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For Ponyville's premier nurse, life is anything but slow - a full-time job, a budding relationship with Big Macintosh, and her own friends and family often leave Redheart's hooves full, and it's all she can do to catch a break.

It's a tough job, but somepony's gotta do it.

Fic is rated Teen for gore (due to medical situations), language, and romantic situations.
Featured on Equestria Daily! Thanks to everyone who has read, reviewed, and commented!

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 122 )

A Redheart-centric fic with no clop at all, and an original pairing to boot? You better believe it!

NOTE: Fic will update sporadically until noted otherwise.

Characters have good dimension and the story flows pretty well. Kudos.

:twilightangry2: Lunch thieves are so aggravating. It's like, what are you, six? You need someone to tell you that stealing is wrong? That this behavior is so well-known says terrible things about humanity as a whole.

Oh, and, uh, good first chapter, I guess. :twilightsheepish:

Added to RIL. :pinkiehappy: Shouldn't this have the Nurse Redheart tag?

Kind sir, I just wanted to let you know, that I registered 10 seconds ago just to comment on this story:
omygoshomygoshomygosh! That's exactly the story I was looking for! :rainbowkiss:
Seriously, Redheart deserves much more love then she receives, she doesn't even have her own character tag on this site...

Nice! Can't say I've seen a Redheart-centric fic before, so I'm curious to see how you handle her.

*throws hooves in the air* MONDAYS!:flutterrage:

(Oh, and it's good to finally see a story about Nurse Redheart. She needs some attention.)

Well I have to admit I've never read a Redheart centric story before... then again I never really seen one before... okay maybe one but that was on EqD. Looks like a good start, and the foundation for the paring seems to be reasonable so that's good. Well I guess I will look forward to reading more of Triage.

In the Name of Her Serene Majesty Celestia, Princess of the Sun,
Celestia's Paladin: For Honor and Duty, For the Sun and Moon

401973 They haven't added a Nurse Redheart tag. Tons of people asked for it. But there werent enough stories featuring her to justify it. They said 5 would be enough. Now we have 6. Let's all petition Poultron for a Redheart tag

On subject, yay more Redheart. Tagged for RIL.

402133 402017 402195 there are 3 more Redheart Fics on here that aren't clop. "Thunderstruck," by CoffeeBean; "Living it to the Fullest," by CamoBadger; and "We are our Habits," by well... Me.

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Can't find "Living Life to the Fullest"... it's called "Living it to the Fullest".

402292 woops. Sorry, was going by memory. Will change it in my post to avoid confusion.

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No Redheart tag. I had to use 'Other'.

I approve of this on every level. Redheart is one of the most underused side characters and it also helps the fic was well written. We just need a snarky and sarcastic Hugh Laurie to pop in to the hospital. I mean what else is there to say about the fic so far? It's got great pacing, an interesting main character(she saves lives for a living), an original ship, tons of room for more chapters and a lot of detail concerning the world and medical terminology. I do wonder if you are going to have a chapter with that one cancer patient that died? That was canon in the show.
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Looks fantastic so far, great characterization and flow. My mother is a nurse, and I've seen what it can do to you. Definitely believable here.

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lot of detail concerning the world and medical terminology.

I'm a nursing student myself, so yeah. Been very particular about trying to be medically accurate, and I've also been quick to explain any terminology I've used in some way or another.
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Looks fantastic so far, great characterization and flow. My mother is a nurse, and I've seen what it can do to you. Definitely believable here.

Well, as my bio says, I'm a nursing student. Obviously don't have as much experience with it as your mother, but I've gotten a taste of it, so I'm doing what I can.

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Well, you're pretty spot-on so far. And sadly, it really is just about the money a lot of the time. She was fired from her old job not because she did anything wrong, but ultimately because they were tired of paying her so much money when they could just hire a handful of unskilled medical assistants to replace her. They work for barely half of what she did.

Then again, her old job was a mouthful of dicks, and I told her for two years to get the hell away from that place. Shame getting fired was what it took. :ajsleepy:

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I like it. Authentic enough to not sound like CSI writers wrote it, not so authentic it's dry and boring.

And I need more romance stories in my life, truth be told.

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We just need a snarky and sarcastic Hugh Laurie to pop in to the hospital.

This. SO MUCH.

Very Interesting. You are a very talented writer. :twilightsmile:

nice redheart fic

Not bad, not bad. That's one more of your stories into my tracked list.

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and I was once a major in radiation therapy, which kinda explains why I understood most of what you wrote. Small world.

not a fan of Macintosh as a character, but I'll see where this goes.

I was uncertain about this... but I'm definitely tracking this. Characterization is good, and that little bit at the end with no biting had me smiling like I usually am when i read your stories. I shouldn't have waited until now to read this- you write something, it's pretty much bound to be good.
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Once again Varg, you've done a good job.

I can't wait to read more when it comes out.

All those who think Redheart should heavily dose the next lunch she brings in with hotsauce? :trollestia:

No surprises here, I was blown away. Seriously, you only know how to awesome. Like, so hard that you turn awesome into a verb.

