A young boy was soon to be killed by his parents who accidentally gave birth to him.They were supposedly about to correct their mistake by killing him.
Rushed Story progression: Check Character interaction happening for the sake of happening, rather than making sense for the story: Check Random popular/attractive character falling in love with the main character despite no reason for her to do so being shown: Check Random magic powers and instantly knowing how to access them at least somewhat: Check 7th Element of harmony: Check Deus Ex Machina's up the wazoo: Check Main character acting heroic even though it doesn't make sense for him to: Check Tragic Backstory for Main Character: Check Main character overcoming his fears out of nowhere: Check "You can't beat me, I have friends!": Check
All you need is for him to be turned into a Black and Red Alicorn, and be crowned a prince of Equestria: and you will have completed every single cliche self-insert fanfic trope there is. If that wasn't on purpose, it's actually kind of impressive how you managed to make it THAT generic...
nope
2873640 Nope as in you didn't like this chapter or nope as in you didn't like the whole story?
Have to stop reading. This has hit the point thatI no longer enjoy the story
Rushed Story progression: Check
Character interaction happening for the sake of happening, rather than making sense for the story: Check
Random popular/attractive character falling in love with the main character despite no reason for her to do so being shown: Check
Random magic powers and instantly knowing how to access them at least somewhat: Check
7th Element of harmony: Check
Deus Ex Machina's up the wazoo: Check
Main character acting heroic even though it doesn't make sense for him to: Check
Tragic Backstory for Main Character: Check
Main character overcoming his fears out of nowhere: Check
"You can't beat me, I have friends!": Check
All you need is for him to be turned into a Black and Red Alicorn, and be crowned a prince of Equestria: and you will have completed every single cliche self-insert fanfic trope there is. If that wasn't on purpose, it's actually kind of impressive how you managed to make it THAT generic...
So yeah, I'm out.
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