Special Thanks:
Editor: Pissfer
Proofreader: Axel_Nyan
*****
When One Realizes He cannot go back…
He Must Not Slack…
In Other Words, One must plant the seeds of a new life…
But Will One Be Able To Sow Such A Thing, Twice?
*****
Chapter 8: Royal Pain
“The Everfree Forest, you are sure of this?” Celestia asked.
“Yes Princess Celestia. Spike and I found him at the edge of the Everfree Forest while looking for a particular mushroom. He was covered in this strange purple smoke, or fog—we couldn’t tell what it was.” Twilight confirmed to her.
The details were strange indeed. Celestia brought her hooves together, thinking deeply. If what Naruto said to her was true, he was definitely brought into this world under unique circumstances, and Twilight’s information on the event only contributes to it. But something about this didn’t seem right; the events just didn’t add up.
Celestia only sighed as she looked at Twilight. “Tell me my pupil, what is your reaction towards this individual?”
“Well… he seems nice, but confused at the same time. It’s like he was born recently with the way he acts.”
“Yes, I gathered the same idea. He is a rather… strange individual. However, he seems to be a nice young gentlepony, despite having some…” Celestia paused for a moment and eyed down at the ground before looking at Twilight once more, “unique features, to put it simply.”
Twilight gave a nod towards her teacher. They both stopped talking for a minute or two, as the silence consumed the room. Celestia looked back at Twilight.
“He is staying with you, correct?”
Twilight flinched a little at the sudden question, with a small blush across her face.
“Well… yes, I couldn’t just abandon him. He seems to be having all sorts of issues, especially with not knowing where he was, and this amnesiac vibe he’s giving off. It just screams ‘help me’,” Twilight said to Celestia. She gave her a firm nod.
“Do you know how long he will be staying?”
That really caught Twilight off guard. “Well… no, he never told me…”
“How long do you want Naruto to stay with you?”
“Until he’s gotten his bearings and is well enough to take care of himself. Basically, I would like to not abandon him.” Twilight replied.
“You do realize that having a young stallion, such as him, living in your own house would not be a healthy matter?”
Twilight tilted her head thoughtfully. “I don’t understand? It’s not like he’s been here for a long time. It’s only been a day or two since he arrived.”
“Yes, of course, but I am only worried for your well-being. There can be… circumstances to where a mare and a stallion could be… out of control, to say it simply.”
Twilight suddenly felt her face flush red. “W-what’s gotten into you, your highness? It’s nothing like that! Not at all…” her eyes darted to the floor, before coming back up to Celestia. “Nothing at all…”
Celestia locked her eyes on Twilight’s. A moment later, Celestia blinked as she nodded slowly.
“Very well… I will trust you with this, but please don’t let him live here for too long. Once he is well make sure you send him on his way. I am sure it would be only a burden on him and yourself if he stayed.”
Twilight blinked once at Celestia’s request. “I… Yes, your majesty, but I have one request myself.”
Celestia got up from the sofa and motioned for her to follow her towards the door. “What would that be, my pupil?”
“If he is to agree with it, I would like to keep him here until he has arrangements to live on his own, be it his own place or simply to be off on his travels once more.”
Celestia stopped walking and stared at the ceiling for a moment, while sucking her lower lip in thought. She stared back at Twilight.
“You are sure of this, Twilight?” Twilight nodded in response. Celestia sighed as she maintained the eye contact. “Very well. All I ask is that you do not keep him here too long. Also, do keep an eye on him. Send me a message if anything goes wrong. Understand?”
Twilight nodded confidently in response.
*****
“Whew… made it… God damn that took too long…”
Naruto had been lost around town for the last half hour. He’d spent a good amount of that time running through and around the town trying to find his way back to that tree-house. If felt as if he’d taken two laps of the town and he’d worked up a decent sweat.
I really should’ve asked Twilight for a map or something before I took off.
