It's Party Time!
It was the day of the party for the residential librarian. The pony for whom it was for was currently off searching for all the local flora and fauna as per requested by Princess Celestia.
Twilight would have asked for help from Fluttershy but felt that as it was an assignment she should do it on her own, though with the usual help from Spike, who was taking notes for the unicorn.
Since the lavender unicorn was out in the fields to study, she didn't see the library being readied for the party that night.
Applejack took care of the extra food stuff needed for the night. Rarity, Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash helped to get the decorations up while Pinkie Pie took care of everything else and still found time to help her friends with their tasks.
It had all the usual party things; games, music, balloons, streamers and a giant banner proclaiming 'Happy Birthday Twilight!'. The whole color scheme was of Twilight's coloring, light purple, dark purple with pink every so often as a highlight.
Even though Pinkie Pie loved all the parties she throws, there was just something special about being surrounded by her crush's colors. She was very tempted to sit in the middle of the floor and lose herself to the colors, but she knew she had a party to pull off first before she could lose herself in the moment.
The Princess had thought ahead and as part of her instructions to her faithful student there was a set time when she was supposed to return to the library.
“I wonder why the Princess wanted me to go back at 7pm sharp? That's an unusual request...” Twilight looked to her assistant who walked next to her as they headed home.
The young dragon merely shrugged trying to keep a neutral expression on his face. He didn't want to ruin the surprise and opted to remain silent instead.
The lavender mare shrugged as well and opened the front door with her magic. As the two stepped inside, Twilight tried to turn on the lights to no avail and just as she was about to get worried about it the lights came on (seemingly by themselves) and her five friends shouted 'Surprise!' from where they had circled around her in the dark.
Twilight jumped a foot into the air with a slight arch to her form at the sudden appearance of her close friends and as she sat down patting her chest to slow her heart rate, took a look around the room. As she took in the scene before her, she couldn't help but smile at the well hidden surprise. Her thoughts turned to the lessened amount of work for the past week and her 'instructions' for the day, suspecting a certain sun princess's hoof in maintaining the secret. She laughed as she pulled her friends into a hug.
“My gosh you guys, this is great! Thank you! It was a complete surprise. And you got the Princess in on it too didn't you?” She pulled back enough to look at her friends as Rarity levitated a pink cone party hat onto the lavender mare's head.
“We're pleased you like it darling. Though Pinkie Pie set up most of this.”
“Yeah, Pinks even sent a letter to the Princess to make sure you wouldn't be too busy this week.” The pink mare was glad her coat color mostly hid her blushes as she scraped a hoof along the floor.
“Aww, it was nothing. I just wanted this party to be just right. Oh and while the Princess couldn't make it, she sends her regards! Oh and she has a gift for you that is now in the great big pile waiting for you to eat cake and cupcakes and have fun first!” Just as the party mare finished, Spike gave a little burp that presented a scroll from the Princess, stating much the same thing.
After Twilight gave the scroll a quick read she shook her head in amazement at how Pinkie can predict pretty much anything. As Twilight hugged the pink mare in thanks no one thought twice about the unicorn's blush, putting it down to having a surprise party for the first time, though it really was from the lengths that the pink mare was willing to go for her.
“Come on, we don't want the candles to melt into the cake, cause then it would be a candle cake and those are harder to eat and that and wouldn't be as fun!” Twilight laughed as Pinkie towed her to the cake in the shape of a the book Elements of Harmony, a Reference Guide, which was sitting on the table in the middle of the library.
The lavender mare took a moment to observe the great amount of detail that went into the cake. She had feeling that it was a certain pink baker that made such a good replica, as she noticed how the candles helped outline the unicorn on front. She could feel the hyper mare beside her bounce in place in excitement as her other friends made a circle around the cake facing the birthday pony.
Twilight thought for a moment before closing her eyes and blowing out the candles. All her friends gave a cheer (Fluttershy was even faintly heard) as Twilight opened her eyes once more.
