Challenge Accepted!
Jordan was on his living space, planning out his work for his computer science class. He was doing some final formulas when he heard the electronic beeping, announcing a message over his messenger.
Moving away from his work, he went to check the new message. As he went to open it, he noticed that the return address was blank, which was weird to him as all messages were to hold a name of who sent them. But he shrugged it off thinking it was just some kind of anonymous message.
Clicking on the message, a window opened up showing some minecraft images of some interesting terrains of hills and forests, he could see mobs of new designs resembling horses for the new update that was to come, although they seemed to be have a larger variety of color in their body design, as well as their hair.
After contemplating the artistic design of the new world that was presented in front of him, he turn his view to read the message attached, reading Hello Captain, I got a fun challenge for you, that is if you accept.
The memory then began diffusing, his vision being replaced by blackness as it enveloped him. He felt cold for some reason now, like all the warmth of the room had being sucked out, and replaced by this chill of the underworld.
He started walking, hoping to find someone or something that would help him out of this place. He kept on walking for what felt like hours, the cold chill still on the air as it pass right through his skin to his very soul. Just when he was about to give up, he caught something from the corner of his eye as it somehow shined on the everlasting darkness.
Looking towards it, he came face to face with the amulet of the easter egg, as another six lights floated on top of it like a beacon.
If you want to go back to your world, then you will need to collect all the Element of Harmonies and bring them to me. I will await in Vethea, until then, have fun surviving with one life.
Jordan flinched at the mysterious ethereal voice, but he didn’t have time to respond to it as he suddenly felt himself falling. Fear started to come to him as seconds pass, falling down in the darkness which seemed to have no end.
Looking down, he spotted nothing as he kept falling, until a faint light could be seen, closing every second as it strained his vision. As the light enveloped him, he started to hear voices, disfigured as his senses were starting to come back.
He could feel the soft texture of a mattress under him as his body rested on it, he then started opening his eyes next, closing them quickly when the light stung his unadjusted eyes. Trying again, he managed to see clearly as he saw a wooden oak ceiling, looking to his side he spotted a window that looked out to a small town with a Shakespearian-style architecture. Well fancy that, didn’t think people still made houses like this
Getting up off the bed that he was resting on, he had a better look at his surroundings as he saw that the walls and floors were also made of the same oak wood as the ceiling. Guess people really like old-style households.
He kept on looking around, seeing all the bookshelves as well as the table with scrolls with ink and quills on top. He noticed a small door at one end which he assumed was the way into the room and out.
Deciding that he had enough, he started to get off the bed to walk out. That’s when he noticed his clothes were different from the ones he normally wore, his sneakers were replaced by a set of smooth black and white dress shoes; his jeans were now a pair of black silk trousers which were held by a leather belt of the same colour.
Looking at his upper body, he noticed that he had a tuxedo jackett with his white shirt unbuttoned a bit at the top. Thats when he noticed that his skin had a light tan colour, which confused him as he didn’t remember going to get a suntan, or using tan spray.
He just shook his head, thinking that it was just his mind playing tricks on him. Thats when he noticed a pair of thin shades on an end table, the red frame standing out from the light colour wood.
Wow, they kind of look like something my Minecraft avatar would wear Then he starting remembering how his avatar looked. Black shoes, black pants with a belt and a tuxedo... jacket...
His mind went from amusement to full-on fear as he now was looking for the closest reflective surface that he could find, which was a night-stand with a mirror at the other side of the room. Running towards it he gave a good look at his face, with dark azure eyes looking back.
At this point he had lost any sense of amusement or fun that he normally had, now all he had was disbelief and terror at the impossible transformation that he was now seeing. “What the hell happened to me?!” he said with a little bit of panic on his voice.
Thats when he heard stomps on the wood just outside the door, signaling him of someone coming towards him. With the fear of finding out about him changing form, he could only think of hiding from whoever was coming.
Running towards the bed he had been using he leapt to the other side and tried to squish himself under it, in hopes that they wouldn’t think he had left the room and run off somewhere, if anywhere.