Eventually he located the tree that housed both the town library and the lavender unicorn that had brought him in. He saw Spike sitting outside, reading the brown book in his claws. The gold-armored guards were still standing watch on either side the library door, so he assumed that Celestia and Twilight were not done talking just yet. Naruto walked towards Spike. Much to his surprise, Spike looked up from his book and waved at him.
“Hey, Naruto, where’ve you been?” Spike asked. “The guards told me you went for a walk, but you were gone for a good while!” Naruto merely scratched his head as he recalled what happened back at the farm.
“It’s a long story, but in a nutshell, I saved a drowning pony while I was walking around.” Naruto said like it was no big deal, but, to Spike and the guards it was a pretty big deal, immediately going wide-eyed at the statement. Spike immediately hopped up and smiled, while the guards just went back to their neutral demeanor after the brief shock passed.
“Wow, really? Who did you save?” Spike asked.
“Do you know two ponies named Applejack and Applebloom?” Naruto replied.
“Well, yeah. They’re Twilight’s friends, and they own Apple Acre Farm.”
So what Naruto heard from Applejack is correct. He mistakenly trespassed onto the farm without knowing it. But, because of his trespassing, he was able to save the little sister of Applejack. That’s one way of introducing yourself to someone.
“I saved Applebloom. This girl, er, pony, named Applejack, came over to me and thanked me for saving her.”
“Wow! You must really be something to be saving Applebloom like that.” Spike said with a cheerful smile on his face. “Are you like a superhero or something?”
“Um… no, I was just helping out a pony in need, that’s all. I’m sure anyone would have done the same thing in my stead…”
They continued to talk about what had happened with Naruto at Sweet Apple Acres. A few minutes later they were interrupted by the sounds of the door opening. Naruto’s head immediately snapped in the direction of the guards. Two figures appeared between the pair as Celestia and Twilight exited the library. The guards stomped their hooves down as if signaling her arrival. Twilight looked at Naruto with a nervous smile.
“Hey Naruto, been waiting long?” She asked.
“Just took a quick walk is all, getting used to the surroundings and such.” Naruto said with a smile. Celestia was about to say something else when Spike suddenly hopped towards them.
“Twilight, Princess Celestia! Naruto saved Applebloom from drowning earlier!” He said with happiness.
Twilight’s and Celestia’s jaws dropped at the sudden information, as they looked straight at Naruto.
“Naruto did what?” They both said in unison. Naruto gave a small blush in his cheeks as he scratched his head with his hoof.
“Y-Yeah… I guess I saved a drowning pony on an apple farm... Did I forget to mention that with my walk?” Naruto said nervously, pretending to be confused. They still stared at him in disbelief as their facial expressions contorted towards a smile.
“That’s wonderful Naruto!” Twilight said with a cheerful smile. Princess Celestia looked impressed at the stallion’s heroic behavior as well.
“It is indeed. You just saved a pony’s life after all. I thank you, Naruto.” Celestia said.
Naruto couldn’t help but blush from the praise he was getting. Celestia looked to Twilight and then back at the rest of the group.
“Well then, I guess my claims may have been mistaken. Maybe your arrival was that of a blessing.” Celestia said. Naruto raised a brow at that.
“What does that mean?”
“It is nothing… But now I must go. It is getting to about time for my sister to raise the moon, so I must return to Canterlot post-haste,” she said as she spread her wings, her guards doing the same, before slowly lifting off.
“Farewell Naruto, may fortune favor you!” With that, she flew off, along with the guards, towards the castle-bearing mountain on the horizon. They watched as she slowly disappeared into the distance as Spike, Twilight, and Naruto watched.
Naruto blinked a little, wondering what she meant by her claims being mistaken. Nonetheless, he did know that his actions left a good impression of him on the Princess. And he knew that giving a good impression with someone of royalty was a good start.
“She ran off in a hurry…” Naruto said curiously. “What did she mean by raising the Moon, though?”