“Did ya make a wish Sugarcube?” Twilight gave a small smile and blush as she nodded.
“Awesome! What was it? Come on, you gotta tell us!” RD hovered in excitement, wondering what the studious pony could possibly want.
“Ah ah ah.” Pinkie waved her hoof back and forth at each word.
“You can't tell others your wish, 'cause then it wouldn't come true! Then what would the point of making it be?” The pink mare nodded sagely as the cyan peagasus dropped back onto the ground with a dejected 'awww'. Twilight's smile became sheepish as she rubbed a hoof along the back of her head, glad for the excuse to not say what she wished for in front of everyone.
After everyone had some cake, they made Twilight open her gifts next. Rainbow Dash got Twilight the latest Daring Do figurine (from Daring Do and the Empire of the Crystal Skull), Fluttershy got Twilight a book on the local fauna and flora (Twilight sensed Princess Celestia knew about this gift and that Twilight wouldn't have had the time to conduct a proper research in the span of a day and that she could use the book to help finish her report), Rarity gave her a light blue raincoat that went along with Applejack's gift of rain-boots (which were a darker blue), Spike got Twilight a globe of the world and Pinkie Pie gave her a book on cooking ('Cooking from the Ground Up, Starting with the Basics').
After more words of appreciation were given, the seven friends partied long into the night. While Pinkie Pie did make sure everyone had fun, she made extra sure the pony of her heart wanted for nothing. While most did not take note of this behavior, a certain romance minded pony saw the extra attention the lavender mare got from the pink one and Twilight's response to it (which came as blushes and slight fluttering). Rarity went in search of the only other pony who would see it for what it was and not cause a big scene about it.
“My dear, do you see how Pinkie Pie is just fawning over Twilight?” Green eyes looked up from the second helping of apple cupcakes to the two ponies in question, whereas Pinkie was offering more cupcakes to Twilight who turned them down only to have her personal space invaded as Pinkie Pie checked her forehead with a hoof to see if she was feeling ok.
“I dunno Rare. Seems like the same ol' Pinkie Pie tah me.” The two friends watched as Twilight tried to insist that she was fine when Pinkie pulled out a small triangle hammer (neither one wanted to think from where) and held it out toward the lavender unicorn who frantically pushed it away while putting a hoof to the pink earth pony's chest as a means of both reassuring and keeping her at a distance.
As the two spectators watched, it seemed as though Pinkie Pie's face became a shade darker at the touch and she slowly lowered the hammer while nodding. They both watched as Twilight changed the subject to the nearby games and laughed as Pinkie Pie pulled out three sets of chess boards and placed them together (to the confusion of the two watching). As the two friends played three layered chess, the two watchers turned to each other.
“Alright, so maybe it's a little odd. But it is Pinkie Pie. And remember, not even two months ago Twilight freaked out when the Princess came tah visit and Fluttershy tried to help Filamina get better. They both can be odd when the mood takes them.” Applejack said with a shrug.
“Oh shush. You have no sense of romance.” Rarity said with a flip of her mane.
“Tha' might be. The farm keeps a pony busy. But Ah also don't go seeing romance when it could just be two best friends havin' a bit o' fun together.” Rarity hmphed and turned to go sit with the more understanding Fluttershy who was playing a round of battle clouds with Rainbow Dash as Applejack just chuckled to herself at the fashionista's antics.
Twilight, on the other hoof, was both intrigued and enjoyed the extra attention. While she liked how Pinkie made sure she didn't need anything, she also knew that this was going overboard just a little, even for the hyperactive mare.
With Pinkie being so close by, Twilight didn't feel like having as much cupcakes, which Pinkie Pie somehow took to mean that the lavender unicorn was sick. Luckily after that misunderstanding, she was willing to play some games instead. Inside though was a grand debate of epic proportions for the lavender unicorn.
(Don't take it the wrong way. You know how she gets when it comes to parties. She's just making sure the mare of honor is having a great time.... But she's never gone THIS far for them. I mean, really?
