After a dispute between Twilight and Rainbow about the latest Daring Do novel, Rainbow struggles to make Twilight see things her way. Yet, no matter what she tries, Twilight is adamant that what Rainbow believes is unrealistic and could never happen. However, a day of baking shenanigans and a night at Twilight's soon makes Rainbow question how she feels towards her friend. Could there be something more than just friendship between the two?
Written for the Second TwiDash "Abandoned Fic" Contest. The rules of engagement can be found here.
Edited by The Abyss and DarqFox.
Cover art used with permission from Choedan-Kal
Chapters (6)
Boop
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Seriously, there's a lot of booping. Not saying that's a bad thing, in fact, it might even be a plus. Lookin' real good so far, can't wait to see more!
This is a good read, very fluffy.
Totally wanna see the Daring Do conversation brought back up by Rainbow after Twi and Dash get together. She can claim their own relationship as to why Daring should be with Rosetta.
WOOT! Another one to read and devour!
~Skeeter The Lurker
I can see Manehatten Silver getting killed in the next book and Daring being comforted by Rosetta Stone.
TwiDash snuggles. I like where this is going. Looking forward to more.
Annnnnnd once you throw the CMC into anything...
BOOM. End of story. Begin the rebuild of whatever place they were at and start over again.
Loving it so far!
~Skeeter The Lurker
I'm loving Dash's single minded insistance on the Daring Do thing. It's almost like she want it to be real, even if she not yet aware of why.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Not a fan of TwiDash at all, but this was well written and made up, have a like.
I have no idea of how many times ive seen that beginning now...
Am i missing something?
And also...
MY BELLY HUU-HU-HUUUUUURTS!!!!!!
For this chapeter you get 10/10 Photo Finish's!
Great chapeter! Everything was well written except the discussion with Daring Do again. It might be a big deal later in the story but... nvm... 9/10 Photo Finish's for this chapeter
2861212 Part of the rules for the contest this is entered in is to use the opening prompt provided, so all of the entries more-or-less use the same start. Everything after that is up to the writer. And yes, the Daring Do discussion-thing is pretty central to the story, so it'll rear it's head again (spoilers, shouldn't have told ya that).
I'm glad everyone here seems to be enjoying it!
Hello, Comettail from the A for effort group. I am here to review your story if you don't mind. It has passed our charts and is now in its designated folder.
Notes: You start off the story strong, you give the reader the main idea around this plot by giving us a taste at a Daring Do book. Then when Rainbow Dash reads when they kiss you give good character to her. You make it seem like she thinks it horrible when Twilight thinks it is good. The characterization between these to were very well done. You gave Rainbow Dash a trademark saying, you even did Twilight really good. Telling Rainbow various reasons on why they are not meant and so. When they go to the Cake's home you give us a vivid idea of what it looks like. Crazy and chaotic. When they clean it up Rainbow Dash and Twilight give thoughts about each other and have a really awkward conversation that Twilight went slightly OCC there, not much though. They go home and you paced it decently. They go to bed.
Grammar 9 Though reading through it 3 times I only found one or two mistakes. Pretty impressive. You seem to have a decent knowledge on grammar and only slight hiccups from more then two quotation marks.
Got to love those.
Spelling 10 Didn't find any spelling errors in this fic at all. It proves you have a good editor, or you edited yourself.
Originality 9 A TwiDash fic can be found anywhere. The originality counts most. You gave a interesting romacne story based on a simple debate among the two of them, and awkward conversations.
Characters 10 You each gave Twilight and Rainbow Dash a single topic which can turn out to be a big debate, who should fall for who. Twilight was well written being the reasonable one out of them both. She gave logical facts on why they can't be together. Rainbow Dash was also written fair because of her strong opinions on Daring Do. Even when she loves Twilight, you made her think like Rainbow Dash, saying reasonable words like cool, sweet, etc.
-Comettail out
Huh. Is this really a contest to bring dead fics back? I know I read this before. Still enjoyable though, hope it gets finished now.
2861752 It's actually a contest where the prompt is the first 1500 words or so. It's called Abandoned Fic contest as a joke, because the person who wrote the prompt doesn't often finish stories. So by continuing on from the prompt, the author completes the "abandoned" story. If you've read this before, it was probably in other contest entries.
update soon.seriously update soon
Wow, this story is awesome!
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Dash's reaction to the relationship between Daring and Silver is almost parallel to the one I had with the relationship presented in Equestria Girls, and the one I'd probably have if SoarinDash was ever made canon.
I really like the story so far, and I hope you're able to finish it-I'll support you 120%!
2864112 He already has the next two chapters done XP He's just waiting for the other editor to look at them
Hi! im new and I really liked this story and I want to follow the publisher but idk who it is
plz reply if u r the publisher
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The person responsible for the first 1,600 words or so is The_Incredible_Blunderbolt, and I wrote the rest. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far!
Dont we all love the moment when you are reading an fic, and it updates the moment you are reading the end of the last chapter?
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Never had that happen to me, but agreed.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I have to say, I quite enjoyed seeing Rainbow dream and place herself as Daring.
I've always been one to think that she's got a helluva imagination, myself.
~Skeeter The Lurker
2866588 That dream was easily my favourite bit to write. Glad you liked it.
I kinda hope that that date is awesome. I truly do.
~Skeeter The Lurker
No shit...
This chapeter where VERY GOOD. I cant point out any errors! The plot is solid and everything starts to make sence!
10/10 Photo Finish's for this chapeter
Wooooooo updates!
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I'd damn well hope not! I'm the editor for this story. I pride myself on perfection.
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Grammar. Where are these 'errors' of which you speak? As editor, I bid you tell me. I pride myself on perfection, but if you challenge me, then I must prove you wrong! Where are they, friend?
<3 DarqFox
To be honest I was geting a little tierd of this particular prompt shoing up every were but this is a good one I realy injoy it can't wait to see how it ends
Yes, Rainbow, it took you a week to figure your feelings out, so let's give Twilight one day... what's the worst that could happen?
And look at that! I started reading the fic, finished chapter one, switched to chapter two, and suddenly the chapter selection is twice that long!
Yay!
2866844 Well, we all know that Rainbow moves fast. One day? Plenty of time from her view
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Oh, I know! This will only end well!
Keep up the good work!
What is this? Another update?
Wut?
This chapeter was [youtube=http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=YKUOB8MN4Kc]
You get.... 10.00001/10 Photo finish's
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I do believe her colon would be a slightly higher decimal than that... It's funny because anatomy and double meanings.
2866452 you guys are great!
Gosh...what a great story,i wonder what will happen next (just Saying) .anyway great job!
Awwwww.
More more !
Stupid sexy Flanders. :)
As the official Editor Ferret, I guarantee this story 100% Ferret approved. <3
If you think other wise, point out the errors, and I'll have them fixed faster than you can say 'Yay.'
<3 DarqFox
Editor Ferret
Leave it to Twilight to over think, well, EVERYTHING.
And leave it to Spike to knock some sense into her.
I think you might have done that a bit fast, but otherwise, it's good.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Nice ending. All I've gotta say to that.
Best of luck in the contest!
~Skeeter The Lurker
Too bad this was so short.
I liked it, well I pretty much any ship with Twilight in it.
Awesome story
but....... why Terry?
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That would be a reference to this.
2870937 love it
Great job, Tim! This was a fun, light and fluffy read and I enjoyed it immensely. However, may I ask if you've recently read Twilight's list? You may wish to compare the dialogue in chapter 2 from there to the fifth chapter here; I don't know if you did that on purpose or not, but it stood out to me.
See you in the chat!