Equestria has fallen and the resistance is failing in every way possible, so how will they deal with a pair of devices that could change the very face of the war?
Living in the Midwest has it's advantages like never being near conflict, but what happens when the 2 million+ residents are thrown into a virtual hell?
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Promising story, upvote and follow, like to see where it goes
Hiya, any chance for more chapters? The story is good, and don't worry about low view, sometimes need to get lucky to post the story at the right time
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Yes I am still writing chapters it's just hat school has been kicking me around and trying to find a job has been a pain. Just know that I am still writing and plan to have a chapter up soon.... I hope.
Good story I still want to know how the Weather station plays into the story Like!
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My English teacher told me this last year. "A writer never puts something into a story for no reason." Trust me there is a method to my madness.
i wouldn't be suprized if the anomaly are 'sparks' of the spell, if a whole city be teleported then this make sense, especialy if there is say, time dealation between worlds.
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Trust me it's nothing that complicated. I swear everything will make since next chapter.
I really feel that the attacking forces are VERY overpowered. They're mythological creatures for fucks sake! They shouldn't have armor that can resist bullets and weaponry that destroy helicopters in one hit. If you say it's because of magic, i will be so fucking angry....
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I hate that explanation so much, it doesn't explain anything. Just think of it like this: the invading forces just came from a world where two creatures could control celestial bodies on a whim. If it was me I would bring every gun I had to bear on them. I plan on explaining the point you brought up and others in future chapters, but right now I have to make sure the humans make it out alive.
3713246 Still, magic is shown to be somewhat weak in the show, and yet your having normally magic-less creatures running around with PLATE ARMOR that stops bullets, and guns that take out helicopters in one shot? Really?
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Regarding the armor, it was the type of round that was being used. A .45 ACP round is near ineffective against body armor because of its low-velocity. For the helicopter, think of a ground-to-air missile like the Stinger missile, think of how effective it is against low flying aircraft, and I'm not talking about video game physics I mean real life physics.
3713379 Yes, but plate armor was made to withstand swords and arrows. Not god damn bullets! It might offer some protection, but not much. Also, the griffons don't have stingers...
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Alright look, I don't want to start off the new year with an argument over something in a fictional story so how about this. If you agree to wait and be a little patient I promise to explain everything in the next chapter. I don't like things happening that I can't explain so I know how you feel, but a good writer never puts something into a story for no reason.
That was a long time without a update I just barely just rember what happen xD it came to me as I read so that was good
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You're welcome?
Quick grammar note, dialogue grammar needs some work. While you seem to understand the basics, there are times where you don't follow it. A few examples of the most common errors:
"The" shouldn't be capitalized.
The period should be a comma and "The" shouldn't be capitalized.
You're missing the punctuation there.
I'd also suggest another round of editing as there were several noticeable errors.
A few notes on content:
ACP: Automatic Colt Pistol. That's not a bullet type. AP, ballistic tip, hollow-point and such are a bullet types, and effect how the bullet will react when hitting a target. ACP is a bullet design like rimless or belted, and basically only effect accuracy and where/how the bullet will fit into the chamber.
I have to agree with 3712673. The armor used is OP. A .45 ACP may not be able to defeat Kevlar (I've seen times where it has gone through just Kevlar) and Ballistic Plate, but it can and has perpetrated steel plate armor. At the very least, it will dent the armor so bad that it has a good solid inch dent into it (enough that a bone will be broken and there is a good chance of organ damage if hit in the chest area).
Overall, still withholding judgement. I can easily see this going either way. It manly depends on whether I buy your explanation of how plate armor can defeat bullets. I can see their weapons being able to damage/destroy our vehicles, though even that will need a little explanation as to how.
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This doesn't mean anything. When you are a military commander, or even a boot on the ground, if you don't do that to an invading force, then you are incompetent. I was in the military, and that's SOP to any threat. In fact, it's basic logic.