Twilight thought she’d seen the end of Naruto’s oblivious nature, but it seems she was wrong. She looked at Naruto with a dumbfounded look.
“Don’t tell me you’re not aware how the Sun and Moon works…?” Naruto tilted his head at her question, a puzzled look plastered on his face.
“It just goes up and down on its own,” Naruto answered. Twilight shook her head.
“Princess Celestia is in charge of the sun while her younger sister, Princess Luna, is in charge of the Moon. It’s how the day and night cycles work here.”
Naruto stood there, looking at her as if she’s crazy. “You can’t be serious…”
“I’m very serious.” Twilight said as she squinted with one eye.
Naruto looked up into the sky, and said out loud. “There’s so much to learn here, so much that’s different from what I used to know… It’s kind of sad…” He said with a frown. “It’s even more surprising how it requires two unicorns just to handle the sun and moon…”
“You mean Alicorns.” She said.
“Huh?”
“Princess Celestia and Princess Luna are called Alicorns; basically, a mix of a Pegasus and unicorn. They are two of the three that exist, and are very powerful.”
A mix of two species. That would explain how Celestia had both a horn and wings. He looked up towards the sun, and then back at her.
“So what did Princess Celestia talk to you about?”
“We mostly talked about how I found you and what the plan was for you while you are here.”
“I see… It’s probably none of my business to ask, but, did the princess come off as hostile towards me?” Naruto asked. Twilight raised a brow at him.
“No, I don’t think so… Why do you ask?”
“I’m not sure… I think it’s…” Naruto began, but then he just closed his mouth. He just shook his head. “Never mind… It’s probably just me. Still growing used to things here after all…”
Spike stood in the background, all quiet while he read his little book. He looked up towards them and shook his head, digging his nose through his book still.
“So how are you feeling so far? You’ve been here for a day or so now, and you saved a pony from drowning… Sounds like you’re quite the stallion despite being confused most... well, all of the time.” Twilight asked.
She’s right. I’ve made a good amount of progress and figured out where I stand in terms of abilities. I’m gonna need a little more training to improve what I do have, but I’m mostly going to be playing it by ear while I get used to things here.
Getting used to things here... I can’t repeat that enough. Here, in an unknown world that’s completely unfamiliar... all I can do is get used to it. There’s no chance of getting back to Konoha. Well, I hoped there was a way, but I don’t want to put too much thought into that. I’m going to have to adapt until I find out if it’s possible or not. Then again, my world is in constant war, always an ongoing conflict. Especially with the Akatsuki who were hunting him and the Kyuubi.
It was a miserable life. It was ironic how my death took me from a world of endless chaos and placed me in a world of peace and tranquility. There was no war, everyone seemed to treat everyone else equally. It was nice to be able to walk through the streets without everyone avoiding me for being the Kyuubi’s host. This was paradise.
“—aruto! Are you there?”
Naruto snapped back to reality as he heard Twilight’s voice. “Huh? Yes? Did you say something?”
“I said, are you feeling alright?”
“Oh, yeah… I’m fine… Once I get used to things here, I… I’ll be alright, I think.”
Twilight looked a little puzzled at Naruto’s last response, but she merely shrugged. “I see… Well, okay then! Do you have any idea how long you’ll be staying for? I mean, it’s not a problem or anything… But my house is pretty boring to most ponies… what with all the books, and me asking questions, and…”
“No, that won’t be a problem... I just...” But in a way, she had a point. He couldn’t stay with her forever. It would just be a burden on her. He took a moment to think about how he was stuck in this world. He needed to get his hooves under him, learn how to live on his own.
He looked at Twilight. “I do need to make some progress if I’m going to be here in Ponyville for a while as I don’t have anywhere else to go. There’s no point in acting like a lazy bum. I need to get active.”
Twilight gave a smile at Naruto. “That’s the spirit Naruto! But what do you plan to do?”
