Joel is a normal guy with a somewhat lousy life and repetitious night terrors, until one night when he is saved by something more wonderful than he could have ever thought to be his own.
But this leaves one question. Will Joel find solace in his 'safe haven' or will his beautiful dreams once again snap back to horrifying nightmares?
based on the lucid dreams of OPHavenDesigner on the /mlp/ board of 4chan.
NOTE: Updates may come a bit slowly, but this story will be finished, uh, soon.
Chapters (2)
That was fast. You're the guy who asked to write a story from his latest thread? It's such an interesting premise. Reading commencing.
EDIT: Read what you have so far. I like it. However, I want to like it more. I have a couple small criticisms. First of all, the scene changes are extremely abrupt and leave the reader with little detail on what the setting is. For example,
"Then the scene changed, It was just her and I sitting in a space station. Another weird thing is that there was under us, although we clearly were not anywhere earthly."
I believe you meant to say there was nothing or empty space under them. You're telling the reader where the author is, instead of showing them. You could have written something like,
"Suddenly, she and I sat in a sterile white room. Looking through the thick windows on all sides I could see... space. Vast, empty, full of stars. Looking down I saw that we were spinning high above the earth, hurtling through the abyss."
Something like that. I am not and am not claiming to be an accomplished writer, but I believe this fic could be very good with some edits. If you have any questions feel free to PM me.
TL;DR upvoted
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definitely taking what you said into further consideration when I make edits later.
Also, PMing you.
Great story there. When you first mentioned an orange pony, the first pony that came to my mind was Scootaloo. You obviously remember your dreams very well. Very rarely do I remember my dreams. Keep on dreamin' and you will be able to come up with more great fan fics.
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Allow me, anon. Archive of every Haven thread.
http://imgur.com/a/75vqf
2914423 Nej. This person is simply copy pasting with a few edits. This is not OPHavenDesigner, simply a fan.
2914758
I got permission from OP to make a story version.
I'll be adding things that haven't actually happened to OP shortly, though.
2914778 Alright. I wasn't trying to insult you, just trying to provide some info. I was there for the threads anyways.
2916337
not sure if serious or not.
2916660
well played.
It's kind of weird to just say that Joel woke up and drew Haven as well as he could remember. I know you're pretty much copying his posts from the threads, but maybe you could embed the original illustration in this? I know it's possible to show images directly into the story, as I've seen it done before...
Plus, it would make it seem more "real" and immersive to people who are just reading it here.
Wow, now I feel silly for posting on the first chapter when the party seems to be over here. Anyway, I'm liking this adaption, looking forward to more.
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i was going to, but i couldn't find the original drawings.
cover img was on derpibooru.org but it been shut down l think...anyone know if this artist uses another site?
I think the artist is "friendly drawfriend"
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it's on the Haven thread of /mlp/
Pretty much just piggy-backed off of the original story. I feel as though we have enough information on the character to make a unique story instead of just rewriting OP's story but more refined.