Still using "allot" when it should be "a lot." Remember, "allot" is a verb. Also, "Must be why Trixie’s body feels so weak to psychical labor." Should be "physical." And finally, while it's not a typo or anything, "dere" instead of "there" sounds more like a New Jersey accent than a Southern accent. Other than that, very nice.

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Thanks for pointing those out. I didn't proofread this chapter much, wanted it out today, so I kind off rushed it (can probably be noticed at the end )

The dere thing I actually had as der first (As in dem der ponies), but it sounded silly to me (and too german ...) so I added an e. I just studied some fics based around AJ to help with the southern accent typing, and most seemed to use dere, so I editted based on those ^^"

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It can get worse, there are A LOT of devious things a writer can do to the protagonist without going off on a wild tangent, especially with a mature rating on the fanfic. Like, for all we know, Trixie could get molested by Twilight in the next chapter.

I THINK I LEFT THE THE OVEN IN THE CASSEROLE.

love it

Tel the truth...and have RD eavesdrop.

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Are making oven casseroles again? I know you've made them before.

2979424 I added microwave this time.

2980164 That should make it better then last time.

I never thought I'd see the day where there would be a mane six first meeting that didn't feel forced, too convinient, and completely unnatural!

If by nothing else, I will remember this fic for that.

I liked it he's to fanboy and to sacred other than that it was cool

I can´t get enough right now, so i hope the story is long enough or maybe you even make a sequel if it stayed this good.

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I'm rather curious as to why our character can't explain he's not really Trixie. My money is on a fail-safe spell Trixie is using.

Hmm... that would explain that. Interested to see if that is the case... I often underestimate magic...

All you had to do was tell the truth Jerry!
It was simple!
One job!

Now onto the private talk with little Ms. Sparkle.