superpony natural

Sam, Dean, and Castiel were attacked by angels and went through a tunnel to escape. But once they find out they've become ponies... Things get a bit interesting during their stay. Castiel's a pegasus, Dean and Sam are earth ponies. But once they discover their unlucky arrival turns out to be a job, they're the ones Celestia really counts on this time.(Fail Summary is a fail) but yer enjoy

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Normal

Normal #1 · Jul 12th, 2013 · · ·

What you need here is an editor. Your story does fall a little flat for some reason but the spelling errors and the like took me away from even that. For some examples I remember off the top of my head
Their= They're
Meddow=Meadow
Crepping= Chriping
You're = your
And also you should stop using ~ so much. I especially can't see Applejack needing to use it

thepinkparty

thepinkparty #2 · Jul 12th, 2013 · · ·

2865049 wana help?

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Normal #3 · Jul 12th, 2013 · · ·

2865061
I can help a little, but not much. I've been busy with my own stuff of late. But I'll help correct some basic stuff

Swirls

Swirls #4 · Jul 12th, 2013 · · ·

I reccommend you Use Capitalization Like This on the chapters and story names in the future. And make the short description better.

Theater Critic

Theater Critic #5 · Jul 12th, 2013 · · 2 ·

You need a proofreader. I offer my services to you.

rosebug

rosebug #6 · Jul 12th, 2013 · · ·

I love Supernatural, so seeing a crossover with it got me really excited.
As for the writing, it isnt bad. As mentioned before parts of it felt a bit flat and some parts of the story, such as meeting the mane 6, felt a bit rushed and could have been slowed down with a bit more detail.
I liked Castiel's comment to Rarity about her ability to make suits, it was something I could imagine him saying.

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