“Hmmm…” That was a good question. He didn’t know much about the history of this world, he didn’t have any money, and he certainly didn’t have a home of his own. These were the three most important things that he needed to attain.
“What does the currency look like here in Equestria?” Twilight tilted her head at Naruto’s strange question. “What kind of money does this land use?” He corrected and simplified himself.
“You’ve never seen the—“ Stopping in mid-sentence, she was feeling a little tired of the weird questions, and just decided to answer it without question.
“The money here is called Bits. They’re small coins that we use to purchase anything of value. Come inside, I’ll show you.”
*****
Sitting on the sofa, he could see a few coins laid out on the coffee table. They were golden and round, with a slightly different colored rim around them. He held one coin with two hoofs, to get a good look at it. He blinked a little. No paper money, but just coins? It would be a burden if one had to carry a bag full of these.
“There are a number of ways to get bits. Mainly you get them from...”
“Working?” Naruto interrupted.
Twilight nodded before continuing, glad that he understood this much at least. “Right. I get bits for running the library for example.”
Naruto gave a firm nod. He knew that he needed money. Without money, he would be quite limited in what he would be able to do here. He needed a job, he knew that. But first, “Twilight, I have a request.”
“What is it?”
“I would like to live here for a little longer. At least until I get enough money to get a home of my own. You have treated me with a lot of kindness… heck, more kindness than I’ve ever been given. I’m not here to abuse your kindness or anything, but barely having any possessions of my own - money, property, or anything else - I am rather lost here. So…”
Naruto stood up before promptly falling to his knees, bowing towards Twilight, startling her with the sudden sentiment.
“I ask of you… Please let me stay here. I’ll pay you back somehow once I’m all settled in.” Twilight didn’t know what to think of Naruto’s response. He was definitely appreciative of what she had done for him, which she could see. She waved her hoof towards Naruto.
“H-hey, no need to go that far, Naruto… I can’t just abandon a pony in need after all… Please, get up.” She stammered nervously. Naruto returned to his hooves per her request. “For now, just get some rest. We can decide on what kind of work we can find for you tomorrow, alright?”
“Why not start right now?” Naruto asked. Twilight pointed her hoof towards the window.
“It’s already nighttime Naruto.”
Naruto blinked at her response. He walked towards the window and found that the moon was high in the sky with no trace of the sun to be seen. He looked back at Twilight with his mouth agape.
“But it was just sunny! How did the night come so quick—oh…” As he remembered that the two princesses control the day and night cycle, so the day and night cycles switch a little more quickly than he was used to. But he started to wonder…
If the sun and moon cycles are controlled by two princesses, does that mean if one went missing, it would cause an eternal day or night? The whole idea was still confusing to him.
Twilight walked up to him and patted him on the shoulder. “You’ll get used to things around here, I promise Naruto.”
Naruto couldn’t help but smile at that. “Yeah, you’re right. I’ll get used to things around here… No matter what…” He said towards the window, and then back at Twilight.
“…Believe it.”
I WEILD THE LMIGHTY SCYTHE OF FIRST
th05.deviantart.net/fs24/150/f/2007/322/b/5/Posessed_scythe_color_1_by_Windstorm1.jpg
It's "Spike and I," not I and Spike
otherwise good story
I'm just going to address the mature thing. As long as its not over the top gore, or ponies we know well dying, I think it's fine. And I did kind of expect that if you were going to pair Naruto up with one of the mane 6.
i can't really add anything, keep posting :)
255014
Yeah, I'm not going to do anything extremely violent. And if I do, it would be against some kinda antagonist, or some threatening enemy that's threatening all of mankind or something.
I wonder when he'll show off his ninjutsu? How will he use them?
Hmmm....I would suggest making it teen for now, just incase there is any kind of gore or anything.
Yay cant wait to see how he progresses
I bet Celestia was a tad wary of Naruto because she could sense that piece of the Kyuubi within him
Misa Need Moar
I'm going to question of this fic getting a Mature Rating.