He heard the doorknob click as it was being opened from the other side, the hinds creaking a bit as it slowly swung open. “Ya sure you heard somethin’ sugarcube? Cause Ah didn’t hear anything.” He heard a girl say as multiple steps sounded now inside the room.
“I’m telling you AJ, I heard running coming from here and, hey! Where did he go?” Twilight wondered as she and Applejack entered the room.
“Well he must still be in the room, you did lock the window and the door was locked as well, so don’t worry about it.” Rainbow Dash said as she hovered around the room, looking for the human, as Twilight explained them.
Jordan was now even more scared at the moment, it seemed that he was being held captive, but that didn’t explain how he had been changed. Jordan, you have to calm down, think how do you get out of here. He thought to himself as to how he could get out of this.
“Hi there.”
“Arrrrgh” Jordan screamed at the top of his lungs as a pair of bright blue eyes appeared in front of his face, making him get out of his hiding place (if you could call a bed a hiding place). Now out in the open, he saw his supposed captors, only to feel confused and amused at their appearance.
They seemed to have round heads with pointy ears and large eyes, they had bright colour for fur and their hair all in different styles and colours. He looked at them for a few more seconds before laughing. “Oh God, large colorful cats, what a joke! hahaha.” He said as he held his sides as he laughed at the scene.
“Cats!? Are you blind or something? We are ponies, how can you mix those two up?” the rainbowed maned pegasus said with a ticked-off face at her species resemblance.
Jordan looked at the one that just spoke, now noticing the wings, but ignoring the fact that it could talk, enjoying the situation now. “Oh I’m sorry, but you look so... I don’t know, cute, I guess,” he said as he started to stand up.
Rainbow rolled her eyes at the compliment, not really caring since it came from some other species. “Yeah whatever, just don’t call me a cat again.”
Out of the group Fluttershy was the first to step out of the group, which surprised some of her friends, but didn’t show it.“H-hi, my name is F-Fluttershy, it’s nice to meet you Mister...?” She stopped there, not sure if it would be rude to call it by its species name, since it was sapient.
Jordan looked at the one who had spoke to him, feeling a sense of security and maternal warmth coming off her. He stopped to ponder about her question, not sure if it was safe to tell them his name, since there was still the chance that he was a prisoner, plus he wasn’t sure if he could trust them yet.
Thinking quickly, he came up with the first name that he could remember. “Sparklez, My name is Captain Sparklez.” He responded with a smile on his face, his worries now gone from when he woke up.
In response Fluttershy smiled to him, “It’s so nice to meet you.”
Seeing as her friend had befriended Sparklez, Twilight decided to step-up next. “Hello, Sparklez, my name is..”
“Twilight Sparkle, right?” Jordan finished for her, as he looked at her with a smile.
Twilight was taken aback for a moment, not thinking for him to know her name. “How did you know?”
Sparklez, as he will go by for now, looked at Twilight as he petted Fluttershy. “I kind of remember our first meeting when I heard your name from one of your friends.” he said with a little chuckle in his voice.
“Oh, that was kind of embarrassing I should say.” Twilight said as she rubbed the back of her neck. She then remember the events after that. “Can I ask you something?”
Sparklez looked at her with a friendly smile “Sure go for it“
Her horn started glowing with her magic, and after a few seconds a piece of jewelry came through the door, drawing the attention of Sparklez. “Do you know what this is?” She asked as the jewel floated next to her.
Sparklez looked at it confused for a second, then it hit him. “Hey, that looks like the DisHarmony Stone of the game.!” He said surprise at seeing the amulet be here with him.
“So you know what it is, I told you Twilight, he means trouble, and did you hear how he called it? I don’t trust him.” Rainbow said as she hovered in the air, not doing anything for the moment but ready in case she was needed.
“Wait, a game? Oh, is it like Pin the Tail on the Pony, or maybe a board game, or something new and cool?” Pinkie Pie said as she bounced in front of Sparklez, her face screaming eagerness and joy through a smile that seemed ready to rip her head apart.
