You piqued my interest, this can turn out nicely.

Pretty good. Find yourself an editor, and this could be an excellent story.

2804840 In that case i will start writing chapter 2

Heh. Amusing.

Good job for your first story ;b It's kinda funny. But it needs a ton of work.

OKAAAYYY! well let me first say that this could be something but you need to flesh this out more and perhaps give some backstory as to what is really going on. psychotic break, bad cider, a whole host of things can be the cause but give it more than a bad dream and a relationship that while among my faves deserves more than you have given it here.

2806997 All of those things will be reviled later, the reader will be figuring it out along with Twilight, stick around there will be cake

2806997Exactly! Just read the first chapter and I'm just confused. Like that their anthro in the story though.

Wut