Assuming that I was sick because I'm not eating as many cupcakes, surely that's taking it a bit far. Well, you never know for sure, being sick would mean that you can't have fun and are most likely unhappy, so she could just be making sure everyone is happy...
But she's hanging on my every word!But she does that for everyone on their birthday...
But to this extent?) The internal debate continued throughout the party, unbeknown to everyone else.
Also unknown to everyone else was how the pink mare's thoughts were going a hundred miles a minute as well.
(ooohhh, does she need any punch? No, no punch. Oh, how about a message? No message? But she looks tense! Was that a moment of confusion mixed with hope mixed with anxiety? What would make her make that kind of face? GASP! Was it something I said? What DID I say? Now I can't remember, maybe because I'm talking really really quickly? Nah, it must be something else. Oooo.... Oh I know!)
The two friends had finished their chess game and were just chatting when Pinkie jumped up and began to bring lots of extra things to the unicorn, in an attempt to make sure the lavender pony was happy.
She brought cupcakes (“No Pinkie, I'm not hungry.”), punch (“Did you have to bring the whole bowl?”), pillows (“I'm not tired yet.”), blankets (“... I'm not cold either...”), a couple of books (“I appreciate the thought, but I don't really feel like reading.”), the music player (“I could hear it just fine from where it was...”), along with various games and do-dads.
By this point all other conversation and activity dropped off as the others watched the scene before them, while trying to decide if they should be concerned or laugh at the pink mare's antics.
“Piiiinkiiieee.” Twilight whined from the bottom of the pile as everyone gave in and just laughed while Pinkie brought her head closer and fluttered her eyelashes at the lavender mare.
“Yes, Twilight?”
Twilight sighed as she used her magic to lift everything off of herself.
“I was doing fine without all this stuff, Pinkie. Though I appreciate the thought. Let's put these back and just enjoy the party, alright?” She said with a smirk as she put everything back with her magic.
Soon the party returned to normal with the exception that any time Pinkie began to get anxious about whether or not the unicorn was truly enjoying herself, Twilight would rest a hoof on her shoulder and smile while reassuring the mare. Twilight was nearly positive that she was getting extra attention, though she would need extra study to be sure of the theory.
They partied until well into the night and only stopped when they couldn't consume any more sugar to cause a sugar buzz to stay awake. Spike had fallen asleep a few hours earlier and had been long since been put in bed.
As the friends began to head home from the party with the tougher ones escorting the more feminine and fragile ones, Fluttershy escorted by Rainbow Dash and Rarity escorted by Applejack, Pinkie Pie stayed behind to help clean up. As the last of the streamers were put away, Twilight gave a yawn as she looked at the other mare.
“That was a great party Pinkie. Thanks again.”
“No problem Twilight, anything for the best pony in Ponyville.” Twilight blushed at the praise.
“Have you checked your new book yet? Did you like it? Did you want to anything from it? I so totally wouldn't mind helping you learn how to cook some more!” The pink mare leaned towards the lavender one as she looked at her with hope and excitement in her blue eyes. Twilight rubbed the back of her head with a hoof.
“I'm sorry Pinkie. I haven't had the chance to look at it yet, though it does look good.” Pinkie's whole demeanor drooped. “We could take a look at it right now if you want though!”
At this the pink mare perked right back up and hopped over to the book before plopping down next to the lavender mare. Twilight laughed as she laid down as well while opening the book to the first page where a note was hoof-written in, waiting for her.
[Hey Twilight! I knew you said you can't cook but maybe you just need a whole book just for cooking! I'll always be around to help, so let me know when you've picked something you want to try and make!]
Twilight gave a small nudge and smile to the mare beside her who blushed and smiled in return.
As Twilight continued to read the book, pausing to look at some of the recipes that held her interest, Pinkie Pie hopped in place, never quite leaving from her spot on the floor. She was excited at both the idea of more hang out time and the fact that she was sitting right next to the one she'd want to have as her special somepony. She looked at the lavender mare beside her, dazed by the unicorn's entire being.
