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Ha, I knew I recognized that cover image from somewhere.
That was pretty hot.

Few mistakes I saw:

Soarin got more confident as well, and slowly she started brushing her mane with his hooves

I think there's an extra "s" in there.

Spitfire’s mouth best he good as she milked him.

There's either too many words here, or too few.

Thanks for pointing it out.:twilightsmile: Edited it.

YAY!! Best ship Clop for me to read!!

Thanks, Always good to hear.:twilightsmile:

Said it before, I'll say it again: simply wonderful.

Oh my god. I am in love and I haven't even read it yet. So saving this for later tonight.

[edit] Also, holy crap you drew that cover art!? Man, that's awesome! it looks great!

Always love me some SoarinFire. A very underrated shipping IMO. :heart:

2942497 Soarfire is best shipping. It's why I wrote one~

2942882 For me, best shipping is Sparity. I do wish that SoarinFire would be given more recognition instead of being passed up like a joke.

Wait wait wait, "Incomplete"? You serious?

I hope so. :rainbowkiss:

No UPS is best shipping fuck that fedex shit

Well, I do have plans to make more. I mean, they've only gone down on each other so far, and I know you Little bastards (jk) aren't gonna be 100% satisfied until he's done her in every way imaginable. So yes, there's probably going to be more, just don't know when. I have absolutely no idea how to write an actual sex scene, so I'm probably gonna have to do a bit more Reading up.

Thanks. Nice to hear that someone actually noticed the cover art.:twilightsheepish:

I came here for good SoarFire clop and left with a boner. So underrated pairing, yet so perfect.

And I'll leave this here because why not?

So, you left satisfied or not satisfied? Still, thanks for commenting.

2945247 I liked it. I really did. That's what I meant. But personally, I would've liked a bit more depth of character. For example; we don't really know why Spitfire likes Soarin' so much aside from him being ''sexy''. Is there something else that makes her want to have sex with him? How long has she felt like this? Because based on what we read, her affection towards him is deeper than just sexual desire. That's something readers might wanna know. Character depth is always a good thing.

But for what it is, it's really enjoyable, and I was just throwing suggestions. If you're going to continue this, perhaps dive a bit deeper into their reasons and motivations. That's all. Have a nice day :pinkiehappy:

Well, I would like to include more character depth once I try (and probably fail) to make Another chapter to this. I just don't Think I'll be very good at it, since I have never written characters that way. I'll certainly try my best to deliver though.

Also, the reason why it doesn't have so much character depth to begin with is because the story was originally going to be very different. I managed to write myself into a corner, and rather than pulling a deus ex machina out of my ass I decided to make it a clopfic instead. Funny how things turn out sometimes, isn't it.

Man, why do a lot of first-time clopfic writers choose SpitSoarin' as the first pairing they write? I'm not the only one! :pinkiegasp:

Will read later. Too tired for fappery atm

It wasn't intentional, it just happened. I know you probably don't Believe me, but that's the honest truth.:derpytongue2:

Comment posted by SoarinTheWonderbolt deleted Aug 2nd, 2013

you disgust me. how dare you write a story of two ponies engaging consensual sex?

consensual sex is disgusting and has nothing to do within this fandom.

have some decency and write some rape clop

Well, you can't win them all, I guess.

We know, don't worry about it.
If it helps, I have an idea for Another story that contains as much non-consensual depravities as you can shake a stick at. Don't know when it'll be made, but once it is I'll be sure to let you know.

i had no idea how well this clopfic did probably because i forget i did it :pinkiehappy: still nice to see that it turned out well :heart:

Well, a lot of people like jacking off to Spitfire and Soarin I guess.

3132349 that might be true but their are other bots they may not be the mane ponies but they need love to :fluttershysad:

I love what your doing with this story. Please write more:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

When I have time and inspiration again, I will.

Wow, this is so adorable and cute and sweet and romantic and all kinds of awesome! :heart:
And funny too sometimes, "safe and horny". :rainbowlaugh:

Thanks, you're not the only one to point out the funny bit, MidnightDancer reacted to that as well. Don't know why, I never meant for it to be that funny actually.


