Love.
It is a powerful emotion, the feeling of sheer ecstasy when in the presence of one the heart yearns for. It's the feeling of intimate connection deeper and more exhilarating than any on Earth. The feeling as though the entire world has disappeared and the only thing that is left is the two lovers locked in each others' embrace.
Caramel Apple knows this all too well. He has been harboring secret feelings for a certain unicorn for a long time, almost since they first met. But he has a problem; she's a high class filly from Canterlot, who has studied at the finest school in the realm and has a personal connection the Their Majesties themselves. He's just a working-class schlub who was born and raised in the boondocks who makes his living getting his hooves burned in his blacksmith's shop. He knows that there isn't any way that Twilight Sparkle will see him as anything more than a good friend.
Just goes to show you how little he knows.
Hmm...
I really dig this! Never seen Caramel as a successful business man before. Hell, I don't think I've ever seen him as a successful anything! He's usually the fandom's butt-monkey, or character we need when slapstick comedy is called for.
I also like how you have them both with feelings for each other. Usually, we have to deal with the angst of "Does he/she feel the same way?"
My only critique is you never said why Twilight stopped by Caramel's shop. Without a reason for going, it feels like, "Hi, Caramel! It's important for the plot that I stop by, so here I am!" Might want to add a line or two saying why she's there.
Other than that, I am curious where this will go!
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Which scene do you mean? At the beginning?
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Agreed - she does just sort of show up at that first scene. Maybe she just wanted to see him?
Otherwise, the note she's set to give Caramel reads more like a marriage proposal than a 'let's start dating'. That said, it makes sense seeing as Twilight's more or less just going on what she's learned out of books. Coming on strong. Shows a bit of the extent of her naievete in that regard.
I wonder if Hyacinth is going to act against them and their ship now that they've made an enemy of him.
You're confusing 'it's' and 'its' it's = it is and its = belonging to it
*Pregnant pause*
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6570719 thanks for pointing that out
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Lol you got the reference?
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Sure did! I used to read Cussler's books a lot when I was younger. In fact, I remember choosing Dragon for one of my high school book reports (because it was in the school library) and I consider Raise the Titanic as one of my "guilty pleasure" flicks.
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Cool
Nice first chapter, I'm definitely looking forward to future ones! It has been too long since I've seen a good Cara-Light story on here!
Yes! The feels!
I NEED.....
What a great chapter. I can hardly wait to read more of this story. Currently placing at a 3/5 I wonder if the next chapter will raise that... anyway things are in a turn around. Twilight finds love. I like the sound of that(Bonus for not being a clop.) and if she can find it, through all her naivete, then anypony can.
This has been fun... 4/5 for now. Maybe when there is more content it can get a 5/5, but that remains to be seen. ^^ I love what you did with each character reminiscing about Twilight. Mature Spike... okay... I've enjoyed myself with this chapter. It felt like it lacked something; though I wouldn't be able to name it. Also there is a difference between Apple Juice and Apple Cider: Apple Juice is pasteurized while Apple Cider isn't, also Apple Cider if left alone long enough has a chance for fermentation turning alcoholic.