Ever since Discord promised to be a good guy he has become very bored. The once mighty embodiment of chaos is now reduced to a trickster who plays simple yet reality altering pranks, To put it simply he is bored out of his skull.
After a visit to Fluttershy, he decides to try to help her to be less afraid of everything.
What started as a small joke ends up in catastrophe, in his sleep he accidentally cast a curse upon Fluttershy.
So now whenever she get scared she shrinks in size.
Hopefully Discord will be able to cure her before she becomes so tiny that she no longer exists in the same universe as him. But fate has other plans. And Fluttershy is not the only one shrinking.
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Hilarious so far. Good job.
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I'm down, buuuut you do need to edit this some. Get a proofer and an editor sir, they will be able to quickly point out the few new writer mistakes you've made!
You're overall structure is nice, and Discord is funny though, so it didn't suffer from anything much for me.
You need a proof reader and editor. This story is good, but is covered in mistakes. Example;
- Fluttershy smiled as she saw who it was. “Hi Discord it’s good seeing you again but, maybe next time you could send me a note or something before you arrive. If I knew you were coming I would have bought more snacks.” She embraced him and nuzzled his neck. -
It should say this;
Fluttershy smiled as she saw who it was, "Hi Discord! it's good seeing you again, but maybe... next time you could send me a note or something before you arrive? If I had known that you were coming, I would have bought more snacks!" She embraced him and nuzzled his neck.
Better!
Good luck! (Maybe it'll get featured!)
Cute!
2874763 Thanks for the input.
I'm currently my own editor and proofreader.
I looked over the things you pointed out and I agree with them all except for this part.
If I had known that you were coming, I would have bought more snacks! (Why do you feel that it need a exclamation point instead of a regular dot?)
Thanks for all the nice comments. :D
Makes my day.
Hahaha! I loved the last word of this chapter... Butthole... HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
Tiny red dragon, eh? Did I just catch a reference?
I like this, but you need a proofreader or editor to fix the few grammar errors in the piece.
The story is looking pretty good, and i can't wait to read more though!
2875567 I got no clue.
I simple made him turn into a dragon since Fluttershy is afraid of them.
2875760 If I knew how to get one, I would.
2876063 Oh, I thought you made a Mulan reference.
Discord's personality is not overplayed but spot on. I'm not sure how you can overplay the personality of chaos, though. This story is excellent in my opinion. Hopefully, someone can step up to help proofread and edit. There are groups you can petition for editor help.
Swedish, huh? Interesting.
2874803 I don't know, to be honest. It just seems like she's talking like an emotionless robot, and it would liven things up if she changed her pitch and enthusiasm.
You don't have to if you don't want to, it's just what I prefer.
2876068 I could be of some help in that respect. I could edit and proof read as long as you let me. Just so you know, Discord's personality is not only spot on it's perfect, here are some examples: "Discord plugged his ears with his fingers, he then materialised a slingshot out of nowhere and fired a glowing marble at the eagle, thus turning the eagle into a flying whoopie cushion with eyes.", " “I could do that, but you know, I'm the living embodiment of chaos not even I know when or where I’m going to appear.” ", and lastly "Discord raised his paw and snapped his fingers together, in a bright white light Celestia’s room had transformed into a giant nursery, complete with a crib,a yellow pacifier and a big fluffy plush of himself. Celestia was still sleeping like nothing had happened, she did however hug the plushie as she tried to get more comfortable."
This last one in particular had me rolling for a good five minutes.
2893643 Thanks for the lovely comment, it really made my day.
2896047 Thanks. :D
2895832 I am so glad to hear that.
2910680 Sorry, all those questions will be answered later in the story.
The death threats........ I dunno, it just fits.
Shouldn't she have shrunk when she had gotten scared
Man, Discord is out of control!
That was a good chapter. But I agree with sugarush13, shouldn't the Kraken scare cause Fluttershy to shrink? 
Or is there a delayed effect?
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All will be explained in the next chapter. So hang it there :D
2954969 Hang in there, all questions and more will be answered in future chapters. :D
Cute!
2958000 I'll try to keep the cute coming.
I don't know if you noticed, but Asabrasa and I have done a little editing to the first chapter. I hope you like what we did.
2969728 Awesome editor right here.
2974452 Thanks. I do what I can.
Ah, just like Robin Hood.
Instead of 'man' maybe something like mare, steed, or mustang (pony appropriate)? The Grayscale bit was interesting and kingsnakes really are known to eat other snakes. Oh, and Discord is still spot on in this chapter which is just splendid
. Can't wait to see what happens.
2982339 Well Discord is kinda like a multi-layered pancake, so he is unaware that he is mixing up words from different planes of existence.
Simple because he is chaos and chaos follow no rules.
2983978 Hmm, you're right! Never thought about it that way; the embodiment of chaos doesn't have to follow the conventional rules in a pony plane of existence.
Snake riiiiidin'
I love it!
Love Fluttercord
Love this chapter
And sorry for my bad English X3!!!
2990215 Thanks for the nice comment.
2988927 Grayscale will still be a minor Character, but he will still play an important role in the story.
Discord pulled down the sun, thus making it dawn once again and therefore time passed quickly, so the day wouldn't have to get longer than usual.
The entity rocking Luna is SPOILERS.
I don't want to spoil the story in the comments, to such an extent.
I think this is my favorite chapter so far. I especially love how much Grayscale/Whitescale cares for Fluttershy.
And that fourth-wall-breaking scene was hilarious!
3007861 This chapter was a little dark I must admit.
But it's all for good fun. Some serious stuff is about to go down.
Sooooooooooooo*HISSSS* wwwhenn is the *hisss* next chapter.
3035658 I don't know. I'm working on it, I hate to set deadlines, because I always fail to meet them.
Should've been, 'Be a mare!"
3062391 Well Discord is kinda like a multi-layered pancake, so he is unaware that he is mixing up words from different planes of existence.
Simple because he is chaos and chaos follow no rules.
Well damn. Discord is out of it and we need him to help Flutters. Also that dream, I'm almost positive I know what's happening in it, but I have no idea how it could escalate to that.
3332650 Interesting. Send me a private message and tell me what is going to happens then :P
Pretty good!
3374831 The next chapter will hopefully not take as long as the last one. I suffered a bit of depression as I was working on it, but now I feel fine. So hopefully I'll get it out sooner than later.