Dear Princess Twilight,
Nopony need remind you of the morning-that-was-delayed upon which you earned your crown, reclaiming the Elements of Harmony for Equestria. Or at least it seems so. The years have passed and I have performed faithful service to you as had been the case with your great mentor. Few ponies know of Celestia's actions that morning. I assume that you, princess, thought she was subdued by her sister in line with public opinion on the matter. I am one of the few attending her that morning and now I feel it can be told. The story I humbly relate to you now is true.
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This Fic. I like it. Another.
2824438 Thanks much. I've got to search around for some inspiration. This was a story I really wanted to tell.
Interresting story.
Frankly I never agreed with the idea that Celestia put all the mane 6 in Ponyville, simply because I don't see how it's possible for her to have done that.
Linking RD and Twilight would be easy since one made the rainboom and the other Celestia met when it happened, but the others? Nah. There must be hundreds of millions of ponies, just in Equistria, and to find 4 specific foals with only the clue that they got their cutie marks at the same time is a task made practically impossible.
That's my take on that though, so eh.
Story was good, though I didn't really like it that much due it not being what I like, writing was solid mostly and the characters were down pat.
2831403 Both of our opinions are valid and I won't fight over mine, it's just my head canon that Celestia was the pivot all important plot threads spun around the first four seasons. It sits better with me than fate or destiny. While hundreds got their mark that day I'm sure the number who did that minute is much smaller. But who cares. I'm just happier imagining her on top of Equestria, doing something mean to it, trolling harder than anypony you ever seen do it.
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Never liked those other versions of Celestia, but whatever. Good first story on this site, hope for more.
Then get ready for a sequel, my ground level view of A Canterlot Wedding.
Wow. Just found this fic and it's awesome. I love pretty much everything about this. Especially your narration here is just perfect and Quill's voice really comes through strongly.
3226182 Thanks so much. I'm writing about Scootaloo's dad at the moment but I plan on getting back to the Quill clan someday. I have plans for her unseen older daughter exploring the metaverse.
It's been a challenging week so getting some positive feedback really keeps me motivated.
Glad I could be of some encouragement! That sounds pretty interesting. I'll be on the lookout for that Scootadad fic, as well.
Interesting story but Celestia seems pretty off.
This for example. Celestia has never used the royal we. At all. That was Luna's schtick. In fact Celestia is considerably colder and more distant on top of the non-canon adherence to protocol. Come on this is the mare that sowed the seeds of the Grand Galloping Gala's destruction.
3337141 Thank you for your astute reading of the story. You are absolutely correct, it was intentionally out of character. Quill remarks that she never heard her use outdated Canterlot language like that besides last time she went to war, and that is precisely for what she is preparing.
Remember, she's going up against not only her posessed sister who is likely her equal in power but without the use of the Elements which were the only things able to stop her in the past. She had been brooding on the battle a century ago for weeks, so I found it likely she would slip into the royal we in this occasion.
You actually see three facets of Celestia in this story. First she is the brooding, guilt-ridden elder sister under long morning for what she did to Luna. Next you have the stern, determined protector ready to don armor and shield Canterlot from danger. Finally there is the compassionate and loving spiritual mother to all Equestria's ponies.
It is out of character because she is going through a difficult time. The other characters sense this and it worries them. I wrote this story to express some of my head cannons concerning questions I had about the pilot. Why would Celestia just forget about the Nighmare Moon prophesy? She was there. Why would she dismiss Twilights' warning about the prophesy when she knows how dangerous Nightmare Moon is? And how did Nightmare Moon neutralize Celestia almost instantly off-screen? It was Celestia's line to Twilight after she was freed that got me thinking in this direction, "I knew you could do it." Did she plan for all this to happen right from the start?
I became more certian about my theory after Magical Mystery Cure where all the conflict is instigated by Celestia as another test for Twilight's ascension.
But if you didn't care for some of my decisions that is fine. I'm just glad you took the time to read it.
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Except she's not the cause of all those conflicts as you put it. Yes she's been shaping Twilight for the role, but she's hardly preserved Sombra so Twilight could learn a lesson several millennia later. Same with Discord. There was no lesson to be learned there, a great threat to the kingdom had returned and she needed the Elements.
And the problem with writing her OOC on purpose is you do it the entire fic. And that's the problem. When you're writing a character that sad anxious or scared, you don't write a whole new character as you did here. You write them as how they'd likely act while keeping their core characteristics intact. The only thing this character really has in common is Celestia's name.
We've seen Celestia angry and nervous before and she doesn't whip out protocol or act super distant. What you've done is taken what should be simple aspects of a character and warped them until it is an entirely different character.
3338319 I am so sorry if I upset or disappointed you.
3338636 Nah just pointing things out.
3344167 I can see your point, really but I wrote the story to express what a multi-faceted character a centuries old possible demi-godddess must have. It was my first story and I've poured over all 4,111 words a dozen times and it's just how I want it. But I'd love a suggestion for what you think is the perfectly captured Celestia and maybe I'll take some pointers if I tell another Scrievener tale.