“So which one do you-” Twilight began to ask as she turned her head to look at the mare beside her when it happened.
The two mares were so close together that all it took was for both of them to face each other to accidentally kiss. Even as both felt warmth spread from all the places that touched (their sides, their hooves and their lips) they froze in place, worried about the other's reaction.
After a moment where neither one moved away, Pinkie felt the spark of hope rise into a flame and she deepened the kiss by a small amount, both to test the waters and to enjoy the one chance she may have to kiss the mare of her dreams. Her eyelids drooped to half-mast at the feelings coursing through her, though she wanted to make sure of the unicorn's reaction, in case it went too far.
Twilight's brain shut off as all her senses went into overdrive. She could smell the pink mare's usual scent of baked goods, vanilla and icing. She could feel everywhere they touched as well as Pinkie's breath from her nose and how perfectly still everything was. She saw the spark turn to flame in blue eyes as well as when Pinkie deepened the kiss. This lit her own internal flames as all previously debated emotions and reactions were thrown out the mental window and the lavender mare kissed back.
Pinkie could hardly contain her excitement as she felt the kiss returned and deepened. Neither mare wanted the moment to end and breathed through their noses as the kiss went farther and became a little more heated. Pinkie Pie put her hooves around the unicorn's neck as Twilight in turn put her hooves around the pink mare's barrel as each pulled the other closer.
Soon the need for a full breath of air became too much and they pulled away at the same time before resting their foreheads together. They both gasped lightly, one with blue eyes open and a large grin on her face while the other had her eyes closed though she did have a small smile which grew as she she opened her eyes to look at the pink mare before her.
“Wow. That was -” Began the studious pony, trying to find the right words to describe the feelings she was experiencing.
“AWESOME!” Gushed the pink mare as she hugged the lavender one, knocking the mare over on the floor. Twilight's smile grew even more.
“Yes. Yes it was.” Pinkie drew Twilight closer once more as she nuzzled her neck.
“Please say this means you like me as much as I like you, like like like you, and you want to be my very own special somepony and you won't ever leave Ponyville 'cause I'd be so lonely and things would get boring and -” Pinkie had looked up at Twilight, who was a puddle of warm fuzzies and if she wasn't already, the tirade would have made it so.
The lavender unicorn silenced the mare of her heart with a kiss and while she didn't want to end the feelings she got from it, she needed to respond to the heartfelt plea. Blue eyes sparkled as they looked into purple which melted at the sight before them.
“I do like you Pinkie. Like 'like' like you. I wouldn't dream of leaving Ponyville and I would be extremely honored and pleased to be your special somepony if you'd be mine.” Twilight moved her hooves so that one was across pink shoulders while the other brought Pinkie's head closer so that she could nuzzle the top of the pink mare.
Pinkie responded by hugging the lavender pony even more and cheered.
“Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa~~”
Twilight laughed lightly as she squeezed back. After a minute (during which Pinkie hadn't taken a breath or paused as she continued to cheer) Twilight looked at the mare from where she lay when the hyper pony knocked her over.
“Pinkie? What do we do now?” She couldn't help but be slightly anxious, it was unknown territory that they were heading into. Pinkie looked back at her special somepony and saw the smidgen of uncertainty, and while she didn't have a whole lot of experience in this area, she knew what would set the mare of her heart at east.
“I vote cuddling! Cuddling is good and comfy and warm and -” Twilight silenced her once more with a light kiss. Twilight loved how Pinkie was trying to set her at ease, even if it was a little wordy.
“And kisses. Kisses are good too.” The pink mare was a little shocked at all the kisses she was getting from the normally reserved pony but she wasn't going to put up a fuss about it.
Twilight giggled at the love-struck face of Pinkie's and had a feeling she was wearing a similar smile. Pinkie soon joined in the giggling as Twilight levitated a blanket and pillows over so that they didn't have to move from where they were currently cuddling.
