The Cop and the Princess

A detective for the NYPD is charged with teaching a lavender pony about humans and the greatest city in the world. Follow Alexander Graves on his journey of love, loss, sex, violence, and everything else that makes the city what it is.

Chapters (2)

Welcome to New York · 23rd Jul 2013 · 1,544 words
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Class. part 1 · 11th Jan 2014 · 1,945 words
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Portable Opium

Portable Opium #1 · Jul 23rd, 2013 · · 1 · Welcome to New York ·

'These tags.. I just might have to read love.' Or just check it out.

Trail-Blazer

Trail-Blazer #2 · Jul 23rd, 2013 · 2 · · Welcome to New York ·

A seemingly interesting story so far. A few spelling and grammatical errors, but I tend not to pay much attention to those simple mistakes. For me the first chapter, in sense, includes more insight into the setting and the characters' background. (Mostly referring to the officer than the ponies.) To me the officer's character itself confused me a tad, but then again this is how you learn. The characters are overall decent in my opinion. Good enough to create a fluid story. Could be better, but if this is your first story then its easy to make mistakes. (But that's what critiques are for.) I give it a like for a first story. It's better than most first stories i've read over the years.

Overall good story and I encourage you to create more. After all, practice makes perfect.

RomanLuna

RomanLuna #3 · Jul 23rd, 2013 · · · Welcome to New York ·

An intriguing start to an intriguing concept.

I like where this story is headed from the first chapter; A few errors here and there but not really story-breaking.
I think if you keep going with it, everything will improve throughout the story.