A "pony" sends letters to his parents about his life in Equestria. Follow his narrations in the letters he sends to his parents. And remember, not all stories have happy endings.
note: just something I put together really quickly.
A "pony" sends letters to his parents about his life in Equestria. Follow his narrations in the letters he sends to his parents. And remember, not all stories have happy endings.
note: just something I put together really quickly.
Alrighty, the grammar nazi has arrived
*I can see Canterlot up in the mountains...
You just forgot she
*isn't
*filly, But, there
*breaks
*isn't, disease
*passed
*my
wasn't I good enough? sounds better
*As for why his parents never wrote back/replied (they are synonyms, ditch one of them) to any of his letters, they were killed in a car crash just hours after he entered the portal to equestria
Now, the style in which you're writing is simple, it's great, but you could go more in depth when it comes to feelings. It would be great if we really see him pouring out his heart into these letters, and shouldn't he become even a little bit angry with his parents? Just a small letter written in caps-lock would do just fine but in the next letter he would apologize and so on...
BUT, this is not a bad story. I did enjoy reading it and the plainness of the letters allowed me to imagine all the possible feelings he must feel, although he might not want to put these into print.
Just try to put yourself more into his shoes and get the feels across
I hope I didn't upset you, I didn't mean to be harsh (if I was)
Take a cookie as my condolences
3587359
Well, I consider the general lack of grammar to be understandable. (these are letters after all)
And take into consideration that I haphazardly threw this together without consideration for a lot of that stuff. (these are letters after all)
And you didn't hurt my feeling in anyway. I'm just glad you took the time.
Also, I accept the cookie.
3587384 Great chocolate of vanilla?
3587387
Vanilla!!!
3587439 here ya go *dumps a wagon-full of vanilla cookies on you*
Enjoy