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Low velocity doesn't mean a thing when the bullet has a large mass. A .45 ACP will always knock you flat on your back, armor or not, because it has such a large amount of stopping power. Also, stopping power that effects armor as well, not just the speed of a bullet (which is substantial even with a .45 ACP round).
3715657 Nice. But I still feel that they're weapons are badly overpowered.
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I'd say it depends. If we're talking about a weapon like the griffon version of an AT4, then that's a good explanation as to how it took out a human armored vehicle. If we're talking about their standard rifle, then yeah. It'll need some serious explanation. A theoretical plasma rifle would be able to knock out HMMWVs, but a theoretical laser rifle can't. So as I mentioned, there definitely needs to be some explanation as to what kind of weapon the OPFOR are using, and what the properties of that weapon are.
As of right now, I still have a solid level of disbelief that can be used, but that can easily be damaged by how this explanation is handled. On the other hand, it can just be as easily reinforced if the explanation is handled well.
3716182 If it's magic, I will be pissed. In the show, magic is generally weak.
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", I will too. Though with how everything has been written out so far, I doubt it will be that simple of an explanation. It might be n the level of some techno-magic or more highly developed combat magic (the Royal Guard hasn't had to cut their teeth on anything in over 1,000 years, cannon-wise, so the chances would be high that they never put in the effort to advance their weaponry, armor, equipment and tactics). There are ways the author can spin magic and have it make sense.
If it's just straight "it's magic, I ain't gotta explain s
3716236 Even highly advanced combat magic would still be generally weak: how many unicorns have cutie marks for fighting?
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OPFOR are gryphons, dragons Zebras and the like. Not ponies.
3716350 There you go! They have never been shown to use magic!
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This is where fanfics are allowed to play with cannon. There's been no evidence to show that they don't have magic. So that means that they could.
Are the Ponies gonna be coming in to help the Humans kick ass or no?
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I am going to be blunt, the ponies will not be making a grand-Earth-saving appearance in this story. I'm one of those people that thinks the Equestrian military couldn't fight their way out of a cardboard box even with directions painted on the side in big neon colors. Yes they will still be in here, yes they will play a big role in helping, and yes I realize that the show is meant for children, but when your national defense has to rely on six girls that hold a power that relies on all six of them to work I think you might want reconsider whose in charge of your military.
ALL HAIL MISSOURI!!!!
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Damn straight brother.
How's a Navy Commander in charge of armor, and as a Command (O-5), why is he taking orders from a Lieutenant (Navy/USCG: O-3; Army/USAF/USMC: O-1/2)?
Okay, this has been bugging me. Why the hell did this armored company (Division? Platoon?) let untrained civilian volunteers join as 11-Bravos?
Honestly, if a military was desperately short on manpower, I'd have the civilian volunteers doing non-combatant work like food prep, quartermaster or (with some training) ordnance handlers. I'd never have them in a combatant role.
I suppose they are that desperate, the story is in a extraordinary scenario, Aliens attacking with out discrimination army and civil personal alike. One thing on my end, and could say not a necessary part. Why none checked on the enemy forces at least near them, i doubt all and every shot fired got it's mark and earn a kill, and a prisoner, or prisoners for later use be more then useful, the usual 'learn what makes them tick'
On the other hand i can't wait untill they final kick the coalition arse and occupy the portal in a massive counter offensive. I can think of that being done, most efficently, with nerve gas. You want the place untouched, you want all the enemy dead, they shown no sign of knowledge regarding chemical based weaponry ( lack of gas mask or anything alike ) as more focused on magical ones, for obv reasons. Also relative to this, how will they brake the barrier? I take it's alike Shining Armors one, so constant bombardment should do the trick, and here i can imagine the assembled forces just began do that once learn what happening in the inside, get civies out and march in a massive force to wipe the invading force out. Prep the artillery, bombers fighters and hail hell on the barrier
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Keep up the good work and MOAR CHAPTERS
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To answer the first question, I don't know. I tried looking for the rank for someone in charge of armor, but I couldn't find it. Truthfully, I completely forgot that I could ask you since it has been a long ass time since I last posted. School and what not. And to answer the second question, situation of the moment I guess. Not the best answer but still an answer.
