• Member Since 12th Apr, 2013
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SkyStorm


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couple spelling errors, nothing to large.all and all for first time clop not half bad. a bit more paceing and sensation detail would be good. along with description's of what precisely she's fantasizing about.

i don't know, this sound like one clean story hehehe (pun intended):facehoof:

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I feel like I need a shower after that pun...:pinkiesick:

Yeah some spelling errors, but other than that not half bad. Good job!

For a first clop, it isn't too bad. Others have already told you about the spelling errors, so I won't go into that. Keep writing!

I wonder who pulled the curtain away :twilightsmile:......

You know what would help a lot? This.

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Holy crap someone make that now. Please. With sugar on top.

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Batman? Yes, he pulled the curtian back. He then proceeded to take his bat-dildo and use it on her whilst he contenplated the meaning of his exsistence.

I think my brain has melted...

2807376 Bat dildo, eh?
At least it's not a bat credit card...

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That comes later...

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You're being sarcastic aren't you.....:raritywink:

Uhgh FINE! I'll just wait till the sequel.

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I think you mean squeak-uel. I love puns.

I want a sequel to this story.:flutterrage: This is really good keep it up.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

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Maybe for the squeak-uel I shall reveal who pulled the curtain back, and have them join her in the shower...:raritywink:

Hint: the pony who pulled back the curtain was the avengeful rapeing spider rarity washed down the drain.

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That is possible the scariest thought picture I have ever had...:raritycry:

NEXT, ON FAN FIC THEATOR...
JEFF THE SPIDER, FINALLY REACHING ADULTHOOD, FINDS EMOTIONAL INTIMACY NOT FROM BILLY BUT FROM A WHITE EQUNINE. WILL HE BITE THE FORBIDDIN FRUIT? FIND OUT IN ONE GRIM TAIL: COME INTO MY PARLOR SAID THE PONY TO THE SPIDER....

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Between Rarity and a giant spider pony, I don't know who would end up being the rapist...

My vote goes to Rarity...:raritywink:

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