NOTE: This story is an experimental parody. It does not reflect the style or philosophy of my writing now.
Can you last in the dark sky known as Fluttershy's haven? The cloud dragon of the mist hopes so, as this will not be an easy task. When Rarity gets invited over to Fluttershy's house for tea, the reluctant unicorn does not exactly expect anything good to happen, but when it happens...you do not even want to know. After finding herself in a Cupcakes-related situation, things go from bad, to worse, to so unbelievable, it challenges her perspective of fantasy and reality. Be prepared to soar through this five-part fantasy series, and see what secrets can lie beyond those stygian clouds in the sky.
Special thanks to Kitero Miberei (AKA BronyInvestigator) for the cool sketch for the cover image. Please check out his art, he's awesome!
NOTE: This fic was originally posted on Pony Fiction Archive and Fanfiction.net on January 20, 2012. Now, I present to you this...very strange and confusing take on the classic horror fanfiction, "Cupcakes". Please be cautious in the dark sky.
That looks like more than five parts, dude.
No it's five parts. If you read the titles, two of the parts are split into two.
OH GOD SO MANY WORDS. I will track it and read later :D
Huh, interesting you did a change of character for the "cupcakes" story.
I seen a few errors that I thought I would point out:
"Um, yes..." Fluttershy replied in a shy and quiet voice, please come in.
^^^, you forgot the " " marks.
"Thank you," Rarity said politely as she grabbed the teacup, and it better.
^^^^ not so sure what the , "and it better." meant.
and there was another spot where you forgot to put a space, but I couldn't find it afterwards.
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All around it was pretty good. (haven't read the other chapters just this one)
Just a couple things I saw that could use a little revise work, was Rarity seems pretty out of character and just a all around bitch.
Also, you should take out all actions that involve *'s and just change them to word form.
tl;dr Tracking to read later. I'm a big Cupcakes fan so I hope this is worth it.
severely dissappointed. Lack of grammar and nonsense conversations. I cant even finish it.
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You must continue rapidly! Fight until conclusion!
Don't give up!
no... just no
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This seems more comical then tragic right now.
WHY!!!!!???????
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It had to be done.
Well...that is an ending. Is this supposed to be funny, dark or inspirational?
What did I just read?
This needs an alternative universe, a comedy, and a random tag.
You were trying too hard to be funny. If it wasn't for that, I'd have just left without leaving a rating.
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SO MANY FUCKING MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE REFERENCES!!! YES!!!!!!!