Alberto Garcia is a 33-year-old Bolivian Aymara Indian worker who was abandoned by his father at an early age. A kick from a horse when on holiday made him equestrophobic since the tender age of three. He eventually grew up into a fine young man, but developed a horrible temper that caused him to not be able to hold on to a job for long. Things take a head after one night when Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash fly into Alberto's dormitory during a short work-related stint in the Canary Islands, from that night on, Alberto's life changes forever...
Chapters (15)
I hope you didn't actually sit yourself down and write all of this because holy hell.........
@Snuggly: It actually took me a whole year to get this story written and finalised. By the way, who are you actually, and where are you from?
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Why would ask someone something like that?
@RandomGamer: So that I will know where all my readers around the world are from. It's our way of finding out more about other fellow pony fans :) I mean, wouldn't you also want to know where your readers are from, who they are, what kind of stories they like etc? It's also a way to broaden my writing genre repertoire :)
Where are YOU from btw? :D
Um... did you just post 90,000 words in one go?
4011190 Tomoko: No, it took me a whole year to write this entire fan fiction. I began work in February 2013, and only just completed it yesterday.
4011102 You know, there's a little >> on the message so that you can reply directly to it. @ doesn't work
To answer your question - Nope, nope and nope. I have no reason to ask my readers questions like that.
To answer your second question - I'm Random Gamer and I'm from the internets
4011217 Thanks RandomGamer for the input. Hmmm maybe I guess it's a case of personal taste; some people prefer to ask that while others don't. I respect that :)
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Okay, look, publishing all 90k words at once is a bad idea. Very, very few people will want to read through 90k words of backlog when they probably already have that much on their read later list. I'd recommend unpublishing most of them. Maybe leave the first few chapters up so that it's not so daunting to the readers.
4011223 Thanks for the feedback. I'll probably unpublish from Chapters 7 onwards as I might have some stuff to proofread in Chapters 7 through 9 anyways.
4011222 Well, you can proudly call yourself the first. Seriously. I haven't seen a single author who does that.
May I comment on the description of this story?
Why would anyone list villains, places and characters in the decription? It's supposed to describe the story, not spit out everything used in it. It's basically an info dump. People hate info dumps.
Edit the story, pick just main characters or groups and the rest as Other or OC. Use just the first paragraph of the decription and get rid of the rest. It's nonsesical and serves no purpose.
Just for curiosity, did you have an editor on board or was this written solely by you?
4011333 Thank you. I have removed that already.
4011280 Just thought it would be necessary. But yeah, since you told me that it was too much information, I've updated the description as you've requested. Now all you see is the first paragraph and not the rest.
Was there an editor on board? Well, for a couple of episodes, yes. Just out of curiosity, are you going to ask me next as to who this/these editor(s) was/were?
4011344 No.
4015030 No worries then. Thanks so much for the advice anyway :)
4019787 Sorry but I have to delete your comment and block you because you are spamming. While we welcome constructive criticism, we do not welcome any form of spam. Appreciate your understanding. Thank you.
I......this concept is certainly......a unique take on the "human meets ponies and weird stuff happens" genre.