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(Attention: Indefinite Hiatus. Might continue if I ever start writing again.) In an alternate reality where Alicorns never existed sits the Republic of Equestria. Twilight Incorporated is the brainchild of one Twilight Tinker, an offbeat businesspony whose inventions brought the Republic into a golden age. In one of their high-tech facilities a group of quirky scientists are trying to make teleportation a reality for everypony. Unfortunately, a miscommunication forces the team to test an incomplete product and the results become out of this world.

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Comments ( 13 )

A few grammatical errors here and there but this is a pretty interesting story. Will definitely track.

237900 Thanks, but could you care to point out where specifically. I've been working on my grammar lately and beyond the odd comma-splice I thought I had it down pat.

238103 Thankies for the track.

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"I want to see you leave, now. But we both that isn't..." missing the word "know" after "both".
"You've surely already run tests..." this sentence could use some streamlining such as, "you've surely run test by now, haven't you?"
I can give you more if you want but I think all the errors can be corrected just by going through the text and looking for any errors like the ones I've mentioned.

239630 Ah, thanks for pointing those out. I'm surprised I didn't catch them, I'll give it another look through sometime this week and see if I can catch them all. Thanks again. :twilightsmile:

nooooo!! we need to know about the metaphorical peoples struggle for survival :fluttercry:

273055 The metaphorical people won out in the end, don't worry. There were countless casualties including an actual mouse that had somehow been maliced to death, but the hardy peoples survived and thrived. :moustache:

Now, to account for AJ and Fluttershy.

Please continue with this. Track, and now...

"I GO!" :coolphoto:

Now this is interesting...
good fic

This has got better and is just as funny! Well done. Although it took me ages to realise that orange pony was Applejack...:derpytongue2:

469664 Thankies. :pinkiehappy:

469711 Couldn't think of a good name perversion so I just stuck with Jack. Thanks, I think I went a bit too far off track and rushed the ending a bit though. :applejackunsure:

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I liked the ending as it was! It might have been a little wut? but it was good and funny. The only problem I had with this was that I couldn't really remember what happened in the previous chapter as it was a while since I read it (hint hint:raritywink:)

470423 Yeah, I have too many stories. This one is the most fun to write, but also one of the hardest. Tell you what, nopony else seems to care about ATTW, and I could save the one-shot for the next /fic/ write-off. That'll leave just three stories for the time being. Honestly, I wish I could just jump between this and Priority: Equestria, but too many ponies love H:CE (or just Halo crossovers in general.)

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