"This is the tale of two ponies with a duty... well, only one of them. The other one is only taking care of the mare. Really, that stallion is weird, always wearing that gas mask and never showing his face.
The protagonist of this story, Scarlet Nightmare is noble soldier of the kingdom of Evelestria, another kingdom far away from and in war with Equestria, but after waking up in a bed with a doctor taking care of her, she finally believes things may have a change for good.
This fic has Lake's help. Thank you very much for your time.
Chapters (7)
I promise in the new chap a power ranger will appear.
Well, again, thanks, Lake. This chapter was really interesting. Was Gas right or drunk? Well, who knows.
This how Gas looks like Gas Ranger of course I do not own this image, I just found it, and I like it, looks like Gas-of course that’s not his mane color-
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Interesting, anymore rangers or is it just him?
Besides that can't wait for the next chapter.
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I am happy that you liked, and nope, there is no more Pony Ranger... for the moment, this was only a joke about Gas and his bad luck-he is always yelling at his writer, i don't know how i can, btw-the next chap will be update in... the afternoon-right now here is 1:35 AM-so, if i have luck, the chap will be updated at the afternoon or even more earlier if i have luck. I am happy that you like the fic.
Another chapter, thanks again, Lake. BTW, next chapter you will see another costume of Gas, but, if you want to give me an idea in this comments if you want another costume for Gas-the same one that you are suggesting-like, another Pony Ranger, Man in Black or even Diddy-but, remember, must have a mask or helmet, or something that covers his face-
I'll use the Men in Black costume for like... two or three chaps.
Okay, Hi! I would have read more but this really isn't my type of genre (I also don't have a lot of time at the moment) so I will give you a review on the first chapter and if I happen to read on I will review at the end too!
Title: The Silent War
Grammar: 5/6
Pros: Well I really enjoyed the opening. It set the scene very well and made the reader want to read on.
The character of the Doctor and the protagonist are both interesting and portrayed well.
The plot line is different to others (a good different)
Cons: Well, your grammar isn't brilliant. (Remember to capatalise words after an ellipses
You mixed up the words a bit which made it difficult to read.
Your tenses in some sentences were muddled up.
Notes: Well, a good example of the cons is this part here:
Firstly, the ellipses there isn't needed. I think that paragraph should look something like this:
The doctor didn't answer for a few moments, he was stunned after hearing what the mare said. "Lady, if I wasn't wearing my gas mask you would probably see how shy I am. I didn't know that you were the type of mare that would yell at the first doctor: 'Take me to the castle of Valhalla.'"
But yeah, I will probably read on at some point
Good work! Its definitely getting a like!
I hope you enjoyed the review and it was very helpful. I guess you can check out my other stories since you've already read Trapped...
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Thanks, I will read the sequel of Trapped soon. And yep, my grammar isn't brilliant-that is why i have the best profreader; Lake <3-after the chapter 4, she help me with the grammar and others things-thanks god we have the same original language-and I am trying now to open a new story about my favorite manga. But I think that will be a pilot for the moment... anyway. Thanks, again.
alcohol breath that's how the soviet kicked the germans in the ass in stalingrad "out of ammo? THEN BREATHE!!!"
Welcome to the League of Drmalaria. The one who is busy with college, but one day, like this mouth I will continue this.
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Thank you sir for following that joke, I really apreciate that.