its almost like you were just guessing at how romance is played out. There was minimal "build up" to the whole kissy kissy part, and that also felt very rushed. If I were just a rabid fan of Chrysalis x Luna shipping, I'd be all over this story, believe me, but that's not how romance works.

Now, I'm not a romance expert or anything, but I'm fairly certain that putting two characters together for an hour and having them kiss isn't romance. Maybe if you flesh it out a bit more, have them spend more time together, let them get to know each other, it would be a decent romance story, but that's just not what I found when I read this. This was heartwarmingly cute at best.

This is pretty much how I saw the story progress. Tell me if this is what you call intricate and powerful romance.

1. We've got a damsel in distress. All hope seems lost.
2. She loses conciousness and then wakes up in a beautiful setting.
3. She meets her savior.
4. Insert silly quips and awkward talking.
5. They do something fun together.
6. They spend an hour or so in each other's presence.
7. Deep talks ensue.
8. Suddenly, omigosh! They kissed!
9. They lived happily ever after.

I'm sorry if this came off as harsh. I hope you don't take offense to this. Its just that this story could be so much more than it is now. I can't say that I didn't like what I read though, because I actually did find this to be very cute.

If you want me to give more critique, or maybe help you out on something, feel free to send me a pm, or just reply with a comment. :trixieshiftright:

You still get a thumbs up...

How did they fall in love again? Luna wasn`t even in the Canterlot Wedding episode, well she was for a minute. How could she fall in love with Chrysalis so fast? How could she see past the changeling thing? This confuses me. It`s cute, but confusing.

An adorable little story, to be sure, but to say the romance was rushed would be an understatement.

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I totally agree it was rushed and I'm sorry for that. :fluttershysad:
After the EQD contest is over (which I probably won't win but I gave it a good go! :rainbowlaugh:) I'm going to publish another chapter which is a re-written version (will be MUCH longer) of the story. So, I haven't started on the different version of the story yet but hope to start soon! :pinkiehappy:
Also, I'm open to suggestions on what you want to see in the re-write! :raritywink:

this was nice, though it was too quick XD
but still nice going to read the other one now! x3

I can only agree with others before me. The pacing was wrong. I loved the story and you've got the right direction, but it was like you were colliding atoms to see what would stick. The love is plausible, but at best it should be a growing affection after the events of this chapter.

A very nice rewrite, I enjoyed it thoroughly. You planning to upload new chapters for the sequel soon?

This was absolutely beautiful! I applaud you for your amazing ship!

WTF levels reached maximal point.

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Yeah, I'm trying to do better with pacing. :facehoof:

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I'm trying with the pacing! Sorry! But thank you! :twilightsheepish:

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*hides under blanket* Um, I kind of wrote part of chapter 1 but Idk where else to take it. I have writers block for most of my stories right now.... :fluttershysad:

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D'awwww thank you! :derpytongue2:

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Comment posted by King of Kings deleted Jan 19th, 2015

Nice, the rewrite is even better than the original.

I like Chryssie shipped with Luna. Makes tons of sense for me. If anyone, it's Linda who wouldn't dismiss anyone add beyond help, I mean she herself was saved from being Nightmare Moon. That's why it always pisses me off when she's written as the distrusting, unforgiving one. It just makes no sense to me.

Cya
Raziel-chan

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