So there's going to be some sex scene or will it be like someone tries to kill Naruto or something like that which will lead to some battle blood thing?
And Naruto's going to be the only character from the show to be in Equestria right?
255119
Sex would be the more obvious reason, yes.
And as far as Naruto being the only character? I am still undecided on that. It is something to think about.
Thanks for answering my questions cause the time line was a bit confusing.
and correcting what i said before, its not so much as a portal it's just that the biiju is released from the seal through the dead body.
The only reason i even brought that up was because Naruto has the fox tail and it seem as if it should have something to do with the nine tails.
2.- The mature rating should even be a problem cause there isn't too much that you can do with Naruto in Equestria that can do too much harm to anyone.
3.- In my opinion the story is going along great. Most of the dislikes are probably just from people who dont like the story in general because it has Naruto in it so there is nothing that can be done to change that.
5.- Spike really doesnt have much of a role in the show and i dont see how he could be incorporated into your story either. Unless he gains some weird powers that affect Naruto or learns a secret he cant really be used.
i think if you introduced kiba make sure hes a diamond dog
I have to say about the mature rating, I don't mind.
But.
It comes with the condition that he isn't shipped with a mane character. An original character I wouldn't mind.
Keep the story like the character Death intended, care-free and full of second chances. He is going to be re-building his life, trying to figure out how to use his chakra the way he knows, and learning from the ground up. Don't make this an "Epic fight against dark forces from his world, the after life, and this world." Almost a slice of life. You can throw in adventuring and exploration. Dragons and other mythological creatures to fight. Just don't complicate things.
255217
If it were a fight against epic dark forces, the story would get a bit boring, somewhat...
Also, I will have to disagree with pairing Naruto up with an OC.
Most people in particular hate OCs in a lot of fanfics, due to it being overdone in terms of shippings or pairings. Very rarely have I seen a fic with a main OC character that was very very well done...
Keep it goin pal!
I like it all the more with an M-rating. It gives more wiggle room to be serious. and sex.
I personally think that you should do a "Back in Naruto's World" chaptter of everyones reaction to his death. i also think that an Akatsuki member should be sent here as well through different forces, and shenanigans ensue.
1. Yes, since it’s mostly dealing with death here. Maybe it could use something more along that fits those scenes. Maybe something like (Death and Reborn) or (Death be Trolling)
2. Not at all, I’m enjoying this story so far. Besides I’ve seen a lot of Naruto stories before that are M rated. As you said before having an M rating will be much easier for you to work with in this story.
3. I like how this story is playing out thus far. I think the dislikes at the start was maybe cause a lot of people don’t like Naruto that much or how the way it started out for them, but that’s their opinions. Your story is really good so far and has a good start as to Naruto not being able to do Justus like he once did (it balances him out for the time being)
4. Makes sense! Though quick question on Kyuubi. Since Naruto is alive are we expecting to see the fox still around maybe in slumber, deep into Naruto’s mind?
5. Not really, unless you plan not showing him as much in future chapters LOL
Much better with an mature rating,also i hope naruto can use sennin mode or the 9 tailed mode to jaw drop the mane 6,would be cool if tobi,kabuto or sasuke would be in this world ponified too ,i'm looking foward to it,keep up the good work and good luck!
2) Mature is fine, shipping wise... just so long as it isn't somepony like one of the Princesses go for it.
3) Story is going good.
4) I kinda wish Naruto still had the Kyuubi (ooooh what if he does still have the Kyuubi but he's been quit since he's been disoriented from the whole death thing), especially since what happens between the two in the manga goes with the whole them of Friendship is Magic. If having the Kyuubi is an issue of too much power then just have it so he lost a portion of his power when they died. Also by cutting out Kyuubi you cut out two other charecters...
I would rather not see any other charecters from Naruto show up, it would be a bit cliche really. The only charecter I would make an exception for is Itachi and then only if it's because death decided to send him there too (what better place for a pacifist?)
