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I love you so much for this story.
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I feelz the love! 
I love Celestia almost as much as I love you for writing this.
I love the guy that loves celestia as much as he loves you as I love you, and that's a fact Jack!
Haha!
Okay you've made my night, a thumb up from me
2919282 The great one has spoken.
I ... I ... I just don't know what to say ...
This was entertaing, dude.
Nice job.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Ha ha! Halarious! And seeing as Berry Punch is awesomest pony, I love her new destiny! I support drunken alicorns!
Fantastic!
im with rainbow bob on this one.
great stuff.
and the bob seal of approval as well, mighty praise that is.
(Thou art a very silly pony indeed! Thy tale of Our sister's inebriated antics hath amused Us greatly!)
A couple of bits I noticed:
The word you want is "unfazed", not "unphased" (this one trips up a lot of people)
You've used the wrong "your" / "you're" forms.
Here's a tip: Whenever you're not sure of the right form for words like "your" / "you're", "it's" / "its", "their" / "they're"... take the contraction form (the one with the apostrophe), expand it out to its full form ("you are", "it is", "they are", plug it into the sentence, and see if it still makes sense:
“Fine! You are on!” -- still makes sense, so use "you're"
You should’ve seen, ha ha ha, you are face. -- nonsense, so use "your"
This is another one of those irregular verbs that trips people up a lot. In this context, the past tense is still "she burst into laughter", not "bursted". ("Bursted" is an old form that's considered grammatically incorrect in modern writing.)
2919432>>2919296 I know you, and you!
Hehehe. I expect thirty five shots to put Celestia down. Weird, not bad!
To quote a great man: To alcohol! The root of, and solution to, all of life's problems!
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So much love!
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YAY! Just don't go getting yourself drunk.
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Yes, yes he has.
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PART TILL YOU CAN'T PARTY NO MORE! *breaks out into weird dance*
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Thanks so much!
2919449
Thanks! I'm thinking about doing a Berry Punch alicorn story now. It'll depend though.
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Thanks!
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Yeah it is. *giggles* Thanks!
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Lol I wanted to facehoof myself when I saw that I had missed up you're and your. 
Thanks for the editing g thingy. It's all patched up now!
But everything is okay now!
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I'm thinking about it... Maybe if I find enough inspiration to write something about another drunken pony story or a drunken alicorn story.
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Thanks! And the only reason Luna didn't go down was cause she enchanted hers so she wouldn't get as drunk as fast. Basically by the end of the story i think it was more like she drank 2 beers worth. Then again I have no idea how to measure alcohol consumption.
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Amen to that brother.
No one got my Duck Dynasty reference yet?
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I don't watch Duck Dynasty. My southern prep school attendees and youth church members nag at me for not watching it.
I mostly watch American Pickers.
For me its sorta just the opposite: I watch Duck Dynasty a lot, but not American Pickers.
Theylll finish making the new Duck Dynasty season around August 14-18 I believe? I'm too lazy to make sure.
That was... exceedingly odd. Good. But odd.
Oh my god. This is hilarious.
It's all fun and games till Celestia wakes up tomorrow and realizes that she needs to hold 296 new coronations. Hope you've got plenty of bits in the Treasury, Sun-Butt. Or just go "Fuck it Luna, we're coming up with a political system that makes one damn bit of sense."
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Human's can generally process about one drink's worth per hour without getting drunk. Depends on what you're drinking, your gender, age, if you're eating something with your alcohol, so on. I have no idea how well a fancy pants magic pony princess's liver processes ethanol. Though if Celestia's on her thirty-fifth shot in maybe an hour and not dead yet, apparently the answer to that is "amazingly well". To be entirely fair, Celestia's not only about the size of a small horse, meaning somewhere in the range of 1,500 pounds or so, but as I have mentioned, is a fancy pants magic pony princess.
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ATTENTION EVERYPONY!
I went back and added something (I defiantly did not forget the first time *cough cough*) to the story and if you go back and look for it I'm pretty sure you'll find it~
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Thanks I like odd... BAA!
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DO IT HASBRO! NOW!
2923649
Why thank you! *bows*
2924519
Omgosh yesh~
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Celestia is going to find out that this bureaucratic ball of yarn is going to be worse then the hangover. "I have to get approval from HOW many ponies before passing a law now? And ALL of them need to agree?"
2924548. as they say " the devil is in the details" ain't it darlin.
Nicely done. Generally most people who've never tasted alcohol start with beers and mixed drinks. I figured the Luna would trick her sister with a more mild drink that doesn't have any harsh bite.
"Berry, get us two rum runners with 151." Luna smirked mischievously.
Celestia comments that it's pretty sweet and how her chest feels warm. They then make the no-no of mixing booze types and now Celestia is drunk off her ass sipping on a Long Island Ice Tea.
Me and my friends usually stick with Kamikaze shots, because their cheap, taste like lime juice and can sneak up on you. After all they're only Vodka, triple sec and lime juice (add cranberry juice and you have a Cosmo). At first you think that taste pretty good, then you have another and 10 shots later, you get up and it feels like someone pulled the earth from under your feet.
*a rum runner is essentially a sweet rum slushy.
Haha! So much lol!
Okay, this was just silly.
Not that there's anything wrong with that.