They spent the night in each other's hooves, content and happy. Both couldn't believe their luck that the other returned their feelings and both mentally agreed that this was the best night ever.
The next morning Spike found them still on the ground floor in each other's embrace. After waking up and having been found in such a situation, they had to come clean and tell the young dragon the news. The small dragon was surprised but after thinking about the past few months, it made sense in a way. And so long as Twilight was happy, then it was fine.
And so Ends the journey of two mares to give voice to what they felt for one another.
Now they must face the hazards of a relationship,
which is a Story for Another Time.
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Yay!
It only took 15 chapters but a good story none the less.
3080382 glad you liked it. I wanted it to feel more natural of how much they came to like each other and not just suddenly they were both in love. That and most of the first season was better when they were waffling back and forth.
Keep an eye out, the next story I'll be posting about are the adventures of the CMC, with a TaviScratch one after that, and then more mane 6 shipping. Then there's the sequel for this one too.
Lots to look forward to.
you're right that is a lot to look forward to
and hopefully i can continue to be part of the process
i hope you do a sequel i really enjoyed reading this twipie is my favorite pairing
3080614 Believe me, I like having another person to check how I'm doing writing wise.
You'll still be part of the process. 
I really liked this. just... I really liked it. Can't wait for whatever else is coming!
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I love hearing these kinds of comments (the other kinds can be said as well, but nothing lights up my day than someone else liking my story). Glad you liked it, whole lot left for their story that will be coming after a few other stories start. So they can all intertwine. 
3089638 Yea I'm thinking of doing something similar with three of my favorite ships. All interconnected and stuff.
3147498 indeed. I believe that is the best kind of way to wake up.
Hopefully everypony finds their special somepony so that they can feel that kind of happiness.
3305786 well, I was originally going for that AJ likes apples (and the color red) and that she wasn't really looking into romance. Though since this is the second comment like this, I'm starting to wonder if I should look into that when I finally get around to finishing the overhaul of the story...
Thanks for the comment though!
Also, at the time that I was writing this chapter, I was leaning towards RariSpike, but after reading some more stories (as well as some really well written Rarijacks) and thinking about Spike as a being, I realized that his liking of Rarity is almost completely superficial and decided to go for a Rarijack instead.
3306432 I just assume this means that neither Rarity or AJ are even thinking romantic thoughts for each other yet, since I have been given the opportunity at a peek at your verse, and have an idea as to where it is going.
3354726 aye, very much so. At the time, neither one is thinking romance.
3631207 Well, gosh, thanks
Hope you like it!
3781951 Yep, that's why I just had to name it that, to try and present a chapter/story that wasn't that bad
Glad you like it
3783093 well, it's actually from a movie, Pitch Perfect.
There should be a link to the song in that chapter.
Glad you're enjoying it so far though
I even have a sequel for when you're done with this story for Twilight and Pinkie 
Awwwwwww That was amazing!
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And here I thought I tore through stories with rapid speeds; you are a fast reader or my chapters were rather short. Either way, I applaud you 
3783501 I am a fast reader but I mean it when I say I enjoy every bit
3783525 Nah, it's all good. I do similar (perhaps not as fast, but same principle)
Glad you liked it.
For some reason I stopped reading this about five chapters in , and I don't even remember what that reason was. But anyway this story was great! It seems that a lot of ship fics that involve Pinkie are so sweet and fluffy, which I'm grateful for after all the depressing ship fics I've read. I think this comment has gone on for long enough so on to your next story.
3789718 Considering the kind of mare Pinkie is, it's almost to be expected. And please, do go on,
I like reading comments where the reader is pleased with my writing 
Glad you liked it, my writing improved after this one when I wrote Pitch Perfect, so the sequel should be a little better in quality.