It's cause Spitfire was all so cute and cuddly in the sentences before, like totally innocent and just happy to snuggle with Soarin and then BAAM! "I want sex and I'll get my sex". :rainbowlaugh:
That stark contrast in such a short sentence after a quite long romantic description is what makes it funny. :twilightsmile:

Great story!
Its kinda hard to find a good one on the Bolts, but this is definantly one of the good ones :pinkiehappy:

I skipped the sex and found everything on either side to be a great funny read. The crude humor made me laugh quite a bit. I do think Soarin is the type who would need take a few hints. I like them as a couple, they are always seemingly glued together on the show, always at each others side. Its like Spitfires way of making sure no pony else touches the stallion that she wants for keeps.

I found it rather funny how the only other pony in the showers left rather quickly. I think they knew Spitty was going to take another shot at Soarin'

Spitfire smiled, maybe today she’d finally get somewhere with him.

Yep, she's boss mare for a reason :scootangel:

“Well, we have training for the performance at the Coliseum next week. And I’m not gonna go easy on you just because you’re screwing me, I might add,” Spitfire said in a rather stern tone.
Soarin groaned.    

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: great funny note to end it on :yay:
She does have to keep her boyfriend in shape after all. I just think they will get other kinds of training time in there too now.

Oh and final note. I really like how Spitfire transited from cute and cuddly and how she feels so safe in her lovers hooves, to wanting to do Soarin and wanting him so much that nothing was going to stop her.

Well, if you're not in it for the sex, you might like what I have coming up. I'm currently working on the next chapter, which doesn't involve sex, and most of the upcoming chapters will try and delve deeper into their relationship. Though there will be clop sprinkled in to keep it interesting for those who aren't so interested in wether or not the story goes anywhere.

Ooooooooooh...... Whatcha hiding Soarin? And spitfire should invest in some earplugs :p I'm glad you're posting again friend :D

There's actually a couple of good reasons for Soarin' tear the label off his pill bottle. 1.) a teenage niece/nephew looking to get high on prescription pain meds. 2.) Privacy reasons, so that when you throw out the bottle any personal info is safe. 3.) To hide an embarrassing health problem. :twilightsheepish:

Spitfire groaned and twisted around

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: That start....
After two kinky chapters this start to the chapter made me laugh.

Nice odd chapter there. Didn't see that coming. I rekin its more likely meds than enhancing drugs she's found.

And Spitty getting lost in Soarin's house like that was something I never saw coming. It was a nice touch and for a while there I wondered where you might be going with it after such a cute start to the chapter.

I cant wait for more. :pinkiehappy:

Well, you're just gonna have to wait and see. One of your suggestions comes Close, but I have a bit of a twist planned. I just hope it pans out well...

Thanks. I really want to step up my game and post more frequently, it's just that between doing art Commissions and working a full time job with a boss I pretty much want to kill, don't get as much Writing time as I want.:fluttercry:

3511463 Haha well friend think yourself lucky you have a job, I turn 18 on sunday and I have to look for work, I'm excited but scared at the same time :) :l :/

Called it, Soarin' has a little dickhead nephew who is probably named Blitz Wing.. yes, after the Transformer.... anyway while staying at his uncle's house he is looking for some percocet because we all know a lot of athletes would have prescription pain killers in their home. Long story short, Blitz's parents find out and soarin' being a semi-responsible adult gets rid of the remaining meds, goes to his doctor for some non-narcotic pain pills this time and he tears the label off.

You know, I would've probably stolen that idea if I didn't have a plan for what those meds are. I could still see it happen though....

I'm wondering if the pills have to do with psychological problems rather than physical enhancement, that would certainly be an interesting turn of events...
:ajsmug: : Can anyone say plot twist?

:twistnerd: : I can!

:ajbemused: : Shut up Twist.

good story, very few stories like this one have all the elements i like a good story and decent described clop. well done sir :pinkie happy: will track

Thanks, hopefully I'll be able to maintain quality throughout and keep you interested.

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