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Octavia finds Vinyl at a party after so many years and they become regular friends again. Though, amidst their friendship, Octavia develops feelings for Vinyl. She expresses these feelings by writing a composition for her new crush. Will Vinyl return Octavia's feelings?

Amazing cover art by DShou (deviantart.com).

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 51 )

Can't wait for the next chapter :pinkiehappy:

I am intrigued...can't wait to see what happens!

Welp I shall be waiting to see what happens next good job

i see potential in this story, but i feel this and future chapters could use an editor. the occasional grammatical hiccup aside, the sentences dont flow that well, it reads kind of blocky.
i hope you take this advice the way its meant, as a way to further your writing, and keep up the work, i will follow this story for atleast one or two more chapters.

2823476 Thanks for the advice, sir. I'm a decent writer, but sometimes flow can be a bit of an issue with me. I just need to be able to read the story to myself to see if it actually works well.

Hmm.. my eye will be kept on this. :moustache:

Lovely ouo
I shall be sitting here waiting for the next and following chapters~ :scootangel:

An everyone-rated Octascratch fic?
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2827189 Yeah, I just realized that there really isn't a lot of those. :derpytongue2: That's kinda funny.

2827314 There are so many :unsuresweetie: Teen and :pinkiesick: Mature.

THIS PLEASES ME SO MAKE MOAR!!:flutterrage:

This was on my "read later" list for some time now :applejackunsure:
Why haven't I read this before? This is really good and I certainly will hope for some fast updates :moustache:

Don't know why, but Octavia and Vinyl always make me want to listen to Lindsey Stirling. Eh, it fits.

so cute !!!!!!!!! loved it :)

I could never see neon as a matchmaker mainly for the reason that ShadyVox plays his voice and he's like the whitest kid I know of.

Psych delic reminds me of Bill and Ted:twilightsmile:

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I just watched that ShadyVox video again, and I totally agree with you. Though, I can still see it happening. :P

Well done bro. It was a nice chapter :pinkiesmile:
I hope we will get the next one sooner than this :raritywink:
Also, matchmaker Neon? Why not. Sometimes you find talent for something in the most unexpected person

I think it was a cute story. The plot was good and your writing isn't too bad either :pinkiesmile:

and you’re going to introduce this Vinyl Scratch

One thing though. When did Octavia tells May that Vinyl's surname is Scratch? Can May read thoughts now? Would be cool but I don't think that this is the case :trollestia:
Could be that I missed it too, but I want to be sure :ajsmug:

So beautifully done... Bravo!

3415940 Good catch. I'll be sure to revise it. :pinkiehappy:

“And even though, I got a bit happier, I still thought of you a lot. Then, I finally got the chance to see you at Canterlot. Like, when I saw you earlier this week, my heart leaped twenty stories. You should’ve seen it, it was like a circus show.”

*cough cough cough leapt cough cough cough*

very cute story :) i really liked it.

3418861 Thanks for the info. I'll be sure to edit it.
And good luck dealing with that cough. It seems pretty bad.

Psych Delic nodded his head. “I’m going to get the champagne for their wedding.”

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This was a cute story. Rather nice and sweet. Pretty nice OctoScratch you got here
Bonus Points for adding Neon Lights
Bonus Points for making him a decent guy

I don't even realize it when Vinyl became a big-shot DJ.

I didn't even realize it when Vinyl became a big-shot DJ.
or
I don't even realize it when Vinyl becomes a big-shot DJ.

Hopefully she isn't ruining her.

Hopefully she isn't ruining herself.

Octavia also like the liveliness of Vinyl's electric blue mane, contrasting with her own grey mane.

Octavia also liked the liveliness of Vinyl's electric blue mane, contrasting with her own grey mane.

hat are you talking about?

What are you talking about?

Oh. Uh... thanks, Vinyl. I did eat that sandwich a little savagely, and it to have left me with some hay in my teeth.

Rather than correct this sentence by filling in the missing word, it would probably be better to just cut out the second half of the sentence altogether on account of it being redundant, as Vinyl had already said something similar.
Like this:
Oh. Uh... thanks, Vinyl. I did eat that sandwich a little savagely.
Or if you choose to leave the second half of the sentence there, because maybe Octavia is nervous and just repeating things, in which case you might want to add some stutters.
Like this:
Oh. Uh... thanks, Vinyl. I um... did eat that sandwich a little savagely, and it uh... seems to have left me with some hay in my teeth.

Yeah, I can't believe I'm going to be a cellist in a big orchestra," Octavia said excitedly. "Though, I can't believe that we won't be able to see each other as much anymore.

The 'I can't believe' in the second sentence is repetitive. You shouldn't have your characters say the same phrase twice in two sentences. It would be better to alter it slightly. Like this:
Yeah, I can't believe I'm going to be a cellist in a big orchestra," Octavia said excitedly. "Though, it's hard to believe that we won't be able to see each other as much anymore.

From a nonlinear non-subjective point of view, how much do I like this fic? It's going in Tier 4 of my library. There are only five tiers in my bookshelves. It is very hard to get into Tier 4 and TopTier.
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/415809/tiered-bookshelves

That was an amazing story...... I love Vinyl an Octavia ship.... One of my most favorite since they are both musicians, but they both have their differences like music, clothing, etc.:rainbowkiss:

This is up there with some of the best OctaScratch fictions I've had the pleasure of reading in ages~ <3 :pinkiesad2: Good show!!

Yay that was awesome:rainbowdetermined2:

A very enjoyable story. Thumbs up from me.

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I've seen teen rated fics rated that mainly due to language and drinking. :twilightsheepish:

I know my teen fics usually rated that for drinking, kissing, and language, but just soft stuff. As for mature, yeah, those get rough :rainbowderp:

that was awesome u should totally make a sequel:rainbowwild::pinkiehappy:

This is definitely among my favorite TaviScratch stories, and I do hope to see more in the future.

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