A particularly stubborn human is lost in Equestria and is trying his damnedest to find a way out, while surviving the surprisingly difficult rigours of life in a land filled with cute talking animals. Hilarity ensues.
The chronicle of Twilight's journey through a land under siege by darkness and corruption. Her only protection from the undead and yet darker forces lie with her new companions and a champion of light sworn to defend her. But will it be enough?
Pretty good so far. Only complaint is the shifting between past and present tense. I take it the narrator is someone who knows these ponies and is telling a tale of what happened in the past? Otherwise the mixture of the two tenses doesn't work.
2975668 I'll take that into account :) I'm trying to make the narrator an omnicient figure who knows the past and the future, but is trying not to reveal too much of the past at one time... I think that's why I was having difficulty figuring out what I want to reveal to the readers just yet... Hopefully I can be sure not to mess it up in Chapter 2 ;P
Pretty good so far. Only complaint is the shifting between past and present tense. I take it the narrator is someone who knows these ponies and is telling a tale of what happened in the past? Otherwise the mixture of the two tenses doesn't work.
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I'll take that into account :) I'm trying to make the narrator an omnicient figure who knows the past and the future, but is trying not to reveal too much of the past at one time... I think that's why I was having difficulty figuring out what I want to reveal to the readers just yet... Hopefully I can be sure not to mess it up in Chapter 2 ;P