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Odsin Ends


Pinkie Pie was known for disappearing and reappearing all over Ponyville, heck even all of Equestria. But what happens when the pink mare reappears and there's a hitchhiker along for the ride that only she can hear?

"Well, it's not a party, I can tell you that much."

Will the poor deluded mare go insane?


Will her friends abandon her?

"Ugh, no!"

Will she ever learn that eating cake every day will make her plot bulge up like a particularly round and unsightly balloon?

"N-hey! My butt's not that-!"

Tune in and find out!

"Why yo-!"

(Sort of a writing experiment,)

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 30 )

Yes, all my yes.
Also, Inb4 skeeter. seems like one he would like.

Fourth wall breaking is my favorite! Keep up the good work, I'm excited to see the further shenanigans of Pinkie and Narrator :pinkiehappy:

I love everything about this concept and the execution. :raritywink:

Just watch the capitalization- Rarity and Pinkie sometimes are lowercase, and there are some other small hiccups here and there.

But seriously- funny stuff. :twilightsmile:

Oh hey, I did a story like this once. Not too long after, my friend Scribblestick did one. Best of luck to yours though, 'tis interesting.

Yes!:yay: I love these stories where Pinkie fights with the narrator. So funny!:pinkiehappy:

Thanks! I'm glad you like it! I hope that if this Skeeter fellow would find it that he'd like it as well :pinkiesmile:

Oh, believe me, there will be shenanigans a plenty. Shenanigans a plenty. :pinkiehappy:

To battle! Don't throw confections till you see the whites of their eyes!:pinkiecrazy: (Though it would help if he weren't just a voice.)

Awesome, thanks!


I know, I know, but they'd both claim the other started it. :pinkiegasp:

Thank you! I'll try and watch the capitalization in the future. Once again, your comment the other night made me very happy, and I'd like to thank you again for that. :pinkiehappy:

Thank you so much! I plan to, don't worry.

I didn't know anyone had, but after I saw your comment I went and read it, Hilarious! Though in mine, I'm decently certain that I'm not going to have the narrator ever talk directly to her, more like about her and around her.

Thank you! This is sort of just something to do for fun, though I kinda really like the concept myself.

So it's Pinkie talking to the fourth wall...
Brilliant story idea, played out well I must say.

(oh yeah, she wants her ban hammer)

Love it! Especially the way you've been raising the stakes. Just be careful of some capitalization issues and what are probably auto correct problems.

Rarity smiled politely with her head turned, she was quite fond of spike, well as found as any of the ponies could be of a dragon.

Keep up the good work.

lol when the forth wall gets tired of being broken

Skeeter is a person who has commented and read so many stories that if its even vaguely popular he will be first on at least one of the many chapters. I am afraid he has less of a life than me....

...Be careful. I'd be very unhappy if she attacked you and broke the fabric of time and space in the process, causing the Earth to be blown into a million pieces :fluttercry:

Otherwise, Fun! :pinkiehappy:

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoy it!:pinkiesmile: And yeah, Pinkie wouldn't mind a hammer at this point, ban or otherwise:pinkiecrazy:

Fixed! yes, the stakes shall continue to be raised, just, you know, so long as it's still comedic. This isn't gonna turn into a sad fic if I can help it. :pinkiehappy:

:pinkiegasp: Give the man a prize! Hehe.

Oh come now, we all accept that small multicolored horses seem to captivate us and use alot of our time.....so we all have no life, it's nothing to feel ashamed of!:pinkiehappy:

She'd need to find me first!:pinkiecrazy:

It is good, but alas, it is also short. :fluttershysad:

Oh goodness, the way she explained how she breaks the forth wall was just too hilarious :rainbowlaugh:
Keep up the awesome work dude:pinkiehappy:

I'm sorry about that, but there should be more for you to read soon!

I will attempt to the best of my ability my good fellow! and I'm glad that you like the story so far. :pinkiehappy:

WOW...... just wow.... you really got something going here. I was hooked after two paragraphs. Hilarious keep up the good work.:pinkiehappy:

So I'm still digging this, but you might want to go through and do a quick overhaul. There's some capitalization issues and a few hanging quotation marks. :unsuresweetie:

Still, it's a lot of fun, even as it gets darker...

I'm thinking Twilight isn't actually looking to check her in anywhere, this is all the narrator trying to mess with Pinkie.

Well, this had a strange turn of events.

lol this isent pinkie pie vs the narrator this is the fourth wall finally fighting back and can be summed up with one altered quote from a certain show
"Pink Ponies Panic, when the Fourth Wall goes to War"
YOU SIR deserve a medal just because i love your profile Picture i looove background pony

Not only earth but equuis as well my friend
lol excuss me but with this story the fourth wall doesent exist because its being broken so much it doesent have time to reform but when it does it fights back with a vengence

ok THIS is epically awesome lol i loved the way she explained her FW breaking and i loved the way she displayed it more but i swooned at the fact he stopped talking when its was being recorded

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: you're a genius!!!!!! never have I read something this creative. its hilarious!!!!! keep up the good work:twilightsmile:

2940105 It's certainly turning out awesome! I love how she's trying to hide it now, you just know something gonna go wrong. :rainbowwild:The biggest question is how will it all get resolved:duck: But there's no rush to that for now we can just enjoy the craziness :pinkiehappy:
Also I'm a girl, not a guy. :twilightsheepish: But that's okay, it's an easy mistake to make on the net. :derpytongue2:

Man this is just as good as my Narrator fourth wall thing story, and I think this deserves more attention than mine.

You sir, have earned a gold star and like! Keep it up, that was hilarious.

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