255553 I don't know why, but when you said that about Itachi all i could do is think of him as a weasel living over at Fluttershy's cottage lmao
255665 weasel Itachi
1: I have to agree on the name change and suggest, Death the last comedian you'll ever see.
2: With the sheer amount of Blood you see in Naruto anyway? I would be shocked if you don't put an M rating.
3: I enjoy this story, I'm not much of a Naruto fan but, that's because I haven't seen any of the better story portions. I believe that most of the dislikes came from people who rate before reading just because of the characters it pertains to... In this case Naruto.
4: I personally think that the Kyuubi should be what caused his tail and he should be able to preform his jutsu be focusing chakra into it. That would also explain the fact he has a strange tail by pony standards.
5: Not really, Spike has never really been that important unless he was actually a focus point in the story. Unless he's going to do something important most people completely ignore him except for comic relief.
That's just my opinion though. I'm glad there are writers like you who take the time to ask, it makes the audience feel more involved and thereby more likely to continue reading.
to answer one of the questions
no I would still read it even if it became mature rated
[2] Would I be uncomfortable because of the M-rating?
enchantedbros.com/images/nope.avi.jpg
Plus, it's Naruto. Naruto is from a world filled with ninjas. Ninjas who kill in a daily-basis and are often at war with eachother.
[3] Now, how is the story going? Quite well, actually. The pacing is just right. The reason for the dislikes is most likely because this involves Naruto, and Naruto has been crossed-over with almost anything. I'm not surprised if people go "Ugh, seriously?" when they first see this.
...Or at least, that's how I reacted when I first saw this... Uh...
[4] On the deal with the Kyuubi, well, it never really does leave the host entirely. It's malice and will linger on and I can imagine it feeding on Naruto's darker thoughts.
And, if you think about it, none of the other Bijuu have died, and I doubt Naruto was the first Jinchuuriki to die with the seal intact.
...Then again, I never did pay close attention to Before-Naruto-Era... Uh...
Moving on.
[5] In regards to Spike, well... He's never had a close male friend he could call "Buddy" or "Bro", so I can easily see him attaching to Naruto quickly, especially with his unpredictable, hyperactive and "Protect those you love with your life" attitude.
...And from the comments, you're undecided on letting in other characters from Naruto? I... don't really like that idea. I just think that it might over-complicate things, and I kinda like just having Naruto adapt to this life, surprise others and go on adventures with the rest of the mane six (By the way, I can't really remember where they stand in the original plot-line here. Is this after Discord? Just curious).
...Phew. That's all I've got, I think. I'd best just post this before this turns even longer.
I like this fic. Period.
Will he regain the ability to perform Jutsu?
#1 doesn't matter to me
#2 NOPE!!
#3 so far so good
#4 sounds about right
#5 a little bit
255256 I DEMAND NEJI!
That is all.
255256 If you can pull it off, you will win an internet. Good luck :)
I don't mind Mature ratings as long as the reason for them is done well, meaning that you don't throw around gallons and gallons of blood like some fics will or have the ponies turn into sex-crazed equines. In the 'Heat' fics I've read it's funny, but that was because it was intended to be funny.
A story that starts out like this one suddenly jumping into Celestia or Pinkie or Twilight cornering him and screaming "OMG NARUTO I WANT YOUR FOXY BABIES!!!" would prolly turn off alot of readers to your writing (although if done as a dream/nightmare he's having could be extremely funny )
Not that I think you'll pull something like that. This is a fairly good read so far, and I don't think you'd just toss it into a blender like that.
255256
Why not pair him with Hinata?
255024 Don't you mean 'Ponykind' in this instance?
And I think that direction (blood-gore-fighting wise) is a good one. I await Chapter 9!
255309 YES! That would be awesome, future chapters back in Naruto's world, and maybe somehow some of his friends and enemies get stuck in Equestria, I want. I prefer a Mature rating, so all the power to you.