“Whoa, whoa, whoa. Now hang on a second there, I don’t want to cause any trouble here. Heck, I don’t even know where I am,” Sparklez said. It didn’t take a genius to tell that some tension was building up.
“Oh ignore Rainbow, darling, she has always been impetuous when it comes to matters like this.” Rarity said as she got a glare from the prismatic mare. “But where are my manners? My name is Rarity, and I have to say, you have quite the taste in fashion. Elegant, yet casual,” the white unicorn said in a high class fashion.
Sparklez looked unsure around this one, she was a bit too, posh? But being the gentleman that he is, he answered her back. “Thank you, and your hair looks well on you.” Just how can she get it to look like that?
Rarity waved at him dismissible, taking the kind compliment. “Why thank you, I take good care of it to make it look this fabulous” Her horn started glowing a cyan colour, as the shades on the end table were surrounded as well and brought towards Sparklez. “I believe these are yours, and I think they will go splendidly with the rest of your clothes.”
“Thanks.” He took hold of the shades and proceeded to put them on, but when he did, his vision was filled with something else. “W-what?” In his field of vision he could now see a faint crosshair and a small row of nine squares underneath his vision and a thin bar on top of it, and next to it a set of blue orbs which rested on the top of his vision.
He removed the glasses quickly and his vision returned to normal.
“Sparklez, are you ok? You seem a bit disturbed.” Twilight asked in concern as she saw his action after putting the glasses on.
“Y-yeah, I’ll be ok. Just a bit surprised that’s all.” He proceeded to put the glasses back on, this time prepared for when the small HUD appeared again. This time he noticed something was in one of the squares, a note of sorts.
Seeing this he wondered how he could get it, as he didn’t know how to get to it. So he did the most common thing, search his pockets. When he reached for his left pocket he noticed that the first square highlighted on his hud .When he reached for the right one, the far square to the right highlighted this time. Well this is mighty interesting.
“Sparklez, what are you doing?” Twilight asked as she saw him searching his pockets.
“I think I have something, but I can’t find it. Just where the hell can it be?” He started reaching to see for any back pockets, when he noticed the squares highlighting from right to left as he moved it back.
He stopped where he could see the note, and to his surprise, he could start feeling like a pouch forming on his belt, opening it he reached inside and felt a piece of paper which somehow stayed intact. Taking it out, he surprised some of the ponies. “What does it say?”
Reading the note, Sparklez said out loud for all the room to hear him. “Dear friends, I think you have already meet Captain Sparklez, and I’m sure you are wondering why he is here. To keep it short, he is the only key for you on getting back your precious Elements.” This drew some gasps from the ponies.
“And they are scattered about within the dimension from where he comes from, so if you want them back, you will have to play for it. And you Sparklez, remember that you need them if you want to get back. Have fun.” Sparklez looked at the ponies, with a confused faced. “Elements amadohicky? What was it talking about?”
“It must be talking about the Elements of Harmony, but what did it mean by other dimensions?” Twilight said as she was trying to decipher the meaning of the message. Looking out the window, she noticed that the sun was quickly setting and the moon of Luna would rise soon. “We can discuss this in the morning, it is getting pretty late.”
Everyone else looked towards the window, seeing the descending sun. “Umm, Twilight. Is it ok if Sparklez stays with me tonight? I mean, if it’s not a problem that is.” She said looking at the human with a shy look.
“Well I don’t have a problem with it, gives me an excuse to see what’s around. I sure do love sightseeing.” Sparklez said as he rubbed the head of Fluttershy, making her smile at being with a new friend.
Twilight wasn’t so sure about it, having a new creature roam around could cause some panic, or some insecurity among the residents. But dismissed the thought when she remember the event with Zecora, making the rest of the town more accepting of new races or species.
“Ok just make sure nothing bad happens you two.” She said with a hint of worry on her voice.
