• Member Since 18th Oct, 2012
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Just another writer that aims to entertain. Nothing to see here, move along. Though yes, I am very feminist. Don't like it? That's nice.


Dearest Shining Armor,

By the time you read this, I’ll be long gone.

Originally a one-shot written during a very trying time, but many people asked for a continuation. You can read the first chapter by itself if you wish, and that may even be advisable, but I still hope that you'll enjoy the rest.

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Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 402 )

These are words which I have taken to heart, and because of them I have felt much pain. They were words that pierced like iron and burned like cold steel. Few stories have made me feel this much. I have left a like and a favorite. Bravo, sir!


You're too kind. :twilightblush: Though that is very encouraging. As I said in the announcement journal for this story, I may turn it into a full story and add more chapters if there's enough demand; every one shot I've done seems to turn out that way so far for some reason. :twilightoops:

Oh damn..... the feels.

Make it a bigger story its too good to just leave it cmon, you should know that its an amazing story!

I read that short title, I honestly hoped it was a story based off of the SNL skit "Dear Sister".

This should have an Alternate Universe tag. Just saying.

...It was really depressing, btw. It probably wasn't smart for me to read this while sleep-deprived...

Full story please!!!!!
I want a happy ending!:pinkiehappy:

I wouldn't mind seeing more for this, if I may say.
If you decide not to, this story stands quite fine as a one-shot.

I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.

Cool story. Not sad. but a decent read

Maybe it's because my girlfriend just broke up with me, but yeah, the ending is perfect, don't change a thing.

Really hard decision if you should continue this as its perfect as it is right now... But I really want to see there this ends if you decide to make more chapters . A fav and like from me.

Damn, I usually stay away from stories with the tragedy tag. I read this on a whim and it reminded me why... I always want to give them a happy ending. :fluttercry:

Kudos, and well done. :ajsleepy:


While I would very much like to see this continued, I'm not sure if I'd like it if you started working on more than one continuing story, since you seem to have severe ADHD when it comes to writing.

Still, though, this is an excellent story, and I'm glad to see you writing something.

Saw this in the "New Stories" box, and saw that this didn't have the normal number of likes/dislikes, so I decided to read it, and I have to say... Very good work. As far as whether or not to keep it going or keep it as a one-shot, do what you feel is best. Great job either way.

:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:WHHHHY:raritydespair: It's so short and sad.

I haven't have to do this in while. well, It's time to go cry in the shower again. :pinkiesad2::fluttercry::raritycry:

Give them a happy ending.... :fluttercry:

I'm gonna DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

Good story, but it could use some more. It just doesn't feel... complete.

Oh, excellent work! I have to say, though - I'd love to see more. The ending felt incomplete to me, somehow - not quite a resolution.

I think you should continue it. You've shown a situation, but the whole story is dedicated to setting up the scene so it never develops so in its current state it feels very incomplete. You don't need to turn it into an epic, in fact you could probably resolve it in a chapter or two, but you should bring it to a proper resolution.

I love how you made it simple and to the point.
Not paragraphs of useless detail that make me bored. *terribly sorry if I offend anybody*
I like a quick and short read, and this was it.
So sad, though. :raritydespair:


I agree with the above comments. You have an incredible amount of buildup, story wise, and have no real conclusion. All we are left with are questions, like:
1. What was the cause for Changeling Cadence's choice to leave? The way it's written made it seem to come out of nowhere.
2. Does anyone else besides the palace guards and Shining know the truth? Heck, do the guards even know the truth about whom they're searching for?
3. Where does Shining stand on this? All we have is the face that he is grief stricken. Does he want to search for his wife or does he want to search for Cadence?

Honestly, I'm alright with sad endings. A good sad ending leaves the reader feeling empty, yet whole. However, this doesn't really seem like an ending to me. I still enjoyed the crap out of it though. Good job.

Being in a dark mood drew me to this story. I don't normally read tragedy's but I decided to check it out. This idea was pretty unique. Personally I would have had the Changeling be pregnant with Shining's child, but that is just me. One wonders if deep down he still loves her? Also I know the fate of the real Cadance is ambiguous, but I sense a dark implication, a kill and replace scenario.

It was everything i was expecting it to be honestly. I gave it a like.

This story was amazing. Loved the way the letter was written, the way the room was after its destruction, EVERYTHING!! Great job, sad ending. :moustache: :raritydespair:

I'd love to see this continued, even if for a chapter or two more.

I've got to admit, I wouldn't mind seeing some continuation of this. I'm even tempted to write one, if that was considered okay?

Feels like this:
Or feels like this:

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In concept this is good, yes, but as of right now I'm not sure where I'd take it. Well, I know where I'd take the next chapter after this, but a long-term plan so far is eluding me. Besides, I have Dear Spike, In the Pale Moonlight, and For Want of a Mask to work on, along with my sole comedy piece, My Little Insano: Madness is Magic. I've got a lot on my plate right now.

