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Splight? HELL YES! :moustache::heart::twilightsmile:
i can't wait for more :rainbowwild:

Wait a minute. Twilight has breasts? Yo don't mean the ones from her crotch, do you?
Kinda rushed. THey both felt into the mood way to easily. But let's see where this might go.

Twilight you whore:twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush:.I mean that in the good way so dont get you panties in twist.

One of my favorite ships.

You had my curiosity... Now you have my attention. While yes a little rushed, I believed that is the perfect begining for a fic like this. A sudden and unthought of decision leads these two into a deep world of lust, love, and every story needs a little drama. But seriously, Spike goes from stoking himself for like six seconds to getting blown by Twilight... Okay. Next chapter come out now!!

I do like the potential this story has, but you need to get an editor to fix the multiple capitalization and grammar errors. I also advise that you slow down. The story felt rushed, especially towards the end, with very little build up. Take these tips into consideration when writing the next chapter. You do have my attention, but like I said, you just need to fix some things.

I agree 100% with The Dragon Warlock.
Great idea, always love a good Spilight. Just slow it down, add more detail and fix the grammar errors.:twilightsmile:

Oh and two things; 1. Spike was on Twilight's bed when he cum so no basket to grab and you forgot that Twilight was still by the door when she move Spike to the bed. 2. Think you meant she brought Spike to her chest, not breast. Mares breast are right above there mare-hood, not on the chest.:twilightsheepish:

Later and good luck! Will be watching.:moustache::twilightsmile:

Twily... Spikey... oh, my god!:twilightsheepish::twilightsheepish::twilightsheepish::moustache::moustache::moustache::trollestia::duck:

I thought that dragons have two 'equipments'.

That's one hot masturbation! :derpytongue2:

hmm interesting pls more chapters

Short...but great!

where's kinkiepie when you need her?

HOLY BUCK, ANOTHER FAN OF SPILIGHT!!! OUR ARMY GROWS STRONGER FELLOW FANS!! LOL. Nah, but impressive my friend, other then some major errors that you should really correct, you done very well, I like it, honestly cant wait for more, I NEVER turn down a Spilight before some I'm interested to see where this leads:twilightsmile:

Twilight swiftly levitated Spike onto her bed.

he grasped the edges of his basket

I think I'm missing something here...:rainbowhuh:
Still, nice story:twilightsmile:

Nice, just wish there was more to this fic since they dont go all the way.

0.0 very... intriguing
good grammar with a mistake or two.
everything else seemed fine
rating : 4/5
you get a tiger!
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Reptilian animals ball are internal:pinkiecrazy:

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Breast is another word for a creature's chest. It doesn't necessarily always mean the mammary gland

This is a good story. But again it has its issues. Like thastrangr said....

Anyway I almost never read clop (yeah right)
But as off the last week I've become a massive addicted of SpiLight ... this is the last I've read and was interesting. .

great story i hope you continue it someday

spik-light shippers incoming!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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why are all the good stories never continued?

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