“Don’t worry, what is the worst thing that could happ-”
“DON’T JINX IT!” Interrupted Pinkie as she grabbed Sparklez by the collar. “Don’t say it, please, please don’t!”
Sparklez was taken aback by the sudden change of attitude from Pinkie Pie. “O-kay then, I won’t?” Like if flicking a switched she reverted back to her hyperactive demeanour with a “Okey-Dokey-Lokey.”
“She reminds me of Nick(NFENvids) and Adam(SkyDoesMinecraft), so random, well, not like this.” Sparklez said as he watched Pinkie Pie bounce to the door of the room.
“Who?” Fluttershy asked, having hear him speak to himself.
“Just some guys I know, don’t worry about it. Besides, don’t we need to get going?” He said, as he pointed with a thumb towards the door as he proceeded to walk towards it.
“Oh right, sorry.” She said as she went to catch up with him.
Watching as everyone started to leave, she wondered about the message, it seemed that whoever had written that note knew Sparklez before them, but how was that possible.
“Hey Twilight, why is that human leaving? I thought you were gonna keep an eye on it?” Came a voice from the door, bringing brought Twilight back to reality. There stood a small baby dragon with purple scales and green spines, and a cream-colored belly.
“Oh sorry Spike, I was but I thought that maybe keeping it here wasn’t such a good idea, considering that this is a library and ponies would most likely find him here without a problem.” She said, still a bit distracted at the context of a human being here in Equestria.
“Umm okay then, do you still want me to send a message to the Princess about it?” He asked as he was looking at Twilight’s odd behavior.
“Yes, take a note” She said as Spike brought out a scroll and a quill, “Dear Princess Celestia...”
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I really wish this story had more chapters. You do a really good job with each chapter. (Yes I know there are only two, but they are a good two chapters)
Also, I'm going to assume that they have to find the Elements of Harmony in either Minecraft or a bunch of games from Earth. This is gonna be GOOD!
I'm thinking that they have to go back to Sparklez Divine RPG Minecraft world (or a fresh Divine RPG MC World), and collect the elements from the different dimensions there, and then fight the "Boss" in the "Easter Egg Dimension"
So what did Twilight do with the Disharmony stone?
2909070 She tried to analyse it for any magical traces. We will get into that in more detail later on.
I prefer Jordan looking like his usual self.
2909081 I mean it says she just shows it to him and not like put it anywhere.
I really like this even though I really don't know much about the captain.
You probably should avoid putting meta parentheticals in the dialogue (as I imagine Cap isn't saying both titles of his friends) or even in the story itself, if you can help it. You can simply say in the Author's Notes that Nick and Adam are NFENvids and SkyDoesMinecraft respectively, for anyone who doesn't know.
That aside, Good chapter! The pacing is perhaps a little fast, but honestly it seems well polished for its speed. You do have a good point about it not making sense that <human who has just arrived to Equestira> shouldn't stay in the public library, which most fics seem to not grasp, haha.
I'm certainly looking forward to seeing how this story plays out, it's got me hooked so far.
I like your stories structure thus far. It makes sense, but I do have some issues with it.
When somone speaks, please be sure to designate who it is that spoke it. I was confused at some points trying to figure out who said what. A good way that I remember when finishing a dialogue sentence is to ask who said it.
If it's the same person/pony who spoke last, then you can do "..." she/he said.
Other than that, it's fantastic.
*ding* *thumbs up*
Good interaction chapter, there were a few problems here and there but nothing too drastic. I await more of this story.
Just 2 things I want to say.
1.
I feel saying "have fun with hardcore mode" or something like that would have sounded better. Eh
2. I'm still going to imagine captain as a minecraft avatar. l:<
My god, if this is going the way I think it is...
Then I have one thing to say...
I FUCKING LOVE YOU! No homo
Thought it was going to bad? Nope, this story is great so far, keep up this quality and no doubt you'd be famous soon. Somewhat.
Till the next chapter
~
Mustache out!
