When Twilight Sparkle discovers what turns out to possibly be the worst mary sue most powerful pony in Equestria lying in a crater, he isn't quite the stallion she thought he would be. Being a super-powerful alicorn can only get you so far when you have the social skills of a rancid tub of yoghurt, everything doesn't work out perfectly in your favour by chance, and everyone doesn't love you for no good reason; not to mention a really bad colour scheme. Black coat? Fire hair? Seriously? Join our hero as he manages to spaghetti his way through every encounter, causing mass cringing and facehoofing wherever he goes.
This is a parody of a certain extremely long fanfic. I never read it far enough to figure out exactly why it's called What's love got to do with it? but there you go. I can't in good consciousness actually recommend you read the whole thing but check it out, if only for a laugh. Oh, and I'm sure it's obvious, but this story isn't really meant to be taken seriously. At all.
Ummm... you suck at parodies. So far everything is going OC's way and there wasn't anything entertaining about it. You gotta aether put in some lamp shading, or make it fun/entertaining to read. Otherwise copy/paste the original and delete all the "love" scenes.
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It's only one chapter in, I don't know what you expected to happen. He's literally only met Twilight and stepped out of a crater. And even that didn't go too well for him. As for not being entertaining, well, it's probably just not your type of humour. Also, copypasting the original would be called plagiarism, which tends to be frowned upon.