3789855 I've already started the sequel to this story, and I'll probably finish what is out so far sometime tomorrow. After that I'll start on the RariJack shipfic. Also regarding Pinkie shipfics I've noticed that they are either really depressing or really happy, there doesn't seem to be an in between.
Ps- Holy crap a dog just threw up in my room and literally smells worse then her poop.
3789939 At first I thought this was a new way of saying something then I realized you meant that a dog really did throw up in your room
I'm sure she didn't mean it, hopefully it comes out easily.
Glad to hear that you'll be reading more of my stories, they do all interconnect after awhile so you'll see bits from one angle and then another and bits that you don't see in the one story.
It just gets hard on my end to remember not to add the whole big picture when writing. 
3789978 Yeah, I suppose she does have that strange dual personality. Anyway, expect to see me commenting on the sequel sometime tomorrow.
And I wouldn't have minded her throwing up that much if I didn't have carpeted floors and if it wasn't 1 AM when she did it.
3790002 yeah, carpet is a tough one to clean. I luckily have wood floors in my place, making it soo much easy to clean puke and poo the cats will leave for me.
At least you caught wind of it (maybe in the literal sense as well) before the puke settled firmly into the carpet.
3790054 Yeah, I caught wind of it in sense of the meaning. It smelled disgusting, like I would have believed that it was puke if I hadn't watched her throw up.
3963941 Wow, I've never been asked that
It's more like, if I really let it, my mind goes off in odd directions similar to how Pinkie does. That and I took a moment to know what each main pony was like so I could write them properly, so I thought long and hard about Pinkie
3963968 I have never read 'Cupcakes' (from what I know, that's the fimfiction that spawned so many gore/horror about Pinkie going nuts and killing ponies and putting them into cupcakes) but I have heard about it and in order to understand, tried to watch the youtube video about it (couldn't make it past half a minute, it was horrible).
While I never truly experienced it, I am/was just as scarred as most who have (I have a strong imagination) and made the chapter Cupcakes (as well as Addicted to Cupcakes) in order to replace what it means in my mind and hopefully others. I questioned why I was writing Pinkie so obsessed with cupcakes, but then realized that she is, she has a song for it.
So that's that. 
Glad you like it so far though (flashbacks aside)
3963985 Yeah, I like to try and understand why they act like they do in the show (from different perspectives and thought processes) so there may be more that try to explain an episode (I can't actually remember at this time, it's been a while since I wrote this
) 
3989006 Well, I won't write anything explicit, but I have to get the timing right.
It shall occur when it is time 
3993221 Lol, I gotta say, I love to read comments from people who are really enjoying the story and are enthusiastic.
Makes the whole thing worthwhile.
I can't help but tease people with the shipping
Good story is var good. Dank you.
4045795 Thank you
I'm glad you liked it 
There is a sequel too you know.
"A New Kind of Party"
4119818 Glad you like it, Pinkie is faster than Dash after all
4127429 Hmm... this concept intrigues me...
lol sorry for not replying sooner! I had another mental breakdown and I barely got out of lock down yesterday! So... sorry 
4236808 It's ok. While I do like to talk with others, I rather you be ok physically and mentally first before worrying about talking with little ol' me.
And since you've reached the end (at least, I think you have... can't really know for sure), I hope you like the next one, A New Kind of Party, even more.
4237064 I actually haven't finished get cuz I been procrastinating so that the magic doesn't end (sorry again for not replying the new meds were too strong and the nurses around here barely noticed My immatation of a vegitable yesterday
) I guess I have no choice now but to finish it! 
Yay I finished!
I only have one thing to say about this chapter...
YES!!!!!!!!!!
4309944 well that was before I added the sequel, glad you liked it though
There's a lot more fluffy in the next one, and it's going to be MUCH longer.
4753604 well, this was written before that particular episode.
4786990 Hmmm.... I hadn't really thought about how seemingly abrupt she accepts it. It's mentioned more in the sequel.
Also, glad you like the Doctor references. There's more in the next one and I was starting a whole story for it (Down Winding Paths), though I have a lot on my plate now and it will be a while for me to get back to it.