Haven't alicorns already taken over the world? The over a thousand year reign isn't something to ignore.
Great story, though Luna seemed far too sober. Did I miss something in that regards?
Very nice, but, ahem, commas.
A Super Race has been created!!!!!
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The Alicorn Congress
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You know it.
2925015
So many combos...
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LAUGH!
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I agree.
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Luna but a spell on her drinks so she wouldn't get as drunk as fast.
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i know... I'M TERRIBLE AT THEM!
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Yesh~
2922497
If you do, it will be in my top favs, and you will become best author...ever!
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Hahaha yay! But it'll have to fit in with school, but first I'd have to think of a plot for the story.
i would have found it funny if AJ and RD were drunkenly making out after all those shots...
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2919282 You know, I only thought of posting that gif because of your avatar.
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Ok, it's not a good story, but it is funny, especially at the end. I can picture AJ and RD waking up to this. Funniest "Everyone is an alicorn," that I have read.
'leaned' does not require capitalization.
You either forgot closing quotations before 'pause for dramatic effect' or you added some extra just before 'PARTY CANNON!'
d-d-d-d-double mistake in one paragraph! Stick a comma between 'string' and 'sending'.
A better phrasing would be '--but he quickly extinguished the cigarette--'. The rest is fine as is.
A comma would feel right at home between 'aura' and 'opening.' Also, maybe explain the fact that he was a unicorn beforehand? I had been imagining an earth pony until that sentence. A simple fix would be changing '--where a burly stallion was smoking--' to '--where a burly unicorn was smoking--'.
'lightening?' Switch to 'light'. Also, go Vinyl Scratch! Wub it up!
Second sentence is a fragment. Fix via 'Princess Luna, Applejack, and Celestia sat at the bar while Pinkie Pie was adorning Fluttershy and Rarity in glowstick attire. Quick and simple fix for a simple problem.
Stick a comma between 'surprised' and 'Applejack'. Stick it real good. Also, go Berry Punch! Alcohol it up!
Possible fixes include but are not limited to: 'Funny. Never seen--', 'It's funny that I've never seen--', 'Funny that I've never seen--' and 'Funny, I've never seen--'.
Comma between 'Okay' and 'onto'. Little bastards are elusive, ain't they?
Poor Luna seems to have skipped a period. That's why you wear protection, kids!
Possible fixes include both 'Bartender! Give us--' and 'Bartender, give us--'
It's a frag! And not the grenade variety, either. Fix with 'She returned a few moments later with Applejack Daniels and shot glass prepared on a tray.' By the by, since it's a match between Celestia and Luna, wouldn't there be more than one shot glass?
Smart move, Berry. Drunk alicorns are notoriously rowdy. On another note; wouldn't that 'trotted' be better off as a 'trotting'? I've told it that it should think about the operation, but it's just so scared of surgery. Think you can talk some sense into it?
Comma needed after 'Tia'. Those deserters will be found and reprimanded for leaving their posts!
Comma between 'sister' and 'who'. As I said, none get away with leaving the army until their tour of duty is complete!
Another double kill! Comma between 'side to side' and 'Celestia'.
Frankly, just take off the 'in front of her'. Seriously, just take an ax and chop it off, like a doctor from any video game, ever.
Get down, men! It's gonna blow! Private, get back here! Covering the explosion with your body won't do any good! ... Oh, it's just another sentence frag. Switch to 'She burst into an uncontrollable fit of laughter, barely able to stay seated in the bar stool.'
'She turned to the bar, her horn aglow.' Yes, 'aglow' rather than 'a glow'. Or just use 'glowing'. Plus the comma.
If I find the comma that goes between 'sister' and 'Celestia', it'll be lucky if I don't hand it over to the firing squad!
Double mistake, the third! The comma between 'loud' and 'flash' should move to the other side of 'flash'. At least it was somewhat near its assigned post.
No mistakes found in this sentence.
Comma between 'enough' and 'another'.
Instead of a comma, this time we need an 'as' between 'explanation' and 'to'. Also, go Octavia! Classical it up!
'herself' is not a necessary word. One does not simply facehoof another person.
Comma between 'me' and 'I'm'.
Two corrections, one sentence. Somewhere, a Grammar Nazi (one of the rude ones) is immensely enjoying that phrase. First, put either a comma or an 'and' between 'down' and 'whipping'. Secondly, 'a alicorn party' needs to be 'an alicorn party'.
'If you can't beat them, join them!' See what happened? Yep, another frickin' comma.
All in all, funny story. Relatively short, better grammar than some of the stuff I've read and everypony became alicorns! Finally, they'll be able to fight the red and black alicorn OC menace on even terms! Now for wrath, now for ruin and the red dawn!
3432425 Friggen nazis.
3925695 You're welcome!
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I'm not an AJ Dash shipper but, yes, it would have been quiet a scene...
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Amen.
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Thanks. It was a fun story to write but it's so stupid. I know.
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Thanks for the corrections! I fixed all of them I think...
P.S. No OC alicorns in my stories. No. Never. No. I can't write OCs that well anyway....
3925695
He's just trying to help *pats head*
Celestia's gonna have one hell of a hangover tomorrow. XD
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Hi Asuna(not sure if I spelled it right)
This explains why Celestia is only seen drinking tea!