2.) Of course not.
3.) I like the Story and can't wait for more :)
4.) It´s your Story, so you can let happen whatever you want. But AFAIK if the Jinchuuriki dies, the Seal breaks and the Bijuu comes free. As far as I can tell, you don't read the manga, so I don't want to spoil things and just try to get used to read about him without Kurama at his side
5.) Spike needs a co-pilot
Edit: And I can't wait to see everyponies reaction when they see him first using his chakra ^^
257664
Sweet Apple Acres? I knew I misword it...
And I thought I said Apple Bloom's name correctly? Ah well...
258391
Well, none of the ponies know Japanese, so it's highly doubtful.
And when has Naruto been called a maelstrom? I thought it just meant a type of fish...
I actually perfer mature ratings because it leaves more potential room for story development.....and im in matters a open minded person so any of the romance, n gore doesn't put me off. Its really what makes things interestin.................>.>.....umm it make my day to see naruto rasengan a hydra atleast if he ever gets to tat level as a pony.......in fact its quite possible for Zecora to have advice on his chakra issue. Cuz really her history n quirks can warrant it for convenice atleast.........
PleasepleasepleasepleasepleasePLEASE give Naruto the Shadow Clone technique. That is all I ask.
M isn't necessary but as many other comments that would open many more doors for the story character development wise.
This is good, and a pretty smooth crossover so far, but you're doing a couple of things wrong. Your tensing is inconsistent, and some of your statements are redundant.
Also, I want to reach through my monitor and throw you across the room whenever Naruto says 'believe it'. But that's just me.
OK! before i read further i want to ask you: WHICH CHARACTERS WILL BE USED FOR THE "MATURE" RATING!? I THOUGH NARUTO WAS WITH HINATA!
if u make the "SEX" part then just introduce Hinata or me will find u and choke u to death... THEN MAKE CUPCAKES!
if u make the "SEX" part then just introduce Hinata or i will find u and choke u to death... THEN MAKE CUPCAKES!
1. nah aint that big of a deal...
2. aw dead bodys who seeking a bit of love sounds great to me... clop and gore are oke in my book >///<
3. need some replacement for the finger sign problem >.>
4. no kyuubi???
5. spike sounds a bit ''the spoiled brad''to me he would do any thing for his ''sister'' let twilight show some sister bother love... and not in the wrong way -.-'' sorry twi ''
255129 Needs moar characters from Naruto universe, wait!
Akatsuki kills Asuma etc. so make the dead ones go to Equestria!
I'm a genius!
damn, no sage mode lol. i feel that you can make it mature later on but don't over do it, and yes i like the way the story is progressing
“Princess Celestia and Princess Luna are called Alicorns; basically, a mix of a Pegasus and unicorn. They are the only two that exist, and are very powerful.”
Cadence is an Alicorn.
Spike tells them naruto has just saved a pony. Celstia and twilights reactions
google.com/imgres?um=1&hl=en&tbo=d&biw=1600&bih=785&tbm=isch&tbnid=eDgPXmmx62f0sM:&imgrefurl=http://mlpimgmacros.tumblr.com/post/26664187273&docid=C0cGxZvKqlk9EM&imgurl=http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m6rm208FNo1r3k1m8o1_500.png&w=500&h=454&ei=h8ycUO3JCIWryQHyo4GICQ&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=1156&vpy=283&dur=530&hovh=214&hovw=236&tx=125&ty=108&sig=100126746610108286468&page=1&tbnh=138&tbnw=151&start=0&ndsp=37&ved=1t:429,r:17,s:0,i:123
1587256 link broken
NOOOOOO! YOU MADE HIM SAY THAT DUMB CATCHPHRASE!!! YOU DON'T DO THAT!!!
2310462 tell you what. write your own fic and their doesn't have to even be a trace of stupid catchphrases.