• Member Since 30th Jun, 2013
  • offline last seen Dec 16th, 2022

Fiji Firefox


Just another artist writing stories and drawing pictures ^^

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After an incident that had happened at Sweet Apple Acres, a certain yellow pegasus seems to have feelings for the sturdy stallion running the farm...

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Okay, I like how this is headed so far, too hard to tell with only 300 words for a prologue, my thinking on this though, is that you combine all of these chapters and just make this a one-shot with one chapter.

Hey this is good. I did n't pay too much attention to grammar and punctuation, but I did notice one flaw.the chapters are way too short. You should try to make each chapter at least 1K words long. Other than that it was wonderful.

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