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And to this question I answer situation of the moment. What I mean is that our entire military is built around a volunteer system, meaning we let untrained civilians join all the time. Granted the ones in the story haven't been given training, but then again Missouri and Kansas are technically southern states. And you know how much we southerners love our guns. I mean, I know a guy that has a 50. Caliber black powder bolt-action rifle. I asked him why he would need that, to which he answered "just to have it."
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A 1LT or a 2LT would work fine, since (if his MOS is 12A [General Armored Officer], 12B [Armor Officer] or a 12C [Calvary Officer]) they would be in charge of a platoon of armored vehicles and crew and would have the training and experience to lead them effectively. As for the last, it's not even an answer. A Commander would never take orders from someone below him in rank, even in this situation. In fact, especially in this situation. Ranks are there for a reason. They denote experience, training, skill and expertise (at least, they are supposed to, I think we all know a Sobel [the movie portrayal of him] in our lives). Unless someone above him ordered him to, and even then, that would cause issues, the Commander would be coming up with the plans and strategies, not one of his subordinate officers.
Recommendation: Swap the OiC's rank to Captain (O-3), feel free to have him be freshly promoted, and move the other ranks down to 1LT or 2LT (O-2, O-1 respectively). Feel free to have the more senior ones (or at least the ones you want to have some years under their belt) have prior service experience before going through OCS or the Academies. You can keep the NCOs' ranks the same, as none of them would violate the billets that they are filling, given the situation.
another great chapterWell
You liked this chapter so much you posted it twice?
You have the chapter twice, just saying
I haven't read your story yet, but all hell's breaking loose in Kansas City? The place that isn't too far from where I live?
Well, that settles it. I'm off to find the nearest shelter with a overjoyed cry of "Oh, [BLEEP]!"
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Oh crap thanks I didn't even notice.
well Looks like the enemy just learned how effectife our weapons really can be, great chapter
Very pleasantly surprised and entertained by this fic. Will keep an eye out on this. Keep up the good work!
My thoughts while reading this:
"We are not ready yet."
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This whole problem could be solved if the president would just pick up the phone and call in Team America. The only tradeoff would probably be Kansas City.
Can't wait for the Federation to learn of the unholy hell they have wrought upon themselves.
Its good, keep it coming XD
well great chapter again, Keep going
Row row row your boat.
Up into the the stream
Lock and load in tactic mode
United States Marines
Thats going to be a while for you to be gone...... Probably not getting another chapter for a good 8 months. And thats if we're lucky.
Good chapter once more, it do sounds things got quieter but when will they brake the barrier? I mean it's pretty much clear with 2 weeks in the armed forces fully surround the shield bubble and they experiment what could be used to breach it, disrupt it, when that happens, hit shits the fan. Hopefully before chapter 20 XP
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Actual reaction. Amazing man, thanks for the update. :)
To go off what Ice3smaster said, it would be logical that they could just dig under the barrier. making a barrier in the air is one thing and already costs enormous amounts of power, going straight through miles of solid dirt, rock, and bedrock is another. Knowing the military that would be the first thing they would try, "cant go over or through? Go under."
PS: More Species Coalition if you can please. I love seeing this from the point of view from a griffin or Minotaur. Even them just trying to make out what a statue is supposed to represent would be interesting.
Nice chapter, just have two problems...
1.) NEED MORE
APPLESCHAPTERS2.) And when will we get through that shield, 3 weeks its there, and 3 weeks is a long time to experiment about, i personally long would have fired 1 ICBM on the top of the shield, as a purple oversized shield that did not even budge for this long, the world is watching and getting trigger happy. And they need some kicking in the arse so we could begin the part the Equestrian part.
One thing sure, can't wait for the next chapter