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CobaltDrake


"Sometimes the world doesn't need another hero... Sometimes what it needs is a monster." - Count Dracula

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oh buck yes! A new story!

Both Human and Anthro tags?

I am intrigued.:moustache:

Oh noes, my only weakness, anthro... I guess I have to read this then, oh no, I'm so helpless.
Brain: "Admit it dude, you're obsessed with anthro."
...
yes

HE'S BACK! And what a way to herald your return dude!

~Skeeter The Lurker

And Andrew strike again, I wonder what Rarity would said if AJ and Dash invite her to join them into their herd

So it is a continuation of that story, I wasn't sure at first but when I saw his name and the mentioning of the other two relationships, I understand it's a sequel to the other two stories. I should've looked at the story list first if I was unsure.

I-I don't know if I deserve the right to be called an "editor", I mean I just made some notable suggestions and proofread it a little... :fluttershyouch: (A-Also, m-my n-name was spelled wrong in the proofreader's section, since it's one word and... n-never mind. *whimpers*

B-But if you want to, tha-that's fine. :fluttershbad: As for the story itself, well, I'd already proofread it and made corrections, but as for the plot... erm, st-story... :twilightblush:

I loved the use of Rarity being so understandably nervous, yet also attempting to assert herself at various points of the story. It felt a bit more like a Fluttershy trait at times, truth be told, but having her be a bit forward was the key to really seperating their personalities, and I think it could've been implimented a little bit more, here.

I would've liked if the "feeling of the rain" on their bodies was brought up more often during the act itself: Especially since it would provide such a clear contrast to how hot she'd feel on the inside, with the cold of the sky's water trickling on her body.

Do they take away from the story? No. Not at all.

I'm more a fan of sensual romance than "sensual lust", but they hold onto their character traits well, and the story being immersive? Doesn't even need mentioning. Paying so much attention to the environmental traits really defined this story, and I'm proud to've been able to proofread it, if for little else than to simply read it and immerse myself in it.

Aside from a bit of PERSONAL DISLIKE from the ending (Which I won't spoil), the story itself? Wonderful, and I'm delighted to be given the chance to read more from you in the future. Well Done. :rainbowdetermined2:

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I follow you around~~~ :coolphoto: *caught*

Don't worry I will further read and criticize ya Story, but had fu*king much to do lately ^^"
Sooooo.... time to read ^^

2839145 Well this IS proofread by me, s-somewhat, kinda, m-maybe... I-I mean, if Cobalt says it was. :fluttershyouch:

... I always feel so meek when it comes to being a proofreader, editor, writer... human being... :applejackconfused:

But enjoy the story! It's certainly worthy of attention. :raritywink: H-His, I mean, n-not... n-not mine... *whimpers* :fluttershbad:

So critique~~~
^^

It is really sad that you haven't take advantage over the plot device 'Rain on there skins' you could easily get en entire paragraph out of it ^^"
But hell there is nothing ShimmeringStallion didn't said already ^^ *caught*

ow and :rainbowwild::pinkiehappy::raritywink:

2839292 Stop catching me! I'm not a Pokemon!

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*pours out a bucked of honey over you*
Tis tis tis. Dear... And now...
*licks with his demonic two foot long tongue over his own freaking head...*
Let see if you are tasty like I believe you are... at least your writing shows talent,... an indicator for GooD TaisTszZzz~~~

*caught*... anyhoofs... good work of cause... ^^ RYL : Read Ya Later ^^

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Orly? *is to lazy to find a pigeon pic for Lolz...*

2839318 MY WRITING DOES NOT SHOW TA-Oh wait, you were talking about Cobalt.

Okay, then I completely agree. :twilightsmile:

hell of a way to comeback:pinkiehappy:

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This needs to happen.

You *clap* are *clap* a magnificent *clap* writer! :ajsmug:

you should expand this universe not just oneshots all the time

Can hardly wait for the next one! :pinkiehappy:

Best story ever by far!:yay:

ive read all these storieswiht ander and the mane six andwondering why havent u made this a story yet ,comrade? also love this one almost as much as the RD one:rainbowwild:

Who's next? Fluttershy? Please be Fluttershy.

It was good, but... The part where she rubs herself and asks him if he likes what he sees... Lol. I hate it when girls do that. I know it's supposed to be sexy and all, but it always just makes me feel awkward. :pinkiecrazy:

Oh no... The curse is upon me once again...

Anyone else feel like there's a greater story behind the scenes?

2976590 .... really :facehoof: dude it makes u feel awkward dude i find that sexual line HOT AS ANTHRO CHRYSALIS AND ANTHRO NIGHTMARE MOON FUCKING A MALE HUMAN!?! :rainbowwild: :rainbowwild: :rainbowwild: :rainbowwild: :rainbowwild: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :yay: :yay: :yay: :yay: :raritywink: :raritywink: :raritywink: :raritywink: :heart: :heart:

2910697 :twilightoops: wait there's a RD ONE!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! *shakes him very hard* SHOW ME IT!! :flutterrage: :flutterrage: :flutterrage: :flutterrage: I GOTTA SEE IT :flutterrage: ... maybe tomorrow it's raining and windy where i live :facehoof: ........ will that means i get mmmmmoooorreee fresh air! and a nice cold room >:D

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Is that a good thing or a bad thing, I'm slightly confused at your reaction? :applejackunsure:

3250126yea just check his story box bro its awesome and spoiler alert. He forgot to turn he swag off *wink wink nudge nudge*

I just got done reading a couple of your stories, and I must say, you've got some quality work here, keep it up and have a :moustache:

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I like your name, and thanks man!

Good work. All you need to do now is work on your punctuation and spelling.

So thats Rainbow, Applejack and Rarity that Andrew has slept with now. Do you plan to have Andrew *cough* "get to know" the rest of the Mane six?

Sure is fun to comment on old stories like this.

Like shouting into an empty cavern.

Well anyway, good job, author.

Very nice addition to the series. I was kinda hoping Rarity would join the group/herd. Thanks for creating and sharing.

Who's the artist of the cover work?

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