Throughout his lifelong career as a successful author, people could swear that "Leroy Cousineau" literally lived the adventures in his "Equestria Series Books" before writing them out for the world to read. Easily afterwards, Leroy's magnificent works earned him worldwide respect, unimaginable wealth, along with much more. His little ideas of a fantasy land filled with magic, heroic ponies, villainous dragons, so on, evolved quickly into one of the most recognizable franchise empires in the modern world and remained such until his dying day. Now, with him regrettably deceased, where will his series go without him? Over? Under?
Its future is actually left in the hands of "August", his artistic grandson. Yet... it was clear that Leroy was special. He had a gift. One that his worried grandson fears, despite being told otherwise, he doesn't have. What was the old man's secret? Did he indeed live out his adventures before writing them? When August inherits the ancient family book entitled "the Journal of Equestria" and is literally warped to the Crystal North when reading its contents, he finds out the answers he needs to writing well... and also discovers that a certain tyrant of a former unicorn king is hell bent on traveling back to his opened world to form an army.
Not if the Crystal prince and princess have anything to say about it, however...
I'm just going to tilt the upvote/downvote scale slightly to the right, good work
2939550 Thanks for being so thoughtful. Seriously, it matters more than most people care to think. And, yes, I'll keep up the good work.
Well, this is certainly a nice change of pace. Reminds me slightly of good old The Magician's Nephew. And a little bit of Myst, too.
The chapter's a decent length, but it didn't feel like it was dragging on, and it served a simple - and rather cliche, though that that isn't a bad thing by any means - and effective way of setting up the framework. There's some good worldbuilding here that's obviously necessary but still interesting and serves as a well-done draw-in. Like I said, it's not a particularly super-creative starting premise (at least in the grand scheme of literature, I haven't read enough pone fiction to know in that specific regard), but you've pulled it off well enough that I'm looking forward to seeing what's next. Nicely done. I'll be keeping an eye on this.
2944235 So, basically, you're saying you're kind of half in half - 50/50 - with this story then? Yeah, I realize I'm not the best writer around and this story, really, was something of a rough draft compared to the real deal. If anything, with your review here, I'll be sure to go back and see how to improve it. Thanks for the advice, thanks for the tips, and thanks for giving this a chance. Seriously, I wish I got reviews like yours more often.
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I wouldn't say half and half, no; that's much harsher than I meant to come off as. I'm not sure I'd gauge my interest in numbers, but going that route I'd say 80/20. The chapter was a good length and kept my interest the whole way through, and the premise is interesting. The concept itself is something I've seen before (like I mentioned, Myst and The Magician's Nephew), but that's not immediately a bad thing - the prologue is written well enough that it feels enjoyable and engaging regardless of whether or not it's a cliche. While I'm not typically one to use tropespeak, always keep in mind that tropes are tools. A cliche typically isn't bad all on its own.
Besides, if my interest really was 50/50, I probably wouldn't have given the story a thumbs up and added it to my favs/watchlist, eh?
Perhaps I'll add this to my ff.net watchlist as well. I tend to be more active there and DA anyway.
2946334 Oh, sweet! You just made my day.
I'll try to make it 100/100 though, of course. Thanks a bunch for the input, bro.
What's with the dislikes? This story is kind of interesting to say the least.
2950354 Hm, I guess that it seems a little bit cliche or child like at the beginning for readers to seriously like. Yet, I'm like you. I don't understand the dislikes either. Nobody has left me a comment for why they didn't like it so... I'm just ignoring them. Thank you for saying my story is interesting in the least though. It shouldn't be that bad. I feel I tried hard to give this tale an innocently mystical like beginning but not too innocently so. Either way, at least it has more likes than dislikes, right?
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He should just let Sombra go to the human world, lmao