The day was now departing; the dark air
released the living beings of the earth
from work and weariness
A mysterious creature enters Ponyville, bringing with him nothing but misery and hopelessness. Twilight Sparkle needs her friends, but they have been led astray by this newcomer's evil ways. As a cloud of unending darkness looms over the town, Twilight learns that this may only be the beginning of something much worse to come.
Special Thanks to Biglulu for pre-reading! Thanks for sticking with me!
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Yo dawg, we heard you like monster story arcs...
*This story*
Well it certainly was interesting and it outdid the other one by a long shot...
On a 100% unrelated side note, that RariTwi scene was downright clop material.
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Hmmm... all very interesting. Though I think that the ending was a bit... abrupt.
Welcome to the world of writing competitions, my friend. I didn't enter the write-off - casual fan, after all - but I know what it's like to enter a comp with something you worked on and get nuttin'. Don't let it discourage you, though.
I am rather unfamiliar with G1 mythology but this was a rather interesting little story, and I think you set the scene of an apocalyptic Ponyville well. Does this mean you're going to try and make Kaleidoscope more focussed by giving some of the plot bunnies from the original version their own stories, 'cause I think that'd be a good idea.
Cool story bro.
308684 Pfft, my entry didn't even get any attention until after the comp.
So, yeah. I get it, man.
Well done. I enjoyed it. I would love to see an expanded version, using this as the main concept. Also, maybe, a sequel, Rarity Mistress of the Night.