• Member Since 23rd Jul, 2013
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Outcast4Ever


I'm a writer of most genres, but I prefer sci/fi fantasy to pretty much everything else. Feel free to shoot me a PM with any comments/suggestions you may have. Also, I am a female brony.

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Twilight Sparkle is fascinated by the future and studies time travel spells with great diligence. While studying, she accidentally opens a portal into a strange world that seems vaguely familiar. Thrilled with the prospect of travelling through time, she and her friends step through the portal with Elements equipped, just to be safe.

As the last of them clears the portal it suddenly closes, trapping them in a world they have little understanding of. They must fight for their lives in order to return to the past. Their experience there may just end up changing their lives for good.

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 26 )

Hmm... Interesting, to say the least. Assuming from the title and description that this is a crossover with CoD: Black Ops, you have your work cut out for you. Nevertheless, it looks pretty well written at the moment. I'll be watching...

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Thanks!

Yeah, it's pretty much a crossover between the two. Thankfully, my brother is an expert at CoD and will be helping me fine-tune the details with that element.

Oh boy.

I've never liked dark fics, so know that my displeasure shouldn't be taken into account, but let me say that I have to read this. The concept is waay unexpected to me, and that just makes this fic alluring.

Using state of the art 'find on page' technology, I have found that "[space] I [space]" is used 118 times in this story. As refences, I've also found 'and' is used 62 times, and 'the' 96, give or take 1 or 2.

It seemed like a good idea at the time to go ahead and comment this... Problem is I've been staying up too long again, so mabe this is a terrible idea, I dunno.

Are they sent to the world of BO1, or is it in the future? Like the Ghost Recon series?

Great start for a chapter. Not too many noticable errors. Keep up the good work!

P.S.: If you need help with the latter Black Ops parts, I have some experience.

YES! FINALLY A BLACK OPS CROSSOVER! YESSSS! HURRAY!

2978358 WAIT! will there be zombies in this story perhaps?

I just really want to know, how often are you going to update this? Its really well written and I want to see more of it!

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I am aware that 'I', 'and' and 'the' are used frequently, but instead of writing in third-person like I usually do I wanted to challenge myself and try to write the entire story in first-person.

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You'll just have to wait and see what happens after the portal closes. And as for your comment about there being no action yet, I'm trying to take this slow so the story doesn't end in a few chapters.

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I haven't decided, but it will be about every week or two.

I really like this! :yay:

-Kiryu :moustache:

Where is the next chapter? I can't wait any longer!

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I've had them started for a while. Hopefully by working on them I'll be able to overcome writer's block. Nothing I write at the moment is all that great and I don't want to destroy a story people actually enjoy.

3051713 I recommend getting a proofreader and a editor for a story ask them if they can do multiple editing and proofreading at the same time I'm a editor and proofreader for many ppl and I can help u with that and also I also suggest on focusing on one story first like this one more its not really writer block its just that u have multiple stories at the same time for me I had three stories when I just started then I cancel one and the other one is at hiatus I'm only focusing on One story first. Mail me if u want me to help u edit or proofread and yes I found some but not a lot of grammar problem and no spelling errors so imma like the story since its call of duty related. :twilightsmile:

Finally, mate! I thought I was to wait until Christmas until a new chapter came out!

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I'll be sure to take that into consideration. I probably will end up putting my other stories on hiatus for the time being and just keep this one going. All I know is, I'm glad I finally got this chapter out and any errors with my grammar will be fixed after I've gotten a bit of sleep.

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I wouldn't make you wait until Christmas, but maybe Halloween...

3107918 it depends actually I saw that more ppl know and like this story than any others so keep trying to update this story and I'm always happy to help some ppl edit and proofread just mail me it.

Before you posted new chapter :ajbemused:
when you posted new chapter :pinkiehappy:
URA!!!

Looks like we gotta wait until Nightmare Night...

Decent. Still can't wait for the story to start...

Come on action! Great story so far!

Hold on, is this a crossover with Black Ops 1 or 2? Because I haven't played 2.

3236029>>3237211 the action will be starting soon, I promise. It was going to start early on in chapter four before this chapter took a surprise twist I was counting on, but it should still be in chapter four.

2978746>>3237989 black ops 1, sort of.

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