Now this is something definitely worthwhile :moustache:

...and why all the three nurse got 'heart' in their names? Such mystery of life :derpyderp2:

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Noooo idea. There's Nursery Rhyme, but she's a filly, and I honestly have no idea why she's at the hospital in the first place. For the rest of you, have some fixes!

Corrections
-All mentions of 'appendicitis' have been changed to 'cecitis'. Equines do not have an appendix, and as a result, it is impossible for them to ever contract appendicitis. Cecitis (inflammation of the cecum) is now included instead, seeing as equines DO have that and it's essentially the closest thing they have to an appendix.

I remember you saying that you're a Nurse student, so this will be as medically accurate as possible. This and the fact that its you who's writing probably made my mind into reading this. And you didn't disappoint. I have some trouble with some terminology (since I'm not from the US), but I liked how you explained some meanings for the layman readers.

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That's often one of the responsibilities a nurse has to undertake anyways - explaining what's what to the patient, in layman's terms.

407607 Well... she kinda explained it to herself mentally, not to the pony. But I get what you're saying and I completely agree.

Made several modifications to chapter 1 (Somnolence). An additional 200 words or so were added as a result.

Full list of changes:
-Added additional items throughout the first section to further hint at a pre-existing relationship between Redheart and Macintosh.
-Provided a better explanation as to why the Wonderbolts are at the Ponyville hospital. Because of this, the reason Redheart knows Soarin' has also been modified and improved.
-Toned down Macintosh's accent. Was a little excessive in some places.
-Removed some unnecessary ellipses and dashes.

Work will also begin shortly on chapter 2, to help further explain the relationship between Redheart and Macintosh.

A Redheart-centric fic?
With Big Mac+Redheart shipping?
With no clop?:rainbowhuh:

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I gotta say, I love how you write conversations between romantic partners. It's really believable and you get an idea of the shape of their relationship without being bludgeoned over the head with it. Good stuff!

Macintosh, you are the embodiment of a gentlestallion. :eeyup:
I do so hope things get better for Redheart.

Sweet, sweet slice of life. And damned accurate too.

This fic is nice, but if I'm going to have one complaint, and again maybe it's just me being silly, but this bugs me when it comes up.

Don't turn this into a 'vent my life issues' fic. Identifying with a character is great, and it helps with writing, but I can't tell you how many fics end up being ruined by "watch me vent my daddy issues while I ship myself with my favorite character." I don't want to sound like a cunt, and maybe it's just me, but I'm not exaggerating when I say it's ruined tons of fics for me.

This is a story I drop everything- including writing my own story- to read. Even if this chapter was short, it was short and sweet. You have their dynamics down perfectly, and this is one of the better depictions of Macintosh I've seen so far. Sometimes, stories paint him as slow, or a genius, or a southern, intolerant kind of guy. In this, he's smart but not genius level smart, and he isn't some intolerant prick or slow dude. Thank you for doing him justice. :eeyup:
Also Redheart is cool too, though why she didn't take up the 'Macintosh as a bed' offer straight away is a mystery. Heck, I'd do it, and I'm a guy. Although it would depend on the way he was used- his back a pillow? I don't want to get into spooning territory here or nothing, but you get the gist. Looking forward to whatever happens next, although I'm kind of waiting for it to turn into some epic adventure where they have to go save some patient or something with a magic fruit only found in the dark heart of the Everfree. I dunno. *shrug*

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Don't turn this into a 'vent my life issues' fic. Identifying with a character is great, and it helps with writing, but I can't tell you how many fics end up being ruined by "watch me vent my daddy issues while I ship myself with my favorite character." I don't want to sound like a cunt, and maybe it's just me, but I'm not exaggerating when I say it's ruined tons of fics for me.

Uh, I wasn't going to? The fic is about Redheart, and to a smaller extent, her relationship with Macintosh. It's not about me, or my issues.

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You mean you weren't planning to use Redheart as a proxy to ship yourself wih Big Mac? All my illusions, shattered.

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Ok, I just had that thought when I saw 'no one respects me and appreciates me.' I'm just saying I've read too many fics where people essentially self insert themselves by proxy with a character they identify with.

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She says that because they really don't respect her or appreciate her. Her lunch is frequently stolen, even after talking with the pony who does it, and she's frequently given short patient lists, which leads to every other pony disliking her (because it means more work for them).

These two are super adorbs together.

Wow felt like I was watching house or something very well done

Wow, this seems factual, not to mention accurate on every level :pinkiehappy: keep this up:pinkiehappy:

I was going to say that given your line of studies, you'd have the perfect understanding (or somewhat, I guess... Not sure) of, well, the stress a nurse might go through-- and I don't meant using Redheart as a proxy of sorts for you like some meant, but actually knowing/experiencing something generally gives a writing edge, and... Blah, I think you know what I'm getting at.

Point is, it's a really nice couple and like somepony said, it feels believable. The way they talk, it just works. And it's endearing.
[Edit] Oh right, forgot. I know you said you might not be updating this too often possibly, but I wouldn't mind if you do in the slightest. =3

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