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I'm more of a bittersweet ending kind of guy, but I'll consider it? :trixieshiftright:

Sadly never seen SNL in my life. :twilightsheepish: Wow I need to get out more. :twilightoops:

Well, possibly. I mean, I haven't directly contradicted canon, since there are a lot of blanks concerning Cadence, and we can't label every story that fills in blanks as AU. It's borderline for me, but I'll consider it.

Also, no, that wasn't the best idea. :twilightoops:

You're very welcome! :pinkiehappy: And I think at this point I pretty much have to continue it in the future, but it won't be anytime soon.

Oi people, no downvoting commenters for having an opinion (besides outrageously stupid ones but still, sheesh). :trixieshiftleft:

Sorry to hear about that. :fluttershysad: Still... hmr. I don't know how to meet the demand to keep this as it is and to continue it, but I'm sure there's a way to satisfy both somehow. I'm stumped, though. :applejackunsure:

See above; running out of unique things to say, sorry. :twilightblush:

Thanks, and I apologize for any shards of your soul you may have lost. :twilightsheepish:

Yeah, as the crazy Sander Cohen once said, "My muse is a fickle bitch with a short attention span."

Thanks very much! :pinkiehappy: Kind of surprised it did this well this fast. I mean, I did it in a sudden flurry of inspiration and emotion; not as much planning and effort as my other stories. :rainbowhuh:

Because God hates you and I am his angel of shattered hearts. :pinkiecrazy:

I want to make a WTFIWWY reference, but... don't think anybody here would get it.

No... no, Pikachu, you were supposed to do the zappy thing. :facehoof:

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I felt it was the most impacting way to end it; best punch to the gut. Though when I continue it, the ending will be more definitive.


Fan of the Edgar Allen Poe philsophy of story telling, I take it? :duck: And thanks! You can cash your slivers of broken heart in at the reception desk for a free pony blush! :pinkiehappy:

Once you get to know me as a writer, you'll quickly find out that if there's room for something to be dark, it'll be dark as all hell. Unless I'm intentionally fighting all my instincts as a storyteller. And glad you like the idea! Surprised I haven't seen it before.

Gotta work on not being predictable, then. :raritydespair:

Thank ye; glad you... well, not enjoyed. Liked? Does that word also apply? :applejackconfused:

I plan on continuing this myself somewhere down the line, but if you want to write your own version of what happens next, by all means, go with my blessing! :twilightsmile: Just be sure to credit the original story, though. *nudge nudge*

Those feels man...those feels...:fluttercry:

Alright, after reading that you now have to expand on this story. The people demand it. You can't just give us this and leave. I mean, you could, but you'd have a riot on your hands.

My feels....This is so touching and so good! Bravo!

2877764 You need some better Gifs. the feels have been hit much harder than that.

Just wow. amazing....:fluttercry:

Comment posted by Sketchy Markks deleted Jul 15th, 2013

Oh, wait NVM it is featured.:pinkiehappy: Ehehehehe

Well, that was godlike.


I felt it was the most impacting way to end it; best punch to the gut.

The only punch to the gut was me thinking: what's the point if you're going to set up a good problem only to walk away?
I'm glad to hear you're continuing it. I'll be waiting patiently for the continuation/conclusion.

It's good. But the ending doesn't offer much resolution, not much closure. I think that we don't need a long story, but we want one that at least resolves, to an extent, this dangling plot thread.

Also, I'm a sucker for almost any story that portrays changelings as rational creatures not only with needs, but with wants, and dreams, and aspirations (I wouldn't write them that way, otherwise). We like complex characters, and we want complex changelings.

Complex changelings or GTBO.

Waaait why is it on hiatus after just a couple thousand words. :ajbemused: That's twenty minutes of writing, while eating a baguette.


Please write more! This is a great story, and I especially love the premise! :twilightsmile:

I'm gonna go sit in a corner and cry now.:raritydespair:

While this was rather nice I couldn't help but think of Dear Sister from the description. XD.

please continue this:pinkiesad2:, in the mean time i am going to cry myself to sleep:fluttercry:

Sequel... NAOW!!!!!!

I haven't cried that hard since I read the second volume of affliction of the heart.


I've always wanted to start a riot. :trollestia:

Thank you, thank you. Give the rest of my work a look, people love it for some ungodly reason!

Does the gif above work? :trollestia: Also, glad you thought it was good. :twilightsmile:

You're too kind. :twilightsheepish:

Because sometimes the most effective tool for the job is a lack of closure, the empty feeling of not knowing what happens next in a frankly hopeless situation.

Quite frankly there's no excuse to write any character flatly, changeling or not. You can write any character well if you have a good enough eye.

This actually took most of yesterday afternoon and evening in the middle of a borderline suicidal depressive slump. :trixieshiftleft: Finding the right words for the right emotions is harder than you might think, especially when writing from a dark place.

I'll be taking that baguette, though; good bludgeoning weapon. *yoink*

Glad you like! And I will, after I make a bit more progress on my other projects.

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In all seriousness, cry it out; it's healthy for you. :pinkiesad2:

You're the second person that's said that. Need to look this thing up. :rainbowhuh:


No comment *gets up and walks away from computer silently crying*

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