How will the inventory and inventorycrafting work? I'm curious. In other news, This is amazing
. Keep up the good work. (Also what about the new Hexxit series, will that be incorporated?
)
I wonder what his eyes look like...
I'm calling it now: Nick and Adam are gonna show up in one of the later chapters. Nick will be doing whatever he does because I have no idea who he is, and Adam will be mining gold while arguing with a squid.
Well, i'l be honest, i havent watched his videos for a while so i dunno
2909371
I second that.
CaptainSparklez ftw.
Ohhh please please please add Jerry, It would be so cool
While I can't provide feedback on his personality, I do know there were a few points where you should've used a question mark instead of a period.
it would be funny if you had him try to narrate everything because of him being so used to making videos.
someone just send the link to his youtube account!!!
To para-quote an insane mini securitron robot.... OH PLEASE PLEASE TELL ME YOU BROUGHT ME SOME MORE CHAPTERS?! I love this fic so far please keep up the good work.
Yeah, I'd like those sunglasses, please. And that inventory system also. That's just awesome.
Moar pls.
This guy should now make an Ace Of Spades Crossover :D
All I could say when I saw this was "... *squee*"
2910238 I believe someone, my good friend All of the Above, has done just that.and contacted him about it on Facebook.
I love this story... whelp, time to read the first 2 chapters over and over unroll the new one comes out!!
2910651 either we wait, or spam his YouTube account, both work
I just noticed that if Sky came through, he would probably never leave, cos his avatar is aweshum!
2909097 Ah that, the princesses and Discord will have a look into it. but that is for another chapter.
2910789 OMG today, CaptainSparklez does his vlog
he might know of it!!
Wow, I'm definitely reading this... Although at the initial thought I facehoofed, I'm still going to read it...only because I watch captain sparkles (Jordan as I prefer to call him anyway).
Your description was the other thing that caught my eye.
I shall start reading now, in the meantime, have some moustaches
HURRY UP WITH THE CHAPTERS! I must read more!
Fix the grammar. Then maybe I'd be a bit more interested.
Is it just me who is having a hard time imagining Captainsparklez in a non-blocky way? Just me? Ok...
2909716 My bad, Ray had called it a "set".
My vote for one of the three to join him.
Can only imagine his reaction should he get pulled into this 
Syndicate
Because.............
Why the hell not? Syndicate is pretty random
Also great story so far, cant wait for more.
My mind is just flip-flopping between his Minecraft blocky appearance and his real-life self, just wearing his avatar's clothes. I suppose if there's no difference that being the blocky version would make, I can just safely think of either, so I will.
And for me, it's oddly easy to picture him speaking as he does. I just think of a calm, laid-back tone, able to take in most anything around him without flipping out, other than the bit of shock when he first woke up (which was justified because Pinkie
). And considering the HUD in his shades, it might make adapting to his environment easier with that familiar element. ...Heh, element.
Oh, and I did notice that when Fluttershy had spoken up to suggest staying over at her place, you only used "she" a couple times without referring to who it was. Thankfully, this being the Mane 6, it's easy to tell just by dialogue alone, so it wasn't really a problem. Just be careful about changing characters like that again.
Maybe for the three to follow him Nick, Skydoesminecraft, and Antvenom? I dunno who to join him!
2911484 or maybe, have the three that come through turn into ponies!!!
you should add sea nanners into this
2911502 Ok, now I'm just picturing Sky coming through as a grey pony a gold (or butter) crown and the amulet he wears on his minecraft skin.
Good work, definitely favorite-worthy... But I'd recommend you get a proofreader. The grammar's not that great, and you tend to phrase things in a manner that makes the characters seem somewhat OOC. Still, favorite and thumbed.
Hmmm, I find this mighty interesting please continue...
2911591 Don't forget that his cutie mark would be a butter pick axe.
2912029 either that or a butter ingot
write MOAR this is the best :)
I enjoy this, can't wait for more.
2912066 ok, RayBony, plz can you turn the three people who enter through into equestria into ponies! pretty please!
pwetty pwease?