Thanks for commenting though!
4816649 Yes, I had the Weird Al before he was Cheesy.
Vintage! 
All I can say about this fic
5064039 I couldn't help but laugh out loud when I saw what the clip was (before clicking even!). I take it was for a good thing?
But yeah, a very fluffy story indeed. 
So is the next one.
5065188 Why else would I favorite this?
I'll read the sequel when I have more time (college and work and whatnot) I'm looking forward to it 
5308452 Glad to hear it, though I don't know about 'god-like'.
Yeah, the Rarijack story (A not so simple simple life) is going really well, lots of fun times.
As is A new kind of party, the sequel. Fun times all around
Amazing job on the story! It was a pleasure to read as I went through all the memories of the past. You tied many of the episodes into this story and managed to create an ameliorated version of the story. By adding in extra scenes and tid-bit pieces of songs and references (which I was able to find I believe all of them), you enticed your readers to continue further examination of this well laid out story.
When I started on the first chapter of this 15-piece novel, I was thrown into a couple loops by the method of which you chose to depict the difference from their thoughts and their speech. Upon seeing the set up of the thoughts, I wondered why they sat between two hands, for it wasn't truly needed. However, as I read on, I didn't mind it as much and simply labeled it as a style, for it was not wrong to do, making it acceptable. There was a moment in one of the chapters (sorry for the vagueness, for I read all the chapters today and lost where it originated) where you had parentheses within parentheses. This was a mistake that needed to fix. Despite the first set of parentheses acting as to portray the character's thoughts, the second set of parentheses should be brackets. Aside from this, the story only carried minor grammatical errors (none of which I believe would have affected the overall production of the story).
What really caught my interest the most in this story what the excellence of characterization that was incorporated into each chapter. Every time I read Twilight and Pinkie Pie, I felt their emotions in their words and the world in their eyes. At times I felt as though I didn't need to read their parts, feeling sure of myself that I knew how the story would progress. It was definitely a feeling of pleasure that rushed my mind after looking at each line thinking "That there is something Pinkie would definitely say". Rainbow Dash's character was a little excessive, in my opinion, for the use of the word 'egghead' was replaced with almost every moment her name could have been used, which she does use at times. I still compliment greatly on the magnificence of the characterization in this story.
Overall, this story deserves my highest approval. I thank you, sir, very much for the read. I shall give this story what it deserves and take my leave. I will be looking forward to any later creations you may have in the near future.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha, Fort Impression On Everypony
5430317 Heh heh, thanks for the comment. I do like to read each comment, though I don't always get the chance to respond to them all. Glad to hear you liked it so much! I like to think I have a very strong ability to know (for the most part) how each character would act and react, and have a very clear vision of their world, making it pretty easy to write their stories.
Concerning the grammar; this is the second story I had ever written for the fandom. My current editor only started to teach/re-teach me actual grammar over halfway through the story, when he first started to help me. I've come a long way since then (as is evident by any of the other stories aside from Tank's). I'm going back and ever so slowly changing and improving this one, so I'll try to find the ones you mean and perhaps reword some of Dash's lines.
Thanks again for the comment (and follow)! Hopefully you find the sequel just as well written.
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Well, it is glorious to hear the improvement you are making. I am always happy to just know those that I read and review for are happy doing what they love. I look forward to reading your sequel, as I could always use a good Twinkie Pie story. Quite a lengthy one as well, so I will definitely have quite the adventure with this story.
5430854 Oh yes, it will be much larger than this one. Not the longest one I have planned, but pretty long indeed. With more of those 'view an episode from a shipping point of view' too. Though I do feel the need to point out that A New Kind of Party goes along with A Not so simple Simple Life and Taming the Storm. So there is quite a bit of cross referencing and different points of view for the same event. Just suggesting some other things to read. Anyways, thanks again and I'll see you around then!